A pretty solid start to a danmachi fanfic

• Some grammar issues 
• Some handwaving for plot progression
• Enjoyable narration and banter
• Decent worldbuilding so far
• Plenty of cute 
• Hephesteus is wifeteus (+1 star)

*Will update as the story unfolds

edit: May 24

Still interesting, plot taking place in his childhood, new developments have yet to "pay off" but the ground is being set.

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First of, grammar: the first few chapters it's a bit iffy. Not unreadable by any standard, much better than a machine translation of foreign novels, just a few words misspelled here & there; annoying but 100% understandable. After that it's great English, practically without mistakes.

Next off, pacing: it's really good, I didn't ever think to myself that things happened too soon or that they were dragging on. When there's an occasional timeskip it's unnoticeable and seamlessly transitions, having great flow.

The mc: very fun & a tad bit clever. The MC is not some pervert (without limits I mean), neither does he do any evil acts that could otherwise help him achieve his goals... He's human, having his dreams and reasons for how he achieves things.

The cast: honestly great, they're lovable & aren't just robots with a voice box... They feel like people I mean, any dialogue in the story flows nicely.

Parity with the source material: dunno lol. Sorry 'bout this but I can't give a review on this category, I've only seen a few episodes years ago so I don't remember much. What I can say is that it's not following the original MCs (Bell & his group), giving a great and different perspective on things.

Overall this is a great novel, you should definitely give it a read if you're interested enough to read my long-as review. Either way enjoy your day &I wish you happy reading ^_^

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