Imagine if an introverted kid would obtain unlimited powers without knowing it.
Sounds like an awkward situation... Don't you think?
The boy lives in his own world of fantasy and dreams about becoming a legend.
Well, the good thing is that a psychotic demon granted his wish, but not the way he wanted.
Zack gained the promised powers with the additional introvert translator for his thoughts.
The author describes this story as a big roller coaster for the boy's personality.
Sassiness, badass stuff, straights facts...
We have it.
(The only thing that we don't have is a good author, so you should slap her for possible grammar mistakes and give some feedback.)
Started out almost strong, but fizzled out after about 10 chapters or so. The next 20 chapters doesn't develop the story or the character much and even the action feels lackluster.
The protagonist is supposed to be 19 years old in later chapters, but feels more like an angsty twelve year old. He also wants revenge, for what? He was mistreated in school, but there are no distinct characters to tie that want of revenge to.
His mother died, he wants revenge for that as well, but there's nothing to relate to here either. Then he gets some form of power, again no explanation or progress.
After that the character masturbates around for 20 chapters or so, with no story progression or character progression. Sure, maybe there is a story or character progression, but me as a reader has gotten no information that makes me believe so.
There are a lot of tags, but being a thief makes no antihero, the protagonist doesn't seem that intelligent, there has been no mystery solving at all, and I don't see any in the foreseeable future.
This is a bit subjective, but even the action is subpar and not engaging at all.
All in all, this feels like yet another promising story that will never reach the end because the author doesn't know how to progress the story. I have no problem with slow starts in general, but I think the reader needs something to relate to, a goal even if it is far in the future, for example a villain or something. Right now the story is hanging in limbo, if there even is a story.
Personally I want to see some development somewhere, I really want to like this story.
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