Jane Walker was in the middle of a streak of bad luck. His cat scratched him, his second attempt to awakening failed, and even his girlfriend dumped him.
And when he thought his luck could not turn worse, the bus he was in was swallowed by a spatial singularity, a [Dungeon].
But in the middle of struggling for his life, and when Jane thought it was his end, something unexpected happened.
Together with the appearance of a self-proclaimed Immortal, his body received strength, mana, and skills.
But soon, Jane noticed something strange.
His skills… were a bit different than normal.
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Wish fulfillment power fantasy #363615. A generic novel that appeals to the lonely and edgy anime loving teen, which I assume is 95+% of this entire site judging by the quality and types of novels that get upvoted. Seriously, one chapter in and the author is s*xually describing the MC's little sister from his own perspective, and he's talking about his little sister's body, height, and boobs. Who calls their little sister "petite"? The only way you can actually enjoy this novel is if you've yet to ever touch a girl in your life and hold immense amounts of teenage angst in your heart while desperately wishing for some magical superpower to befall you like it did the MC and make you the main character.
Great story, but partly wrecked by the choice of name for the male MC of Jane - this is a girls name throughout the English speaking world so every time I read HIS name in a chapter I have to do a double take to realise the author is writing about the male MC.
Otherwise, other than an occasional typo or odd word choice, the writing is easy to read, flows well with a good level of description, i.e. Enough so you can picture the scene without so much it bogs down in endless descriptions,
Plot is interesting and well paced, both with the action, character development and the adult content in balance. Things happen, stuff gets done, story progresses without feeling like it is rushed but with enough slower moments to explain what is going on and allow for character development and not just lurch from one action scene to the next - but that is what I expect from Aidka, they are a good author and know their craft.
Good characters & character development, decent interpersonal drama, and an overall fun story. The story reminds me of 'Forbidden Master' in that he has an arguably evil "master", as in martial arts master, in his head. But comparing the two, this story has better background, characters, and motivation. My favorite part is his ex-girlfriend.
She dumps him when he's at his lowest because he failed to awaken to magic powers, then he almost literally falls into hell (which is where he meets the world's strangest life coach).
I like Aidka's universe of immortals and laws from Fourth Prince. Think it's an interesting way to frame celestial beings. Having that applied to the modern dungeon setting opens interesting story possibilities.
As always, Aidka's characters and world are well described and interactive. There are some grammar word choice booboos here and there but nothing major. Plus the level of smut is well written and fits the story.
Another good tale, with some tail, from Aidka. 😎
I tried, but I can't read this. Maybe I've eroded my tolerance with translated novels, but the author constantly uses poor, awkward, and wrong word choice EVERY PARAGRAPH. It isn't a sometime thing. 'Definitely' is wrongly replaced with 'definitively' every single time. The combat sounds like it was written in Chinese and passed through google translate and uses phrases like 'attacked my waist' and 'brandished my weapon to kill X'. Look, you don't brandish things to kill anything. Brandishing is the act of raising your weapon and displaying it threateningly. It doesn't mean, explicitly or by connotation, that you hit something with your weapon, which would be necessary to actually kill it. You got attacked in the waist? What, does the rat have a hatred of belts? In English, you get attacked in the stomach, or the side, or torso, or practically anything else unless you're geriatric and you broke a hip, which is still your HIP and not your waist.
Maybe I'm being too harsh or maybe this IS a translation, in which case it's right on par with mediocre translations everywhere, but this guy apparently has two other stories and still hasn't learned how to use the language well enough to avoid obvious malapropisms. I'm going elsewhere for my fantasy fix, possibly to a different site, because this does seem to be the standard of Scribble Hub.
Compelling setting, the world, the magic system, society's reaction to it all being introduced in a modern era.
The fight scenes are done well and using magic/skills creatively is prominent through the story, without cliches such as people forgetting their powers for the sake of making more drama.
The comedy aspects are just ok, but may seem worse if only by comparison to the above mentioned parts of the book that shine. Early on there's a reliance on common anime gags for character interactions that thankfully faded away as the story progressed, hopefully to never return.