Extremely boring and irritating Fan-fiction. I`ve read up to chapter 36 where nothing has happened, so many chapters are about "Muh Feelings" and its extremely Americanized. This isn`t a Naruto Fanfic, this is an "American we live in a wonderful 1st world country and we respeck women and feelings" novel wrapped in a Naruto fantasy world. What a waste of time.

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The best fanfic I have read so far

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One of my favorite fanfics! I also like unique premise of starting in lightning village 

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Wonderful fanfic, the best I've ever come across 

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Hope the author continues. One of my personal favourites.

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A novel with great potential

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Easily one the best stories on here, this story leaves you craving for more, the author is extremely talented and consistent when it come it comes to his story.

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Really like the story. It easy to read. The story is really entertaining to read. The main character seems to be well thought out.

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I have no idea why this is so highly rated (maybe it gets better in later chapters?).

  The first 5 chapters are huge and absurdly expository and intrusive, what do I mean by that? I mean that the MC dies and someone appears explaining everything to him, from why he is there, what he has to do, what he can or cannot do, the powers he has and what will happen in the world, this is the expository part, now about the intrusive part - the MC has 5 chances to make a wish that will be granted, the world will change so that this wish is granted and damn it, poor writing resource for the author to have a way out if he does sh*t and doesn't know how to solve the problem situation, like for example his first request - the author doesn't want to have to write how the MC will manage to become stronger he uses one of his wishes to become a human-alien hybrid with infinite potential that immediately triples the chakra and improves the MC's control and of course leaves him an easy alternative to improve his chakra pool ("does my baby have to work hard to get stronger? Nah") that of course not to mention the guide that appears every now and then for no reason just to "mock" the MC, the guide and the MC are horrible characters and I'll talk more about them later.

  About the world it is mentioned that it is a false world created by gods and that if he reaches the final outcome of the story he gets a second chance in his world and that he is there just to make fun of the gods and that the mere presence of the MC will change things in the world and that he will need to do something so that the story goes back on track and has a closure like the original (yes very expository), first: this explanation is not for the MC it is for the reader, it is like a book of rules which does not make sense considering that one of these rules it is simply one of those rules that breaks all the rules in the world (yes very intrusive), second: this explanation is completely unnecessary and only impoverishes the story by wasting the reader's patience and adds nothing to the narrative, if it were just thrown there it would be much better.

  The characters all without exception are unidirectional and as deep as a coin, here is a list with everything they have up to chapter 35:

mc's sister: loving sister and is a shinobi with space-time jutsu

3rd raikage - 3rd raikage (raikage=hokage) he gives a random scroll to the MC (that's all the character's function)

tai - "companion" of the MC who is smart and has lots of information for the MC (the author's excuse for the MC not having to spend time gathering information)

suzu - sister of the gold and silver brothers (the guys who ate biju meat remember? Not me either), definitely not the mc's romantic partner and much less the 3rd member of mc's group of 2 ok?

MC - The author says he has several p.h. Ds and that he is very intelligent, which does not materialize in the story, he is proud, arrogant, dirty mouth (he lives cursing without any purpose) and evil, this last even demonstrates his "great" intelligence when he does not make the most respectful respect in front of the most respected figures of the village (that he is an invader from another world?).

guide - the character who goes out of his way to be annoying to the MC and the reader, to the MC he doesn't answer questions right and to the reader he's a character who just shows up to be the target of the mc's foul mouth and to conveniently avoid the MC having to go out of his way to figure things out (again author intrusion), like when the MC uses his wish and the guide explains all the mini details to make things work or how he constantly reminds the MC that he can't be found out or when he talks to the MC c that he has to make sure a certain character passes the exam because he has a trait that will affect another character in another village that will do what needs to be done for the story to continue in canon fashion.

