Story is fine... But it feels empty. It is all wishiwashi storywise.
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The MC starts with a mission to free the believers of the goddess that brought him here, while she is seen as heretic so he must be careful and sneaky, but that's not how he acts more what the author forces. He acts careless but the others are conviniently also part of the religion or have like no suspicions. The travel to the first big city is quite good storywise but after here arrives the author seems to lose focus. Instead of focusing how to safe his target he gets into a relationship with 2 noble woman (romance arc/subplot) that conviniently are on his side instantly in a society that forces people in certain mindsets. Than he starts to attend school there (school arc), but actually does not attend or has any important contact with the school residence. Then he gives a f**k about sneak and goes on a shopping tour while spending big (Like no one knows this guy and he is in the captial of the country with all the important people in it). Okay that's still fine, but than there is suddenly a dungeon and he goes into dungeondiving multiple chapters with a team there. (Dungeon arc) Of course there is no sneak involved, but hey you know: Convinient teammembers with the same believes in a brainwashed society.
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So in summary. In my opinion the author starts the loose foxus in his story line trying to implemet multiple genre and elements at the same time while not finishing or advancing the others, which causes the story to become inconsistend and the charaters dubious.
There will be a lot of criticism about story. I'll start with good things:
good world backstory
interesting story setup
a nice psychological and philosophical undertone through story progression
Bad things. Just be ready for there are a lot of them:
Overpowered MC that has to be adult but acts like he has dissociative identity disorder. IE has multiple personalities. His act through out story is not clearly defined and he is not fitting the narrative we got of him. He is more of a set of toddlers with puberty issues
Cruelty of the world that we don't witness. Just passing sentences here and there. Everyone seems to know how bad it is but we get nothing of that. One or two bad scenes do not change the fact that world is not as cruel as it is depicted. Slavery is wrong and here we have two scenes that suggest us why it is bad. And they are not even persuasive. Liberating slaves from slavery especially on a level when they are controlled on a soul level (not even through carrot and stick) will only lead to a huge f**king mess. People that never been free, or were free for small amount of their life, will need to change their lifestyle, belief, behavior. That does not change the fact that slaves that are used to being ones and live a good life do not wish to be "liberated" either. Free will and free life has responsibility aspect to it that is a burden that even modern man fail to carry on a huge amount of occasions. Magical word with mostly medieval society? It would need monumental effort to achieve even small changes
MC is having a blast with his "servants", "wives" and recently his dungeon hunting group. Everything is on a silver platter with no hardship and there is nothing that really hints us about this so called cruelty and his mission. A world savior that has everything done for him. He has God's help. Cool. So why does the world even need him? Let the God it's magic. Putting story into position where MC is redundant to his "role" is bad to the story itself. It is some slice of life type literotica content instead of a novel that shows some actual action
Every hardship MC has is forced. Does not really fit his overpowered narration. It hangs there as if MC is a trained spec ops that is not really new to magic and everything but has to act like typical Japanese magic academy cadet that above others thanks to plot hammer. Stammering like a shy girl in love. He does not act mature. He does not act smart. He does not act overpowered. He is lost and has no real traits or actions taken that fully define him as a believable character. We can argue that he is biding his time but overlooking intense plot holes let us really think about it. A person that is to save the world would actually try to see what is he going to fix first and why it needs fixing. How do you know what you need to do if you never saw actual problem? Seeing a bit of slavery does not set you up on fixing that. Definitely not f**king around in chill environment with no challenge
Story has no thrill to it and magic academy killed any focus story had making it look like it is some world of warcraft dungeon clearing rip off
Story has good potential even with OP MC to start with. The world building is also pretty decent without obvious holes.
The problems are:
1. Dire need of editing which reduced my rating. Its a constant slew of low level mistakes from typos, to small grammer issues and misuse of capital letters (or a lacktherof). I can tell the author has decent writing skills as the sentences flow decently enough, so all these easily avoidable errors really stand out. If author can get a proper editor to go through the actual content I would it would elevate the entire story up a level as well, but it can survive without.
2. MC who seems smart but doesn't really act it (a high Int but low Wisdom kind of guy).
3. The 'coincidence' of constantly meeting people who are sympathetic to MC's morals seems really out of place considering how hedonistic and 'cruel' the Empire is written to be.
It starts out really good. The smut is good and so was the initial storyline. The only thing in the beginning that really could use a lot more work is the syntax. Some odd or just plainly unintended word choices. Not so bad that it becomes a drop, but bad. 👎
Ah, sadly the mid to late chapters aren't very good. The release cadence is really bad. One chapter a week, sometimes. Then what others say is true. Right around when he joined the academy the story lost focus. The stuff about it being convenient he keeps running into people that are like minded can be excused as the goddess helping, but the lost focus can't. Sadly because of this I'll have to lower my rating to better reflect the quality. The story right now is essentially stagnated to where it's boring. Multiple chapters with nothing happening.
