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tl;dr only read if you share the author's fetish for inflicting emotional suffering on the MC just for the sake of them suffering, not for plot or anything.
The story is well-written for the most part, though there are random groups of chapters with notable spelling and grammar mistakes on occasion.
I want to say that the characters are interesting and well-developed, the author clearly demonstrates their ability to do this repeatedly, but they also have a habit of investing several chapters to introduce a really good character only to rip it up for no real reason. Sometimes the good character is replaced with a 2D cardboard cutout, sometimes not. There is literally no plot-relevance when it happens, it only drives character development once or twice, and more often than not it seems to be done for the express purpose of causing the MC great emotional suffering that does not actually affect the plot.
This is done from the very start of the story, with the main character no less. We spend the first 3 chapters establishing a setting and a very interesting MC named Jasmine. In chapter 4 she is replaced by isekai-reincarnator-42356 who we get like 2 paragraphs of backstory for. Then in chapter 5 SURPRISE! Jasmine is still alive inside her head so they apparently merge personalities, but then we just get paragraphs of soulless "MC did this and then did this" with nothing of the interesting Jasmine in it but also nothing new about isekai-reincarnator-42356 either. The story may as well have just started at that point, with isekai-reincarnator-42356 inheriting Jasmine's memories; instead, the entire setup was wasted with a lie that was so jarring and disappointing I nearly stopped reading right there.
(now I wish I had stopped there, I really do, but the author writes well and the concept really hooked me)
Later, we have several chapters setting up a love interest for the MC with a really interesting backstory and plenty of good development. All ripped away without serving any sort of character development for the MC, but purely to induce meaningless suffering. It was followed by a few paragraphs of "this happened and then MC went to place" and then POP here's Generic Love Interest 8673, MC's new very involved lover who totally has been around for hundreds of years just trust me guys. Even at this point, dozens of chapters later, I can't remember the new lover's name and they feel like a non-character to me; just another mob that gets mentioned occasionally for things that don't actually affect the plot in any way.
And then again, a daughter figure is used in a really convoluted way to induce a minor revelation to the MC but done in a specific way to cause the MC as much emotional torment as possible. After reading past that point and reading past a scene that clearly tries to explain the daughter figure being used for the revelation, it just rings hollow and doesn't feel like a real plot point, just a paper-thin attempt at justification - though this may be because I'm tired of the author's emotional suffering fetish by now and am colouring the event with that bias.
These aren't the only examples, just the biggest ones in my mind.
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The main character feels very bloated.
She is beautiful, has eidetic memory, has a tragic backstory, but also a more normal one on top of that, she knows the future, she has telepathy and can copy the skills and knowledge of others, she is basically female Harry Potter, she is rich, an orphan, an inventor, is a fusion of two souls and lives in the MCU. All of that happens in 5 chapters.
Honestly the only thing left, would be giving her a big d*ck and big tits. The MC loses her own character with every gimmick introduced and becomes just ridiculous.
The first few chapters were amazing, but after Morgan was introduced, the story became weird.
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I don't know where to start with this, really. The characterization is great, and individually, each arc is really quite engaging. But already problems creep in. The inciting events are virtually universally contrived at best and nonsense at worst. The author has made a habit of introducing interesting characters, fleshing them out skillfully, then removing them from the story in some way. In other words, this fic is misery porn. As well, this fic has a problem with agency. It becomes more and more noticeable as you read further into the fic, but the seeds are there from the start.
willingly enslaving herself to Death on a whim.
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The first three chapters are evidence of a good writer. Good character development, scene setting, etc. The MC experienced realistic growth and struggles that aided in generating a three dimensional character I could get invested in.
Unfortunately, it seems the author really wanted to make it an isekai; this resulted in, what I consider, the worst possible execution of inserting isekai aspects. The main character that I had grown so attached to in those three chapters, an impressive feat, was essentially deleted; it felt horrible.
Despite this, I am fully willing to give the novel a second chance at a later date, as the first three chapters, like I said, were actually quite well written. I just hope that I can grow to like this new main character when I return.
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Have gotten much further on ffn, story is okay and the magic system is inventive, but the MC is a very classic lesbian Mary Sue and that trope is overdone imo.
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This is a very badly written story, everything is janky and utterly unclean. Characters don't make sense and contradict themselves regularly. The grammar is atrocious, gets actually worse over time. A bit like the instruction manual of cheap Chinese furniture. Fight scenes are the worst offenders, those are just plain boring.
The concept is interesting though, so at least there's something.
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I don't really like this novel. The story is pretty decent I suppose but the main character is the blandest thing I've seen. She's not even 2 dimensional, she is 1 dimension and it shows. She doesn't even react that much to events. It ruins the story for me but maybe others won't mind it much. The story and side characters are pretty good.
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Trashy power fantasy novel. Many paragraphs of did this and that and became rich or gained 30 powers or mastered runes or some such because MC is so much better than everyone else that she didn't even interact with.
The only interesting chapters are the ones that don't have the MC in it, meaning other POVs.
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tl;dr You do need to power through the beginning but once it gets going this is a cool AU work set mostly in Marvel with HP stuff coming up intermittently. MC is strong and can be empathetic (sometimes not so much though), but literally everyone else around her sucks so fair warning on that.
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The beginning of the story is very rough. It starts off as a lot of table setting and the setting bounces from location to location a ton but eventually things fall into a nice rhythm.
MC is experienced and powerful while remaining compassionate. She tries to do the right things for the right reasons which is nice to see. BUT she's still kind of a Mary Sue because she's the only one who can do anything in this story since everyone else sucks.
The biggest problem I have with the story is that everyone, I mean everyone, besides the MC sucks. They're either well meaning but incompetent (the people she takes under her wing tend to fall under this category), ill-meaning and incompetent (all the 'baddies' she brushes aside are arrogant a-holes who fall victim to the simplest of strategies, or just get overpowered rather straightforwardly) or just plain incompetent (all the 'neutral' parties like the Avengers or Asgard are helpless babes in the woods without MC there to guide things along in the background for them).
The author tears down ALL of the "heroes" from the Marvel and HP universes. Nathan/Harry sucks. Ron sucks. Hermione sucks. Dumbledore sucks. Nick Fury + SHIELD suck. The Avengers mostly suck. Nobody but the MC is presented as understanding and capably balancing the consequences of their choices/actions with their stated goals, assuming those goals aren't just generic caricatures to begin with.
Anyway, I could go on bashing MC like she bashes everyone else, but despite this glaring weakness the ride is still pretty fun so it's worth a ticket.
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Character develops over time. Story is good, but only really starts until ch.~ 60-100 (I think).
the arc when she returns to the present.
Another thing that I assume will be addressed later, but hasn't yet: (spoiler)
Olympic gods have basically been ignored. She kinda cheated on Hestia too btw.
The plot starts to thicken eventually, but for the first maybe 80 chapters, it's just epilogue. Which is still good of course. It's very entertaining still.
Review isn't complete to my standards, but I also need sleep so...
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