Critical review: 

I really like the naruto universe and naruto fanfictions, and because of that, I know the fact that there are only extremely rare cases where a good naruto fanfiction appears. Taking into consideration, that the original also failed to fulfill its potential, at least in my eyes, maybe I am the one who had to large expectations. 

Although that didn't change the fact that I still loved the original concept and idea of the Naruto universe, I only hated the part the Shinobies suddenly began to throw damned meteors at each other... 

Therefore, I was happy when I saw this work pop up in my recommended, but also after reading 31 chapters I got kind of frustrated from reading it. The story in itself is intriguing and I liked it until now. I really loved the part, when they marched through the snowy battlefields and how they got through the night heating up each others bodies. That part was well written, and pretty realistic.

Now the bad things:

Grammar, it is very bad, annoyingly so. I can easily overlook small errors, here and there since I also make them in my writing. Yet, I have to say, that stating at the beginning of your story that you are not a native English speaker is not a proper excuse to not do everything to make it better. 31-chapter should be more than enough, to realize that feed and feet are not the same. I recommend you to use a google chrome extension named writer. It is completely free, and could help you a lot in making your story more fluid and readable. The bad grammar, was the one that took one star from my review. 

Another star was taken by the fact that the story after about 20 chapters, began to be more and more filled with obvious plot holes... As if the writer itself forgot what was already written and what was planned to be written... Characters began to speak of things that were never mentioned before as if they were obvious pre-built facts... Also, the battle with Danzo and his man seemed so random and chopped apart that it really hit a nerve with me. It is one of the most legitimate and evil boss fights in the whole Naruto universe. Not because Danzo is so powerful, but because he is such a well built-up villain, with a real ninja like capabilities, come on, he is not the type who would stay around after using a mass illusion... Nor would he tire out from it... He has about 10 izanagi up in his sleeves, literally... That means he has kage level chakra reserves...

Well, that was most of it. Don't take my words at heart too much; I only wrote what I wrote to help you improve your writing, yet in the end the most important thing is to have fun while you write. I also commend you because you were brave enough to write such a big change as to capture Danzo so early, but the execution is still lacking. 

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Normally, I avoid all Naruto fan fictions.  With a passion, actually.

If I see something based in the Naruto universe, I immediately click away from it and try to find something else. Anything else.  After all, how many reincarnation / transmigration stories have there been with someone asking for a variation of Sharingan, the eyes that do this and that and all kinds of super overpowered magic?

I've never watched the anime or read the manga or seen any movies from the original author's works.  I have just seen a few clips here or there and have seen pictures of a few of the characters.

I guess the basic reason I don't like the series is because I never watched it on TV from the beginning.  The world of Dragonball Z, Goku and the others was always my thing when it came to martial arts battles.

Still, with all that I have written above, I think this may finally be the time to start getting into the Naruto universe.  A young woman, who doesn't really know what is going on, is transmigrated into the world.  There are hints she may have some sort of special background, but for the most part she is just a weak person who struggles not to die.

She has a long road ahead of her, but she seems to have found some good people who can care for her, and who she can trust.

I don't know the Naruto storyline, except that it is full of Ninjas who have abilities and they fight for some reason or another in various wars.  The main character in this story is like me; someone who starts from nothing and who is trying to find her way.  With this story, finally, I may have found my path to actually enjoying this universe.

I look forward to more.

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Out of all the naruto fanfic i've read (goddess of ice, illumination, mob without sys in naruto...) this one have the most interesting plot.

The story starts only a few moments before the end of the third shinobi war and our reincarnated characters (There have been hints that some of them reincarnated waaaaay before as well) including our MC are from the year 2097 and have little to no future knowledge of NARUTO and they don't really hide the fact that they remember their past life (Probably because isekai genre have died and that Naruto is an ancient anime to them). All they really know is that the world they reincarnated to feels somewhat familiar but they don't really go out of their way to figure out why and just focused on surviving the war and finding a home so they unknowingly saved people who were meant to die and vice versa.

Tldr 

This fanfic will not follow the normal naruto storyline. Which is really exciting

(Sorry for bad english lol)  

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