The story flows a bit too quickly and everything is quite casual. There isn't really any suspense after the first chapter and the MC is a little too naive after her first experience. She also uses her Stealth skill too obviously. All of this makes sense though as the author writes her as a blank state. This does need to pick up after a while though, especially if she gets more skills and learns more. Intuition is definitely saving her ass a lot in the beginning.

Otherwise it would be good to describe people a bit more and the area she finds herself in. I have no clue how the prison looked like she fled from or the town structure itself. Where are the dead bodies, how did the surrounding area look like other than a bright light? It definitely is medieval but it doesn't say anywhere how the houses look like, any greenery, streets, lights, magic, anything. It's also a bit too quick how she finds help, maybe after a few hours or a while after looking around? The sense of time of the story also isn't always that good. The interaction at the inn where she instantly tells people about how much money she has is also hmm, it makes sense if you base it on intuition again but considering what she went through she is a bit too trusting. She also is quite a bit too confident in how she goes around and flaunts her Stealth skill.

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Closeranemone48

Status: 20 – last words

May 13, 2022

Honestly this is a great story and the mistakes in spelling and grammar- if there was any, I didn’t notice- are simply so small it doesn’t detract from the story at all. The main character is also just a breath of fresh air, as you only know what the main character knows, it allows for a sense of wonder when some things happen in the story. I would personally recommend this book.

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Minlett

Status: 37 - the real yui

Dec 6, 2023

This novel has an extremely naive main character who doesn't know anything. I love it. The idea that the character is being taught by her identify skill what anything is,

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she identifies a door to figure out it opens, she identifies the lock to figure out why she can't open it, identifies a bag to figure out its purpose, or clothes, etc.

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the way the author "describes" her emotions in first person, I just love it. The main character will probably never find a problem they can't steam roll with brute force or plot armor which is what it is, and the author hasn't updated this book in a long while, but I still recommended this to my sister and I still would be interested in the rest of the story if the author does come back to it.

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