The concept of the story is good... but it seems a bit forced. If you want a protagonist who becomes a Hashira, then maybe have the main character born around the same time the other hashira were born.  Be realistic.

The only reason the mist hashira is so young is becuase his bloodline comes from the brother of Yoriichi.

If you want to fix grammer issues I'd suggest Grammarly. Grammarly is perfect with helping fix grammer issues but its best not to rely so much on it.

I know this story is finished and this is a really late but, this is some small advise just to help if you plan on making future stories.

Thank you for taking the time to make this fanfic or story.

I wish you luck on your future stories.

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