The universe gave me another chance after life screwed me over. My second life brought me to a world where people breath fire, walk on water and some people with special eyes that give them bullsh#t powers. Well, I got the gamer ability. And I’m gonna use it to stand at the peak. But it's gonna be a long journey before I reach that summit. SI - MC.
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I have been actively following this fic for quite some time and I have to say, I am very impressed.
1. The gamer system is by far incorporated in the best ways possible for a world like Naruto. Most fanfics take the short way out by making MC overpowered very early into the fanfiction. This is a terrible mistake that is carefully avoided here. This has to be, the best gamer system design for naruto in my opinion. I love "Game of Shadows", a very popular fanfiction, but it barely made use of the much coveted system. Eiji there is given a system that is not well incorporated in the world setting.
2. The MC is like an actual person. Many fics try to portray a teenager as braty and arrogant. They are made so in order to move the plot and show vulnerability. Here, the boy is actually very focused, he is not stupid enough to give to impulses. He does mistakes but they are very less in number.
3. I HATE EDGELORDS. Thank god this is not an edgy MC. Many fics tend to give an unnaturally ruthless personality to their main characters, in order to make them cool. These are some of the worst tropes in fanfictions. What we need is neither a hero nor a edgelord. We need a stable grey character who has atleast some integrity in them.
4. I may not be a grammer Nazi but I do feel this is a very well written story.
5. There is a lot of chakra mechanics mentioned here that I really like. (They appear later in the story).
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The story is good
The author story telling is good
But addition of mana causing me to give 3
So read it if you dont mind messed up power system it will be worth it
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It's not a good story. Not at all. It follows the series example in a weird way, as it's heavy with filler chapters and unnecessary flashbacks. The MC is supposedly smart, but still does the most dumb things constantly. Succeeds of course anyway, with ultra mega enchanted mithril plot armor.
If you have literally nothing else better to do with your time, it's at least better than watching paint dry.
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The best thing about this novel is author's consistency, 3-4 times a week! Can you imagine fanfic with that schedule?! Plus a decent amount of words/chapter. Although in the beginning there was a problem with certain parts of the story could be fit in a single chapter. It wasn't a big deal later on
MC was normal dude get an in Naruto world with a gamer system. The nice thing about it was author did a great job at making a logical and believable OC in Naruto verse. I can totally believe MC got created by original Mangaka.
Story wise it pretty much followed the original timeline except a few minor differences in the beginning. There was some extra foreshadow that author put in the story that I hope can turn to a good climax.
I hope author put more twist to the story. I know it was a hard thing to do balancing between the original plot that we know we are like but predictive and new things that doesn't guarantee we gonna like.
Just to make simple suggestions. We need a proper OC villain! A lot of great character have their own nemesis to make best story! Joker and batman, harry potter and Voldemort, Sherlock Holmes and James Moriarty, Luke Skywalker and Darth Vader
With a great villain there will always be a crisis to face, a great way to make readers wonder, and this concept is close with canon concept (Madara got a ton of hype behind his reveal)
In conclusion, I am just a satisfied reader that saw a lot of potential in your work! I hope you can grow :)
Just do your best
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I have to say this is one of the best naruto fanfics I have ever come across although the pace of the story is very slow it makes up by its interesting story and world building I really like that there are chapters that show what is happening around the world and shows that the MC is not the center of the world goodjob to you my kind sir/maam
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A very good work that develops the story and characters in an incredible way, excellent dialogues and great fights. A little boring in my view the statistics and marbles, but with time their participation decreases and the story improves a lot. Congratulations to the author!!!
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