The wondering reincarnated demon
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3.6 (7 ratings)
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Synopsis
A human on earth has died due to a heart attack from stress and he was given a choice become a demon or become the hero and he chose demon cause he didn't want to be tied down and have everyone expect something from him.
Warning
I still suck at writing
Image is not mine)
Genre
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Table of Contents
First review :) (Take said review with a grain of salt, I'm not an English major.)
1. Typos - If there is anything to fix, it's this.
(eg. -Notis ---> -Notice or -conform ---> -Confirm)
2. Capitalisation - Just a small gripe.
(eg. -Success ---> -Success or Yes I would ---> Yes I would)
3. Punctuation - Don't forget commas!
(eg. Thats when I grab the guy who was about to call me weak and set him down in front of me putting both my hands on each side of his head slowly pushing in until his head gives in and blood goes everywhere. ---≫ That's when I grab the guy who was about to call me weak and set him down in front of me, putting both my hands on each side of his head, slowly pushing in until his head gives in and blood goes everywhere.)
Conclusion:
It looks like the author is rushing to release the book, not proofreading their work and resorting to simplistic vocabulary and grammar.
Advice:
Proofread, trust me It goes a long way. Go through what you've written in your head and ask yourself if it makes sense and where can you improve. (If you struggling, a fresh pair of eyes can help) you could also spice up the start of your sentences too (don't use words like then or I) !
-Hopefully, this review can help you improve, Author.
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