The story itself is decent, however, please author, I beg you, I beseech you, stop making such big blocks of text! Split them into paragraphs! It makes your story so hard to read... The latest chapters are pretty good, just fix those abominations in the early chapters...

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Remember this is literally an armature new author to the novel world so you can forgive grammar issues. Otherwise I am enjoying this story very much.. the author is going past the young years swiftly and getting him in to his school life fast. Looking forward to more. The MC is likeable and he is only semi-dense but not in a bad way. [ie he does not notice that he now has a protagonist halo]. Cant wait for more!

Also try the authors other great story....[I Reincarnated into High School DxD as a Random Guy], Its my current favorite DxD fanfiction.

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The material itself is a good story for a new author.  I agree with MinUp, the big blocks of text are troublesome, but that gets better in later chapters.  There's still issues with punctuation, like commas in strange places.  But you can tell the writing style changing/improving chapter by chapter.

The first few chapters along with the basic setup are simular to "Little Tyrant Doesn't Want to Meet with a Bad End".  It even has an adopted little sister that has trouble cutting meat.  I laughed a bit when the author specified that the MC didn't have some super convient "system" (something I hate about Little Tyrant).  So the author took inspiration from another story, that's not a bad thing.  The simularities mostly disappear after the first couple of chapters.

Overall, I've enjoyed reading to Chapter 25.  Look forward to C26.

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