I'm poor. I'm fat. The girl I like just turned me down and I even got beat up for it. I just wanted to go home and play some video games. Now, My life is a video game called Dungeon Life, and I'm expected to risk it every day for rewards. Well, too bad I picked a supporting class and am too socially awkward to get by in a party. Wait... this world has slavery? I can have beautiful women fight for me, and then warm my bed every night? Perhaps this world isn't so bad after all.
If you've read Slave Harem in the Labyrinth of Another World, this is my take on the slice-of-life genre. It's about navigating dungeons, fighting monsters, and enjoying the finer things in life with wealth gained. Yes, the chapters are short.
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Way better than the premise promised. It sounds like Slave Harem in Another World, but unlike that flat, bland, time waster, this one actually takes the time to explore the world and characters.
Some things are pretty convenient, but what's new in an isekai series?
In this short time, this author's been able to create a compelling plot and character duo, though the real test to their writing ability starts here.
That said, I'd be willing to give this story a 4 or even better if the author didn't split up every chapter for cheap views.
Releasing short chapters every day is bad (IMO), but further splitting those chapters into three every day and separating them by 30 minutes is a terrible abuse of the system.
For that reason alone, I dropped the score quite a bit, and I wouldn't be surprised if a lot of others who gave low stars but no review felt the same.
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tl;dr version of this review:
I'm perfectly fine with reading a bad novel occasionally as it helps put into perspective what makes a good novel 'good', but this novel is a crime against literature itself. Not the subject matter, as I have zero problems with that, but the general quality of the writing is akin to toxic waste and the author blatantly could not care less. Pick almost any other random novel not by this author and you will do better than this.
For a longer explanation:
Oh gods, where do I even start.
Plot holes, plot holes everywhere! In the first part alone, I was able to spot over half a dozen places where the author established something as fact and then proceeded to almost immediately contradict himself. For an early example of this; it is established that the MC is completely unable to read this world's language at all, yet when he goes into a shop selling accessories shortly afterwards the novel then tells us that each item on display has a small written note explaining their effects, and he checks out one of them.
The general characterization of the characters themselves is close to non-existent, rather than try to create a rich world and make the characters feel full of life, the author seems to think that describing what somebody looks like and giving them a name is all you must do to create a compelling character. Rather than try to give them any life, he goes down the opposite route by making every non-main character a generic stick figure who gets referred to only by their title so that the main characters will stand out in comparison. After getting past the first three volumes, I still feel almost nothing for the first girl. Barely a few passing words are given to make the reader feel like they understand her on an emotional level; we know hardly anything about her that isn't readily available on the surface. In a completely different novel I am reading, it describes a random woman that was passing by the MC, and in that lone paragraph I felt like I understood that passer-by as a person better than the main girl of this one after over 150 chapters.
The way the plot progresses is in a word, awful. I keep getting the impression that the author keeps losing control of where the plot is going and repeatedly must force it back on track however he can. This has led to many instances of the developments feeling artificial and contrived where some new ability is gained or discovered with impeccable timing, or characters make completely illogical and bizarre choices with little to no justification that coincidentally solve the author's problem. Assuming it doesn't happen simply "just because" with no further justification.
If this was a new author's first attempt at writing or something, I would cut him some slack as everybody has to start somewhere - it's not, this guy claims to be a semi-professional author who's writing a bunch of novels and charging people for them as his day job. This book rips off a comparatively much better novel and is riddled with typos and similar errors that the author refuses to fix, in his own words because "If people want good quality they can come to my site and pay for it there." - absolutely no chance, I would sooner give my money to a random drug addict on the street than let him see a penny of it.
The rating I'm giving is only because the site won't let me give a zero.
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This the author of this story had an interesting idea regarding the origin of labyrinths. This is a story element I don't recall reading in anywhere else, so that really got my hopes up for this story.
Unfortunately though that one good idea was apparently all the author had to offer and by itself that's not enough to carry the rest of the story. The turning point for me happened when
our slave-owning main character gave an impassioned speech about the evils of racism and the entire bus stood up and clapped, I mean the town decided to make him the mayor.
If that scene was a parody it would be one thing but, no, I think the author was actually trying to be serious. This author literally has a toddler's level of understanding when it comes to group conflicts.
There are other minor flaws in the story but they aren't worth mentioning. It's a shame that the author's one good idea had to be shackled to to this story. The concept really deserves a better treatment.
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One thing I noticed on most novels these days.
