Reborn as A dragon is a reincarnation story where a man is born into a family of dragons on another world.

Plot and Theme:  This is an exploration/slice of life/cultivation story based around a dragon's life. There is exploration of the internal landscape, but its minimal. The strength of the story is in its exploration of the world and the social interactions between dragons and other species.

Good points: Its refreshing. The author creates an entire world around the story's protagonist. The story doesn't sugarcoat the Dragon Supremacy culture. The ultra rigid society reminds this reader of Sparta: only the strongest and most fit survive. Everyone else is a rival, a source of food, or a pest. Dragons are not human. They don't have human morals. The reader will find brutality but discovery as well. The protagonist might, eventually, have moments of insanity some will confuse with mercy.

Bad Points: The prose and style. I kid you not. The prose is something written with no care to style. It is beyond amateur and more than a little lazy. As/while conjunction abuse, rigid structure, telling vs showing, gerunds, bloating (excessive wordiness for simple concepts), lack of significant description, Point of View bouncing, tense slips, passive voice vs active voice, basic orthography, punctuation, etc. In fact, this work doesn't miss a single bump. It holds on to literary problems like an alcoholic to Jack Daniels.

1. As/While abuse.  As/while subordinate conjunctions are abused in order to speed the narrative along without care for how many times they are repeated. There are other words out there.

2. Rigid structure.   The  style has a general repetitive sentence structure. 'Subordinate conjunction, Independent clause.'

Example:  "As I thought about what to do, I started yawning."  as opposed to "I yawned and considered my options."

Feel the weight of the sentence in your head. It isn't pleasant. This particular style controls most of the narrative. It repetition becomes a problem and might put-off many a reader. If something is important enough to be included in a story (subordinate conjunction), it could be separated into its own independent clause (independent clause).

3. Gerunds. I won't teach basic creative writing here. Do a search in Google for "Gerunds in prose." Let's just say that the general rule (and all rules are meant to be broken when one knows what they are doing) is to NOT use them.  Gerunds, combined with as/while repetition AND subordinate conjunctions are a pain to read.

4. PoV problems. Point of Views are tricky. Most fiction is written in 3rd Person Limited PoV or 1st Person PoV.  I've seen, rarely, a well conducted 3rd Person Omniscient PoV that slips through with almost no issues.

Example:    1st person:   I breathed fire. My right claw rended through eldritch flesh.

Example:  3rd Person Limited:  Terrac breathed fire. His right claw cleaved through eldritch flesh.

Example: 3rd Person Omniscient (Multiple views) :  Terrac breathed fire (1). The eldritch horror was terrified (2 and Telling). Sparky the dog wanted to pee (3), but he barked at both the dragon and the eldritch horror with brave stupidity. Unknown to all three of them (Sub conjunction), the loss of any of them would disrupt reality. (Ind. Clause).  (God/Author PoV)

An author must try to limit 3rd Person Omniscient to subtle shifts, otherwise it feels clumsy and harms a story's pacing.

5. Telling vs showing.   Yes the story has this problem in spades. Telling is direct and (if not given enough thought) lazy. Showing is INDIRECT. It is also, in most cases, wordier but builds better, flows better.

Example Telling:   Adeline was cold.

Example showing:  Adeline shivered.

Example showing with details:  Adeline shivered despite the heavy winter coat.

6. Began to. Started to.  Seems to. Appears to.  I might despise As/while subordinate conjunction abuse but "began/started to/seems to" bloating and ambiguity is up there. These phrases are used by authors to organize their thoughts. They are unnecessary preambles to other clauses in a sentence. Remove them from the prose except in specific contexts.

Example: Terrac began to consider the possibilities of murder as Arnold rambled on, convinced of his own importance.

Example WITHOUT the bullcrap:  Arnold rambled on, convinced of his own importance. Terrac pondered abject murder.