So far, really good story, really fun to read, and even though it started with the 'op' theme, it maintains a good balance. Literally the only thing I can say bad about it so far is having to wait in between chapters, and that's just because I'm so excited to read the next. Keep writing your great story Mr. Author!
It starts off goofy and simplistic, with the MC literaly driving out of the world and happily jumping into an ocean of chaos. But that simlicity allows the story to get right into the main plot without much initial fumbling. Wether you dislike that or not depends on readers. Personally, I've read too many isekai to care much about the why and how they transmigrate and get powers.
I was a little ambivalent about the novel at first. The tone is kind of inconsistant in the 10 starting chapters or so. The MC feels detached from what he's witnessing and simply going through the motions, which makes him less than likeable. Not unlikeable either, but I frowned a few times.
However, after an amusingly melodramatic (IMO) internal monologue in chapter 13A, the story finally finds its footing and has been very enjoyable since.
If you're looking for a smutty, low-tension OP isekai, that is just grounded enough to have some actual stakes (as in, not feeling like the MC can just snap his fingers at the plot), then this one's for you.
The one real downside are the frequent typos. That could use some improvement.
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Story is fine... But it feels empty. It is all wishiwashi storywise.
The MC starts with a mission to free the believers of the goddess that brought him here, while she is seen as heretic so he must be careful and sneaky, but that's not how he acts more what the author forces. He acts careless but the others are conviniently also part of the religion or have like no suspicions. The travel to the first big city is quite good storywise but after here arrives the author seems to lose focus. Instead of focusing how to safe his target he gets into a relationship with 2 noble woman (romance arc/subplot) that conviniently are on his side instantly in a society that forces people in certain mindsets. Than he starts to attend school there (school arc), but actually does not attend or has any important contact with the school residence. Then he gives a f**k about sneak and goes on a shopping tour while spending big (Like no one knows this guy and he is in the captial of the country with all the important people in it). Okay that's still fine, but than there is suddenly a dungeon and he goes into dungeondiving multiple chapters with a team there. (Dungeon arc) Of course there is no sneak involved, but hey you know: Convinient teammembers with the same believes in a brainwashed society.
So in summary. In my opinion the author starts the loose foxus in his story line trying to implemet multiple genre and elements at the same time while not finishing or advancing the others, which causes the story to become inconsistend and the charaters dubious.
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There will be a lot of criticism about story. I'll start with good things:
Bad things. Just be ready for there are a lot of them:
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I would say 3.5/5
Story has good potential even with OP MC to start with. The world building is also pretty decent without obvious holes.
The problems are:
1. Dire need of editing which reduced my rating. Its a constant slew of low level mistakes from typos, to small grammer issues and misuse of capital letters (or a lacktherof). I can tell the author has decent writing skills as the sentences flow decently enough, so all these easily avoidable errors really stand out. If author can get a proper editor to go through the actual content I would it would elevate the entire story up a level as well, but it can survive without.
2. MC who seems smart but doesn't really act it (a high Int but low Wisdom kind of guy).
3. The 'coincidence' of constantly meeting people who are sympathetic to MC's morals seems really out of place considering how hedonistic and 'cruel' the Empire is written to be.
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It starts out really good. The smut is good and so was the initial storyline. The only thing in the beginning that really could use a lot more work is the syntax. Some odd or just plainly unintended word choices. Not so bad that it becomes a drop, but bad. 👎
Ah, sadly the mid to late chapters aren't very good. The release cadence is really bad. One chapter a week, sometimes. Then what others say is true. Right around when he joined the academy the story lost focus. The stuff about it being convenient he keeps running into people that are like minded can be excused as the goddess helping, but the lost focus can't. Sadly because of this I'll have to lower my rating to better reflect the quality. The story right now is essentially stagnated to where it's boring. Multiple chapters with nothing happening.
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So far, really good story, really fun to read, and even though it started with the 'op' theme, it maintains a good balance. Literally the only thing I can say bad about it so far is having to wait in between chapters, and that's just because I'm so excited to read the next. Keep writing your great story Mr. Author!
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It starts off goofy and simplistic, with the MC literaly driving out of the world and happily jumping into an ocean of chaos. But that simlicity allows the story to get right into the main plot without much initial fumbling. Wether you dislike that or not depends on readers. Personally, I've read too many isekai to care much about the why and how they transmigrate and get powers.
I was a little ambivalent about the novel at first. The tone is kind of inconsistant in the 10 starting chapters or so. The MC feels detached from what he's witnessing and simply going through the motions, which makes him less than likeable. Not unlikeable either, but I frowned a few times.
However, after an amusingly melodramatic (IMO) internal monologue in chapter 13A, the story finally finds its footing and has been very enjoyable since.
If you're looking for a smutty, low-tension OP isekai, that is just grounded enough to have some actual stakes (as in, not feeling like the MC can just snap his fingers at the plot), then this one's for you.
The one real downside are the frequent typos. That could use some improvement.
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This is one of those hidden gem novels that occasionally pop up on SH.
Interesting world, likable characters and an OP but balanced MC.
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