Aidan was bringing his military career to a close, after a little over six years of fighting on an earth now littered with dimensional tears. Leaving one of the human resources buildings after completing the final details on his pension paperwork, he finds himself being cut short as he suddenly blacks out while driving out of the parking lot. The next moment, Aidan awoke in a clearing with no idea where he was, or who he now is.
Planned Release schedule is T/F
Any feedback whatsoever is appreciated, I want to do the best I can for this story.
At CH9 the story shifts perspective from multiple first person perspectives to only the mc first person and third person for the rest. Eventually those chapters will be reworked.
This is my first work so i apologize if your eyes glaze over at any point.
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One of the more interesting gender bender stories. This seems to be the first one I found that isn’t harem or yuri trash. Keep up the good work??
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I am really liking this story it feel different the most other on the site and seem like the characters are going to go through real growth processes and not be ok right of the back I dont know what to come yet but I say it fit the wholesome category
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Good characters
They actually progress and are not only 2d cut-outs of tropes. They have a life, their own perspective and don't just immediately love the MC because it is the MC. On the topic of the MC I think that they are quite well realised.
Their past does haunt them in dreams as an effect of their trauma and they don't just transition without a problem in the first five chapters. They still struggle with it in cp 38 and probably a lot longer, as it realistically should
Decent Writing
First few Chapters are bad so just get through them, it gets quite a lot better.
Good storyThe story/plot also seems to be going in a good direction, it has a slow but steady pacing with decently sized chapters so not too much has happened yet outside of establishing characters and setting and doing general groundwork, but from what has happened and what we know the story should just become better the longer it goes
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An actual amazingly well written story. The only faults are the occasional grammar mistake that are easy to gloss over and I never end up remembering by the time I’m done with a chapter. As a gender bender story, so far it’s handled everything really well. In fact, most things are written realistically and believable, such that I truly believe that this kind of world could theoretically exist in more than just fiction. Overall, a splendid read, and it not being like the harem or yuri garbage that exist literally everywhere is an extremely rare find on this site. So far the romance and smut is also confined to side story chapters, so those who don’t like those can skip them happily.
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I think this story is good if you are searching for a semi-fluffy, almost carefree, identity crisis and fantasy story.
Pros: characters have motivations and actual feelings, preety good stats sistem that is being developed and a MC that haves feelings.
Cons: the story is dark and has a semi-Op (not necesaryli bad but it is like that) MC, also the church of that god is weird like no motivations or nothing.
This story is good for now and deserves a try but if you're looking for a harem story go away heretic.
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