A definite diamond in the rough, the rough being this website. Even a blind squirrel finds a nut, but I could have never imagined something this good here. Truly amazing, Story writing: 5/5, Character Development: 5/5, Grammar: although there were some spelling mistakes, it was impeccable. It was capable of making me sad, happy, and thirsty for more. I have never heard of nor watched Eternal, but after reading this I can tell that was a mistake, or you contributed so much to it that it didn't matter. Although after reminiscing my read, I do have one minor issue. In the begging how did he already know he was on a Marvel planet, I might have skipped it, but it does bother me. But most of all this Novel made me scared. Scared I would catch up, This was amazing, thank you.

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botka4aet

Status: c161

May 18, 2022

What can I say....

This is one of those stories that grabs you and doesn't let go the whole time you read it. I read 160 chapters in a day.

A book that tries to link most of the significant events in the reasonable history of mankind, real and fictional.

It is a pity that history so quickly (?) reached the present.

And that means the end.

Recommend to read

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ceskynes9_12

Status: c115

Apr 25, 2022

A wonderful book, a change of pace for me most especially. It brings up many questions and provides answers to them. Keep up the good work author!!

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Sekz318

Status: chapter 147: parent-teacher conference. 2008 ce

May 13, 2022

This is one of the best Marvel fanfics I've ever read.

Character Development: WONDERFUL

The Power level of the MC: The protagonist starts from the lowest and with the passage of time he has become much more powerful but everything is justified and in no way is he OP

Secondary characters: The other eternals ARE ALIVE, each one has their own thoughts, ideas and problems, not everything revolves around the MC something that I like a lot.

Timeline: We start about 6000 years before the canon of the movies but at no point do these chapters get boring.

Actions have consequences.

Romance: Shall I say this is the best? The romance is organic, it flows and a relationship is built between the two that is PERFECT

In short, you have to read this or you will regret it for the rest of your life

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EthanPeh

Status: chapter 118: war of the apes, 1890...

Apr 29, 2022

An awesome fanfiction. I really enjoyed the way the author portrayed Earth's history through the eyes of an Eternal. A fun story with a roller coaster of emotions.

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Especially the part where Thena started to get the immortal's version of Alziemers.

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Hunterdxs

Status: chapter 50: grief and love, 1133 bce

Apr 24, 2022

first time writes review seriously, im really enjoys it have nice pace and lore then bits of history and mix of legend. For writing I give it 5/5, paces 4/5, overall is a good reads for me, and finish it from first to last updates in one days

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Balgas

Status: chapter 121: war of the apes. 1900...

May 3, 2022

One of the best fanfic there is.

The plot of being an immortal and going all over the world is great. MC and his "family" influences the world in more ways than they are actually expecting. I like the part of MC's concept of humanity being altered most of the time as the story progresses.

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majimew

Status: c200

Feb 5, 2023

The writing itself is excellent. You don't even need to see the original movie to read this. World is built from the ground up and everything feels realistic. I have no complaints about the world-building and the overall development of the story or pacing. Everything is written really well, so I will be nitpicking and focusing on small things instead.

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When you have a plot that essentially focuses on one thing that's taken over 7000 year timeskips with the same few characters it can feel a bit tiring if the characters themselves aren't the best. The eternals themselves aren't that fun to follow, mainly because Ikaris and Ajak have a stick up their asses, being their thing. Then there's the rest of the cast, and while most don't get development, Sprite, Thena and Pluto all have their quirks and are fun to follow. Just reading about Ikaris wanting to "follow the mission" for the 12th time is a bit tiring when there really isn't enough reason established for him to be so stubborn. Sersi and Druig wanting peace and crying about war is also a bit boring for the 15th war in a row. The unseen ones are actually more fun to follow than the main cast, even though most of them either lose their quirks or don't keep their beliefs. The storylines for them all could have been a bit more expanded instead of just having a 2 chapter thing of them being saved and then giving them a ring.

I have a small problem with the pacing of this though. While it is good, it isn't perfect. Which is understandable given the subject of the story, but there didn't need to be a timeskip every other chapter. With this format, you will always have the problem of not fleshing out everyone who isn't immortal, meaning they are basically meaningless. I wanted to see more development between the times, and then the ones who really get development get the rings so you can keep them in the story. It would have been fun to see more of the eternals having trouble adapting to the culture and advancements of civilization and following the lives of the people with them being ancient instead of just hopping from one event to the next. The movie just passed over everything, but here you could have given it more juice.

When the story gets to the 1700s, it's not about the eternals anymore. In the 2000s, they have a son which is a pleasure to read about. Helios is written extremely well and is fun to follow with Gwen.

The villains in the later story though... UGH. I know it's normal marvel, and Hydra is a problem. But I don't want to read about political affairs and them discriminating the apes every time. It is still good, but It's just hard to care about for some reason. You know they're not gonna be able to do anything, and for some reason the world council just aren't assassinated. It got boring after a while, but it's still better than anything else.

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Montizuma59

Status: Chapter 219: Club Fest. 2016 CE

Oct 5, 2022

If you judge this story as a fanfiction, it's a 5/5, but if you judge it as a normal story, which I am, it's a 3/5. There are just too many frustrating flaws in this story, frustrating since it could be easily fixed by changing the wording, or slightly modifying the context. But still, it is VERY annoying to read the story sometimes.

The main character is an evil man that commits war crimes casually, but everyone in the story insists that he is a hero. A paragon of virtue.

The side characters start out as basic tropes, but they do get development much later in the story. Since this is essentially a time-traveling story, you do get to meet a lot of people from history. Some are done well, others are butchered to fit the mold the author wants them in.

As for the world the story takes place in, there is very little importance placed on it early on. This also includes the MCU elements, as almost everything in the BC era of the world, which involves the MCU, is sidelined and ignored. And when it is retconned in later on, it is done in such a disrespectful way.

Now, for side characters pt.2. Early on, there is too much focus on the Eternals with very little on the others, however, for the last third of the story, there are barely any Eternals in the story, some even completely forgotten.

The Grammer of the story isn't good, but most problems with it are simple and easy to overlook. All they need is for someone to go through it, correcting the typos, or changing phrases here and there to the appropriate ones and it's all good.

Overall, nothing is offensively bad about the story if you keep in mind that it is a fanfic. It's a good and enjoyable read that you most likely wouldn't regret reading.

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