By Iliketrains12345
Mike was a 25 year old software developer, working at a big tech company, he finally got some time of!, which he would like to enjoy with his girlfriend Jessica. He had been dating her for about six months now, and he couldn’t believe his l
Good story, as of this review only the first arc is written which only consists of just the begging so I will be reviewing it as such.
Going by the first few chapters I expected this story to be nothing but horny but it actually progressed to have some nice intricate world building. The turn of events kept the story progressing at a nice pace and continued captivating me without the story losing focus and becoming jumbled. What this sacrifices in turn is the characterization and motivations of both our main character and the people around him. In the first chapter Allen has a sympathetic back story which also serves to easily introduce flaws into him from the start. But, as soon as he is reincarnated this gets backseated in favour or the horny and then the hectic events so we rarely get any time to see him as a character instead of a medium for the story to progress. The beginning of a story is crucial to set up at least the main character and show their motivation/goal/drive but he seems to be stumbling through the events as they happen before being quickly pushed to the next thing. (Understandable from the speed at which things happen but nonetheless there was little slow moments to build the characters.)
The story itself is interesting but if you ever decide to continue this I would like to see more character interactions that further their depth, overall I liked it.
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