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Avan, a 25-year-old young man, is torn from his rather boring life. He awakens in Aorus, a world full of magic, monsters and dungeons.
By a stroke of luck and an ominous skill called "Potential", he awakens a new class never seen before called Dungeonheart (Human). Dungeons, although sentient, are never sapient nor mobile.
Join Avan as he pursues his passion for healing and martial arts, and building his very own dungeon at the same time. He’s the hybrid of a moving dungeon and a healer.
"Healing Dungeon" will include City building, strategy, very little romance, exploration of the world of Aorus, and a touch of power levelling. (There are elements from other fantasy novels, as well as anime, games, and more).
What will all be possible with a dungeon that can move, but still brings some of the familiar dungeon mechanics along for its journey?
-- Please note that the beginning and thus the first chapters were really my first writing works in english, and can only be rewritten at a later time (lack of time in favor for new chapters) --
(The writing style and also the story improves VERY much from the 12th chapter at the latest! Proofreading is available, but I depend on any well-intentioned advice from you guys).
If you have any questions, suggestions, constructive criticism, or just because you feel like it, feel free to leave me a comment below the respective chapters!
For every positive and serious review or rating, I am infinitely grateful! ;)
I am a creature of few words and the beginning is therefore a little faster than I would have liked it now in retrospect. Please do not expect huge paraphrases and descriptions of the environments, but only what is really necessary to get into the scene.
Cheers and hopefully see you in the comment section.
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This story contains Mental & Physical Abuse, Gore and Strong Language. Reader discretion is advised.
- 2.54-Destructiveness of two godsJun 28, 2022
- 2.53-Difficulties in another placeJun 16, 2022
- 2.52-Magic elements & ArrivalJun 11, 2022
- 2.51-Collective QuestingJun 8, 2022
- 2.50-The ArcanumMay 30, 2022
- 2.49-Twisted ReligionMay 24, 2022
- 2.48-Drinking with friendsMay 15, 2022
- 2.47-Just a quick stroll through the nightMay 8, 2022
- 2.46-Obscured night skyMay 1, 2022
- 2.45-Outside again at lastApr 20, 2022
- 2.44-Something is wrongApr 13, 2022
- 2.43-Escape with detours 2/2Apr 1, 2022
- 2.42-Escape with detours 1/2Mar 19, 2022
- 2.41-Prison breakMar 10, 2022
- 2.40-Grand DukeJan 27, 2022
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Last updated 2 years ago
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- 62 dropped
The world building and history of the world is cohesive and interesting. The MC's use of magic is compelling and creative at times, when it isn't stated explicitly that he forgot how to use his own abilities, and the pacing of the introduction is well done.
Once characters are introduced and start interacting with each other is where it goes downhill fast, their backgrounds and motivations forgotten they turn into rather uninteresting and shallow side-characters spouting one-liners and painfully acting out anime visual gags in written form. No one in the story, including the MC, seem to have their own set of values and motivations for their actions and instead come off as if they're actors reading off a script from a high-school play where things just happen to them and they act out their parts needed to get the story from A to B ignoring whether or not such actions would be in-character or even reasonable for a person in general. The author would make a terrific dungeon master, but the character dialogue is painful, MC's monologues to comfort/convince others are rambling, cliche, and ring hollow
One of the author's notes at the end of chapter 21 very much encapsulates the above and will inform you what to expect going in:
"Because some were pointing at Avan´s lack of being human and shrugging off all these mangled corpses, I decided to finally give him a little backlash."
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