Notice that I used 3rd Person omniscient, but it feels like 3rd Person limited. Terrac observing Arnold. That's subtle manipulation of prose and style. Notice that I removed the as/while conjunction. Notice that the "Began to" preamble is gone. Notice that I am TELLING instead of Showing, but the prose isn't harmed by the choice because one sentence has long phonetic prosody and the other is short and to the point.  More importantly, the details provide an understanding of the characters and aren't boring. One is a snotty jackarse. The other might be a snarky SoB or, in truth, a cold blooded murderer. 

I don't have the patience to detail examples of all the other problems in this work. This isn't a creative writing class. Let's leave this at the point that I am EXTREMELY displeased with the rough prose because the story has great potential. This work can be much, much better.

2.5 / 5 stars.  Fifty percent. Not high enough to be average, not low enough for complete anonimity.

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The novel starts off with the introduction of a typical shut-in emotionally fragile MC. He is reborn as a water dragon that has 4 siblings he is 'big brother' of them. The story was OK at first but after he experienced facing the golden eyes of the progenitor and supposedly experiencing countless dragon lifetimes, then fully accepting him being a dragon not a 'human in dragon skin'... well he still acts like he used to. He is mostly dragon of instinct then of mind.

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An actually pretty amazing dragon story. Unlike most dragon stories where the dragon thinks and feels like a human, this one actually acts like a proper dragon! Love the story and the characters. They are very interesting and so far I'm liking the world building too as small hints are being constantly given about the outside world. All in all I recommend reading and I'm sure you won't regret it.

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Thoughtful PoV of experiencing what it might be to be a dragon in a world with a rich and deep history, with all of the instincts and baggage that comes along with it good and bad.

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The plot development is good. The author really delve deeper and giving each plot a value in each chapter. The lore and connection to chapters support each other. Making dialogues between each character entertaining and relatable

The characters development is freaking awesome in this one. Sine the author basically added souls to each of the characters in the story. You can feel each of their thoughts, emotions, and line of thinking. No matter if the character is a side character or the main character

The flow of the story also align with each other, allowing us readers to have a clear picture of what's going on inside the story

The con the I can think of is the geography of the story... we still didn't know the location of the places inside our story. So its a little bit confusing

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Was good to pretty good in the first hundred chapters or so. It was edited well with good syntax, easily a 4 star. Unfortunately it turned into Xianxia.  Now I don't have issues with xianxia god knows I've read enough of them in of itself but xianxia is more often than not shovelware and the quality of this novel is starting to nosedive to match those expectations.  It also seems to be using some kind of translation software now. The level of it's English has plummeted and feels unnatural. It would not surprise me if the author is using gpt or some kind ai software to write now or worse paying a ghost writer. There are phrases being used now that are clearly of Chinese origin and speech patterns that I've only seen in mtl or below average human translation from Chinese novels and none of this was in the first half of the current story.  The novel doesn't even feel like it's being written by the same person anymore. 

cons aside one of the few positives of the story still, is that most characters actually feel unique and their own person with personality. That's one of the few saving graces as the quality of the novel seems to be dropping and one of the few reasons I'm not quite ready to stop reading just yet

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Honestly this could be a lot better. The best way I can describe the MC is dumb. Not much else really stands out about him. He quickly forgets lessons learned, makes assumptions that quickly get proven false, then just goes on making more assumptions based on his knowledge that has been proven to be unreliable.

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The writing quality is good there are constant chapters to read, about an MC that is a dragon that is strong.  Plenty of action scenes and the world building keeps you interested in what's out there. The MC not being a murder hobo is pretty nice too as the MC is smart and actually thinks things through. And most importantly the MC is not trying to rush to be a human or their pet.

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Water lizard funny 5/5.

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MC is not overpowered, compared to other dragons he has water element for his affinity but compared to his siblings his element is one of the weaker ones, his siblings has light and darkness. The tag overpowered protagonist dosen't sound right for me when he is not that op when you have a water element compared to time, space, soul, light, darkness and ECT.

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