Oh boy...

First off, this story has some weird grammatical issues, like switching between first person and third person in one paragraph. Also, for example, in a later chapter the second prince was talking to the MC about "your brother" which confused me, because there had been no mention of a sibling. Until I realised he was talking about his own brother.

Secondly, the formatting when it comes to dialogue is confusing. You either get

- I'm talking. - said a person. - I'm talking some more.

Or

"This is how I talk."

Or a mixture of the two, but there's no discernable pattern to which is used. (Also a few times where thought is formatted as speech.)

Onto the story. I really liked the premise, and the beginning... But as it went along, it became increasingly frustrating because the MC seems to lose braincells at an alarming rate.

Then we get the cliffhanger ending to book one:

But... What really brings the rating down is because the author decided to paywall the rest of the story after this trainwreck of a cliffhanger.

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The writing style is not bad its readable and sometimes enjoyable the only problem for me is the - for talking id prefer " " as its less confusing and when the characters switch to 3rd person and back to 1st person is also very confusing for me. I really did enjoy reading this, but the MC is really dense and it can be annoying sometimes. I would like to read the rest and support you by paying for it but I sadly cant as I do not have the money for that, so if you do post the rest that would mean a lot bc I cannot be left on this cliffhanger. 

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It's alright. The storyline is interresting. The character aren't 2d. There the grammar error like quotes sometime it's " other time it's -. Sometime the quote appear in the middle of sentence that isnt need. My only real crit is the ending for volume 1. 

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