Wow this is cringe.

I thought the setting seemed interesting and I like the author's other series set in Frozen, but I had to stop reading this during her exposition on Veelas about half-way into chapter 1. For a character we're repeatedly told is literal royalty, she doesn't have even a shred of royal bearing or charisma.

Also, not that this author has a tendency to write character speech as entire walls of text using only commas which is incredibly painful to read. Not even broken into sentences, nevermind paragraphs with proper pacing and structure. This really doesn't help the supposed-queen's self-introductory speech to the entire hall of Hogwarts, Beaubaton, and Darmstrung students read like a drunken, incoherent ramble.

It starts off just pointing out how amazing she is and how she's a queen and needs several wives to spend her life with, but the really cringe bit is in regards to Fleur. How would singling her out, revealing that uncomfortable truth about Veela in front of everyone, and repeatedly reminding her of rape attempts in front of the entire school help MC form a loving relationship with her?

She just blabbers on about looking for wives almost incoherently and reveals intimate personal details about a potentially traumatised girl in front of everyone, and insults just about everyone for no reason.

Everything up until her speech was interesting, but then it just plummeted off a cliff.

What, exactly, are we supposed to find relatable or likeable about this character? What kind of psychopaths are you going to twist the original characters into, and what absurd illogical plot-armour bullsh*t are you going to use, to actually have a single person fall in love with this insane bit*h? I just can't see it, no matter how much I suspend my disbelief.

She just seems really weak and desperate for attention, that she has to make this sort of spectacle and take every possible opportunity to make sure everyone hears her repeat how amazing and better than everyone else she is.

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