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1. The Protagonist does not have self confidence. (Typically no balls, always retreats before he even tried. I know that most of the argument of their authors are usually survivability. But think of it, if you have a protagonist that runs away immediately before the fight got even started. I mean look at this one for me its better for the Protagonist to taste defeat rather than running away it will give the story more color into it. Also look at this situation there are so many people that can save him if things go haywire yet he chose to runaway. If that is how you see it in your life you will not achieve anything. There was this one line that become popular before it is "We must fight to runaway" this words is the real deal, not the "lets runaway from a fight".)
2. In terms of power Protagonist are usually overtaken by their girls. I mean literally their girls can kill them a thousand times already.
3. Protagonist are too softhearted, if your style is to runaway before a fight then you have to be cruel enough, and not too magnanimous on every decision (Stop thinking with your d*ck). Those type of personalities just don't sync well enough. If these events were to happen in real life then be prepared to have a lot of funeral because your enemies will hit you hard where it hurt (EG: Killing those close to you before you.)
4. There are many more but it will take too many words and im a lazy person to type those.
P.S: I'm just saying my opinion and did not say I don't like the story after coming across this action. I'm not the type of person who will drop a novel just because there are some actions I hate. I will still give this novel a try but of course I have my own tolerance as im not a masochist if it hurts for me to read I will immediately drop it. Im not judging a novel by its Pre chapters who knows what will happen on later chapters right?.
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1. He realy lacks self confidence. He did not want to try even if that is one of his path to survive. If its not forced due to circumstances theres no way this gaysh*t will survive.
2. He wants something but he was not working to get it. That is a bad example I just want to remind the authors that is not how the world works. And they have a lot of readers, what if some kid reads this and adopts it to his personality. You have contributed to the downfall of mankind there.
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It has the same line of thinking as 'Slave Harem in another world', but I think this story is better. MC's class is suport, which I usually play in most games, one of the reasons why I became a fan of the story.
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Is this the best web novel I've ever read? No. Do I enjoy it? Yes!
I have issues with how the character behaves now and then, I usually don't really like the "cowardly" tag, I'm not saying the character has to be a battle maniac either. Otherwise I think the characters are fairly cohesive, although a little on the simple side. Character cohesiveness is a pet peeve of mine, so I like that.
What I hope to see in this story is some form of progress where the MC grows a little in the bravery department over time as he and the party grows stronger, at least so that the MC doesn't act cowardly when there is absolutely no risk. I understand that the cowardly part is used for comedic relief in most stories with the tag, but personally I think that it's unrealistic that harem members would respect a coward, so I think it's better writing if the cowardly MC does his best to act brave even though he's a coward and tries to hide the fact that he's scared and even fails to hide it sometimes. It requires more from the author to pull it off though.
I enjoy "slice of life" elements in stories, but I feel that the author have some content that is not exactly "slice of life", but more just filler that doesn't really progress the story, sometimes less is more.
I hope for a lot more character development in the future, I'm looking forward to reading more of the story!
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A pretty well written story about someone who is not only in a new world, but is also firmly in the supportive role. He clearly isn't someone who is going around kicking in faces and in fact has to put forth some effort to get what he wants. He's actually somewhat below average all around, neither brave nor strong and certainly not a genius.
That's not to say he doesn't have the potential to be a strong leader, it's more that his potential is in actually leading and helping others become better than they were when they join him. He has to actually grow to get to that point though. I find this fairly refreshing after seeing many stories about protagonists that may as well be gods "lowering" themselves to slightly above average levels and making their followers stronger as a way to fail at concealing their own overpowered selves.
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This story is a wonderful piece of work. Despite seeming low effort compared to some of this author’s other novels it’s still one that stands tall on its own. This story isn’t like the authors others that take more unique routes, but it executes a well-known genre in a way that none others have. The idea of lore, in particular, is spectacular, certainly not something I could ever think of. If you want to know what I mean, just read on.
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TL;DR: It's good even with it's flaws, but read it on the author's website, there he strings 3 chapters together so it doesn't feel too short.
I also don't like that the author already has hundreds of chapters ready behind a paywall, what you see are the chapters that he slowly releases for free.
PROS:
This novel is just enjoyable overall, even with it's problems.
CONS:
Overall, It has a lot of flaws, annoyances and plot holes, but I still enjoyed it.
It frustrates me to no end that there are hundreds of chapters done out there because I don't have the means for international transactions so I can't buy it regardless of whether I want to or not, even if it only costed five cents.
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Wow, I can't believed I caught up to the most recent chapter in less than one week. Great story with a cool and interesting leveling system
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