Aurora was a renowned physicist but her career came to an abrubt end at the hands of an accident. Now she has been shoved to a world she somewhat know. Using the boons brought by the accident follow her as she takes full advantage of her knowledge to do whatever the fuck she wants.
ps: Removed the Harem tag cause this isn't really a harem story. I had tagged it as such since there would be more than one love interest. But there only two love interests so harem feels like a bit much.
Pss: If any of you lovely people see my stuff in fanstranslations.com thats also me :3
DISCLAIMER
I don't own anything to do with the Naruto world or characters. All rights belong to their respective owners. This is just a fun story I felt like writing after reading one too many Naruto fanfics myself.
If this story does well enough and I have money to spare I might commision a proper cover. I won't complain if any of you want to make one for free tho :P
The sorry, that gives some potential to characters, but brakes everything it can break.
All characters are severely nerfed compared to original cast (while they work harder than Lee worked, plus they started far earlier, they cannot even outpetgorm sasuke. Who got nerfed too). At times their achievements are noticeably worse than regular children, even if they are shinobi, that can already use chakra, know some chakra techniques, and even created a few themselves.
Slso, author completely discards logic of shinobi world, and make things, that are pretty much impossible to do even irl right now, while in shinobi world they have not there smallest chance of working.
Author makes MC create a few kinds of games (D&D, jenga, monopoly, uno, etc.), then says MC earns a TON of money by making them (only MC does that, essentially having monopoly over games). How is that supposed to work? It is not, that shinobi world does not have games. It is that shinobi so not play them. They have no time for it, nor desire. When they have free time - they train. Even shogi is not the game to kill time, but tactics training. Why would they play D&D (they are mages by themselves, and they do not have foundation on which you can build such a game), why would they play monipoly (it will not bring them any benefit), why would they play jenga (they are trained shinobi, it will not being them any benefit, nor satisfaction) ? Also, anyone could just take away MC's business and noone will say anything (plus, clans can legally claim her as a criminal and take away everything from her), if any clan makes shogi - they can lawfully take away everything, and even execute her for making such games. Plus there was mentioned, that she got revenue rrom all the games, that other people made. In the world, where there is no oatent system. Or even human rights. In the world, where everyone tries to kill and rob others for their own benefit. Also, MC is still a child (she is in the academy only after making all those games), who would give her any rights for games? Even more so, since there is NO concept of rights. Also, jenga was so stupid to try to sell. In the village, surrounded by forest. Where citizens build everything out of wood. And where shinobi use kawarimi to switch places with wooden log/doll/etc. Like, seriously?
The only positive thing - is the interactions with Kurama (which are copied from "Goddess of Ice; Reboar as Naruto's twin sister"). Bad habits of Yuna's story are also copied, btw. And a whole lot of new ones added on top. And the potential, that was defined at the start was all wasted, nerfed and forgotten.
This story is mediocre at best.
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It's good but it lacks in quite a few areas.
First of all we have no clue where the MC lives and her immediate surroundings. she only has a few people she interacts with but other non major characters are barely ever mentioned, not even as a crowd of people.
The other issue is the storytelling itself. The author likes to tell a lot instead of showing it. Including meetings with major characters, special training, obtaining items she shouldnt have access to with little details. Also way too large timeskips. We just got introduced to a period and almost instantly get yeeted years into the future with only explanations of what happened. Kinda necessary if the author wants to spend less time on backstory but it was enjoyable and this isnt.
There are also quite a few grammatical errors.
The worldbuilding is easy as it's a fanfiction and her powers are special or copied from other sources. Still fairly unique.
Another problem is the child prodigy stuff. A 1 year old managing to run from Jounin is kinda weird. Especially with them being her parents and having a very large interest in her safety.
Also the chapter length is a little short.
I will keep reading for a bit and hopefully there will be less timeskips and more characters interactions and introductions shown instead of told...
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pretty good on how while the main character has op powers they are nerfed in a way that makes sense. Overall the series is pretty good the only thing I can think of is more chapter. :)
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You can read about the many problems of this work in other reviews. From myself, I will only say that this is Fanfic in the bad sense of the word - just random fantasies of a fan who came up with a certain general concept of story, but thinks through the details on the fly
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I love this fanfic, starting from the plot and the unique ideas you wrote there. I especially like the Ninja version of Yuri's story like this.
Story suggestion: If possible.. Please make an original version of the villain that is not in the Naruto story. For example, the addition of new members of Akatsuki or Osutsuki who came to the world of Naruto to make the story more interesting.
Story Critique: None so far. But please don't make the main character too OP to balance the enemy's strength.
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Y'know, my expectations for this were pretty low, considering that the only times I've seen it mentioned it was described as, and I quote, "not good" (and admittedly, I've only seen it mentioned twice). But, I tried to keep an open mind (mostly because I've really been starving for content lately), and I was pleasantly surprised. It's pretty interesting, and while there are definitely flaws, it's not like I could write anything better. Although, I will say that the grammatical errors a bit too frequent. Not enough to actually detract from my enjoyment, but enough that I need to point it out in this review.
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Nice story. Has its warm fuzzy moments and angst. MC has broken emotional psyche that is healing with the he;p of loved ones who she in turn helps.
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I personaly really enjoy reading this story due to the Authors writingstyle and approach regarding Naruto fan-fictions, with a unique charakter that also has an interesting backstory. The pace of the story ist also good and it does not feel like he is running through the story or streeching it out needlessly.
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I really like the story.
The author has done a good job with the comedy in the story, and the English is well done. It's refreshing seeing a story done not in broken English.
The OC is well done too. She feels real and has good character development.
The romance is nice too, it's a harem, but it's simply a three way.
One of my complaints is how fast the OC gets OP. You expect some nice OPness but it occurred way too fast in my opinion. I just wish they slowed it down.
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So far I have really enjoyed the story, the main character has some very interesting abilities that have the potential to be very powerful, what are limited in a very understandable unbelievable way, allowing room for growth. More so, I absolutely love her relationship with Kurama, because it is both bickering, friendly, and incredibly caring at the same time.
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