This story is not a story to be read from the Main characters (mc) perspective, as the author forces many things on the MC that both he and the readers both don't want. 

As he is writing the story he wants to write even if it is seen as unnatural or forced, an example is the first major instance of forced plot is when MC is apart of Garp's crew to rescue a princess from a pirate crew.  MC runs ahead of everyone and is heavily wounded by taking out many pirates on his own, then he thinks while heavily wounded and not capable of taking more damage he can beat the captain by himself, who in a pirate crew is the strongest one. So naturally he his killed but before he dies of his wounds he uses the system to maim himself to be unable to use haki so he can live.

Now the contrived nature of this is:

1 Garp is one of the strongest marines that views MC as a grandson when seeing him trying to run ahead he would have chastised him to be a team player and work as a group.

2 Garp's observational haki can cover a small town easily so he would have seen all this and been there in an instant but instead does nothing to save the MC he views as his grandson.

3 MC is by deaths door if he takes more damage and know that garps crew, his crew is here to take down the pirate crew and save the princess, and that they are just right behind him (somehow so slow he had time to fight the whole pirate crew stealthy without them arriving) but thinks he should go and fight the captain and not leave it to the marines behind him.

Later on in the story the readers ask why the MC did not learn any of the Rokushiki, the author said "Garp probably taught koby the moon walk and hardening. However Garp was with Rick for about 2 years, 3 at best. Considering Rick was very young and learning the six-style is hell (for the CP9, it was) maybe Garp was reluctant? Or thought that Rick wasn't ready yet."

but in one piece Koby used Soru after training under garp for a couple months at most and after two years under garp he had mastered the Rokushiki techniques, so it is not a reason but an excuse to force the MC to be weak.

So as I read a story from the MC perspective it is unenjoyable (1.5 stars), but if you read unattached it is an good story (4.3 stars).

"This is not a story that goes with the flow and that I just come up with new ideas and write them. " Author's view.

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All first 9 chapters, 8 of which really feels like it's One Piece, are unimportant lie, character nerfed for no real reason just for plot convenience and reasoning, both in story and meta, is very bad. Judging by other rewiew, the same stuff will happen time and time again. 

Why use Gamer-esque system to make character weaker? 20 years to reach the level of Luffy at the start of his jorney under Garps direct training? Having brains when it's needed for cool scene, but being stupid rest of the time? 

This story not intertaining, it's enraging. 

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It's one of the few great one piece fanfics out there just like imbreak's (ultimate fruit) in my opinion people are very greedy with what they want some might not like the story because of certain things but if you think you can do better just do it yourself and some people will give critique because of the same thing. Keep on writing what you like and give it your all 

Yours sincerely 

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As of ch 62 this seems very nice for me, without  spoilers I would say:

There are a few typos but grammar is overall good and gets corrected when pointed out. 

The plot is nice and his years as a marine where a great experience for the reader.

A few mistakes from the MC that might stress some people but he does not remember everything from the one piece plot just like a normal person, so this is a plus for me.

Some jokes from the author do break my focus/immersion due to blatant 4th fall breaking  (Author! L-Leave 4th wall-chan alone!!) but it is not something that should be used to judge the work.

You feel my review/opinion is not informative or good enough? Too bad, read the novel and do your own. ≪3

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The story is amazing. Frick everyone else who is made about the no Haki part. The author wants a long and intreseting story so let him have it. It is a refreshing view from other one piece fan fics. Plus with no Haki for now he can fully focus on honing his devil fruit ability and his other aspects.

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Ok I do not write many reviews but I had to lay down my thoughts on this one.

There are 2 milestones on this novel Ch10 and Ch29

Ch10 Rick makes a incredibly stupid mistake which seems so stupid that it makes it seem that the author is purposefully nerfing him (which he is *cough*). 

I dropped the novel at ch10 and only to give it another chance after I saw it in trending, however I had to trudge though ch10-29.

After 29 is great and I binge read that sh*t like an addiction. I pulled an all-nighter even tho I knew I had graveyard shift in the morning. 

While I wouldn't say he is well balanced for his team. He also doesn't try to show them up. He supports the other characters and allows them to develop as people and pirates. 

His harem was built well though action and feelings, rather then the harems you see in other novels where women flock to them just because cuz they exist. 

This novel is great if you can make your way through the the marine training.

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This story went on to be an absolute sh*tE

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There seems to be a lot of controversy about this story, lol. There definitely are points that leave room for (partially quite easy) improvements, but it doesn't change the fact that it has major strong points as well. For example dialogues and interactions between characters - and these are the backbone of any story!

The rating doesn't do the story justice when compared to similar fanfictions on this site! Hence, I want to encourage the author to keep up the good work :)

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If you can read past ch 10 it's pretty good. Not really great as the author left out snu snu. But it is worth the read

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