The plot is over all good, but there are multiple issues sprinkled across it. The story will have a place in my heart since it has believable characters and plot armor.
The dialogue is top tier, and believable.
Only major issue preventing a 5 star rating is the bad grammar, it isn't that bad since the story is still readable.
It's extremely fast paced, almost like a story outline meant to span over the course of a couple of years than an actual full novel. The ending though left me disappointed.
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It was interesting to see how a couple of the characters ended up in the years to come and the short comic of her beginning to wake up.
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But I think it just needed one more chapter to give that satisfying ending to everything. There is just far to much that happened at the end, with characters that really, I didn't feel much for.
If this was taken instead for an outline, it's nearly perfect. It just needs the flesh between the bones to make it a really interesting story.
Schwarz -‖- Der Wille zur Macht
Villainess, noble girl, princess.
Reincarnation is a fickle matter, unpredictable and capricious, uncaring and unforgiving in nature.
Stranded in unknown lands, in a different time and age by t
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I have read your story, and you have some wrong grammar/bad grammar somewhere on the chapters. But the story is still good so far, keep it up!
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First time writing a review, so it will suck
The plot is over all good, but there are multiple issues sprinkled across it. The story will have a place in my heart since it has believable characters and plot armor.
The dialogue is top tier, and believable.
Only major issue preventing a 5 star rating is the bad grammar, it isn't that bad since the story is still readable.
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It's extremely fast paced, almost like a story outline meant to span over the course of a couple of years than an actual full novel. The ending though left me disappointed.
It was interesting to see how a couple of the characters ended up in the years to come and the short comic of her beginning to wake up.
If this was taken instead for an outline, it's nearly perfect. It just needs the flesh between the bones to make it a really interesting story.
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