My name is Rafual Arduech and I am a wanderer and a writer. Today I choose the hot topic of the north.
Leader of the separatist faction called, The Pack.
The rumored Lich King, one named Savior Of The Moon, Champion Of The Klug, or the Great General. (depend on the race you ask this question.), Mister Erwin.
He proved himself in numerous battles against the forces of general Leonhard.
He also has a weird ability to unite different races under a single banner.
This ability took the interest of many experts in the branch of politics and war. Well, almost all of those idiots thought the same thing.
Erwin's ways are stupid and cowardly! He is destroying humankind's superiority over other races.
In my opinion, his unity is the reason for his strength. No army in the north was ever able to stretch and adapt this fast.
Back to our topic, the person himself, I want to give what I learned about his physical appearance.
I didn't saw him in person, but I learned that he was tall as a lance, and his muscles were big enough to make him look like a bear. There were also other details like his blue eyes and brown hair, but that's not that important.
After learning about his physical appearance, I began searching for background information about him, but I found nothing.
Not many people (only his most trusted generals) know where he came from or who he is, but one thing is sure.
This frighteningly genius general slowly conquers what he wants. Other small feodal kingdoms around regional power known as the Vassal State Of North must be ready.
Empires hands are already full because of the demon's invasion. They cannot afford to send their soldiers into the already chaotic northern region.
The emperor left you in his hands, and you! His rival, you shall prepare for a fight.
I am nothing but a humble writer, and that's what I write for today.
the story is I interesting and intriguing, however, I had to drop it by chapter 7 because both the sentence structure and the grammar are very bad. I advice a complete rewrite, not just to fix the many grammatical mistakes but to build the story back from the ground up with a readable structure because as it is now, it looks like the work of someone that just started learning english for a few days.
I give it a 2/5 that can become a solid 4/5 if it got a good rewrite.
(Sorry if my review sounds offensive, disheartening and/ or belittling)
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