Apparently the story becomes good after 40, so much so that I made an effort to give the novel a second chance but 20 chapter later (I stopped at 15 the last time) and I don't feel the slightest desire to continue, in 35 chapters 3 years pass and there is absolutely no development at all, literally if you take any character they are the same, how did MC learn kage busho no jutsu? A rank B ninjutsu without explanation or effort. For me, this story has 2 central problems, the author's haste to write the scenes he wants to write and that's why he goes over logic (with wishes and time skips) and ignores the development of the characters and the world, during these 35 chapters he only mentions what happened but we are never shown what happened or how it happened, I'm going to ask some questions to better exemplify what I mean: how does MC study and what does he study? Does he have a notepad? Does he only read? (Since technically he should already know this) how does his sister guarantee he studied? Is it through evidence? Are these paper or oral tests? How does his physical training work? Are they only fights when his sister is at home or is there a schedule he follows even when his sister is away? Why the hell is he better at taijutsu than the other clan kids? Shouldn't they also have been trained by the elders of the clans? He mentions experiments on chakra that he does by himself how does he do these experiments? What are the experiments? The child of the other clans not to do this type of training? What are the chakra control training methods he uses? How does the teacher teach in the classroom? What does the MC do in the classroom? Technically he already knows the material so he stays in the room looking at nothing waiting for the time to pass? Is he better at chakra control because he doesn't need to study and instead trains during class? What types of workouts does he do during all three years at the academy? Are they push ups? Abs? Race? Is he the best in the room at everything? Who is the second? By how many times is he better than the rest? How did he break into the hospital? Was it not supervised? Did he pass by potentially genins unnoticed? What were the oils he got from tai? How did he know that tai planted? The guide I said? How did he know which path he could take to escape the village? No one noticed he disappeared? Where was the town he went to get the bait? Which path did he take to get to the bait? And then where did he go? Which way? Wasn't the body heavy for him to carry alone? Did he take it in a cuddle? How did he keep the bait alive? How did he finance this trip? Did he take food or buy it during the trip? Did he manage to avoid all the surveillance of several countries and all the villages along the way? How did he hide to avoid being found by the alien patriarch? Where was the place he put the poison? How did he put it? Didn't it have a single protection on the air intakes?

and many more questions that I'm tired of thinking about, nothing is explained or shown, it's just mentioned in passing as if it didn't matter, of course I don't need an answer to all the questions and much less need you to explain all this to me, what I want is to be shown these things I want to see the experiments, the training, the lectures, his interactions, I want to see things happening, all these 35 chapters can be summarized in: he trained, he studied, he ran away from the village to redo his body, he passed the exam, if someone reads this and skips to chapter 35 he will know everything that happened and I won't miss any nuance because we weren't shown anything it was only briefly mentioned that it happened. And the second thing is the author's need to meddle in the story, which if you've read the review you already know what I'm talking about.

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The story is really good. The pogression is amazing. The pace as well it doesnt feel rushed and covering aspect of every character arcs or normal arcs. I think in of the main strength is the way mr proper has set up this story. So much info on the naruto verse and the way he has been developing the antagonists and how the shift is talking its place due to cause and effect.. I really love that its going into its unique story line which will somewhat be similar in ending to naruto main story but the process and event will drastically change to the reaching that ending.. Maybe it might be even completely different which I welcome because why not it makes the journey even more engaging..

Character feel alive. No cliches.. The interaction and humor is nice. All side and main focus character have a presence and they play their roles.. Heck some even managed to get close go discovering raymond identity..  its  also the unique way raymond is pogression not in a traditional sense but utilizing his knowledge and the set of tools he's given..  

Ive read a lot of wenovel but I think this is one of top contenders to the best one.. Im so excited for the chunin exam and the next chunin exam where Naruto takes his stand the events that follow.. Im really hoping the main plot events to be different and im excited to see how mr proper develop this.. This will be my enjoyment for the coming years till the story is completed.. Probably may take 800 chapter or so many be who knows the more the better.. Ill be along the ride.. I recommend anyone to try it..

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