As of chapter 26, I feel that the story is headed in a good direction, and I am hopeful that the quality will only increase as we learn more about the world the story takes place in.

Grammar and characters are both well developed, and many character tropes that side characters follow are challenged in such a way as to make them more more endearing.

I completely ship the MCs together, by the way.

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So far the story is good. It is a novel concept. It has great potential for story, comedy and may be even romance. I don't know.

The cons I see are some pacing issues and too many POVs. Although, POVs are good and let's people know the story from the perspective of another character, it also takes away the mystery/suspense.

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Frankly speaking (or writing, I guess), I think the concept behind the story is really interesting and the execution for the Main Character (s) is very well done (if a bit tropey). 

However, the rest of the characters are weaker : most of them are caricatural or out of character for the setting (secretly OP sister who moonlights as an adventurer, insane arrogant monologuing villain, scheming princess with perfect reputation that everyone loves despite the fact that people treat her as demon because she has white hair (???)). There are also problems in terms of distance between places and the time elapsed between events in a few case and a few other problems. &Nbsp;

All in all, it's a story with a very interesting premise burdened by an average execution. A good story that shouldn't be taken too seriously, with hopes of it improving further. 4 stars

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• Story: 4/5 — Enjoyable and creative concepts.
• Pacing: 3/5 — Conflicts came quick and ended quick. The only (seemingly) lenghty conflict or arc starts at around chapter 33.
• Characters: 4/5 — Characters seems consistent, and they interacted a lot, allowing readers to get to know them better.
• World-building: 3/5 — Generic fantasy world with some 'system'-ish magic. Serviceable, but nothing special
• Grammar: 2/5 — Mixed tenses, weird punctuation, and weird usage of some phrases. Overall readable tho.

The novelty of controling 2 bodies at the same time is worth the trouble of reading, but currently the story has not progressed far enough. I am looking forward to more chapters.

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For a story by someone who has never written before, this is pretty dang good! Naturally, not perfect with some use of classic tropes, but they are twisted just enough to make them feel unique. And speaking of unique, (as far as I know) the main plot point of multiple bodies is pretty unique and is done well enough. 

Dont take it super seriously and you should enjoy it. Definitely a nice and interesting story to binge at 2am. 

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Pretty interesting story with a more original concept

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A unique concept, rarely seen and utilized. The story is promising and will certainly be intriguing to find the world's development improves. We have side characters that at least interact and villainous organizations that have side banter. Continuing this path, this story would get better and better. However, the characters' povs can be enhanced as sometimes it switches perspectives between characters in a notice, requiring the reader to stop for a moment to realize. Certainly shows promise...

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It is fun, I hope there will be new chapters at some point in the future.

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Not bad really, the pacing and transition could use some work but the rest are fine to great. The process of one consciousness using two bodies I feel needs to be explored more. The positives and drawbacks of it. The world-building is underway, characters are getting their time to shine and there are enough mysteries to figure out. More is to come the story is kicking into a higher gear I think. 

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