The action and smut scenes are beautifully written out, but the interpersonal relationships are all messed up due to polyamorous reasons and free use type rules. the interpersonal relations in the story's Harem is all concentrated on Gwen. Peter is constantly the gimmick before the author swaps venom out of the scene for some Girl-bossing and villain redemption to 1-up Peter and show Peter how weak and useless he is and not needed. It took over 188 chapters before Peter even gets access to using his Spider and venom powers fully due to author's love of Nerfing Peter Venom into the mud. even after Peter finds out about Knull he still takes ZERO action to learn his origins and powers anymore than the usual Mortal Kombat training. it took 187 chapters before peter mans up and tries using his symbiote powers fully. even then its just platitudes and peter does the usual USELESS PETER MOMENT.

The Author could have made a polyamorous Peter parker and had him be a horny Peter Venom and get into one night stands with other heroines and had broken up some super hero couple with rebound s*x. But NOOOO, author prefer the Simp Gimp Peter Venom who is very emo and broody. Peter is soooo lame the first 200 chapters. Peter doesn't even complete tutorial Mode and unlock full access to Klyntar magic until over 180 chapters. even after 200 chapters, Peter just finished the tutorial mode and gained access to more than brute strength Venom traits and had just gotten out of the tutorial mode and left NY. he only gained the Klyntar magics of minor telepathy and other passive abilities. 

This is a story about Gwen's Harem of Girlfriends and she allows them to share her boytoy Venom and his addictive Super Jizz that act as an Aphrodisiac. Peter never had his Uncle Ben moment, but Gwen was allowed it for plot reasons and to make more conflict. Gwen is the Center of the relationships and she Man handles Peter often. She dictates What peter should think and the other girls dictate his s*x life. he is just a gigolo that Gwen was able to shackle to herself due to Peter being a bullied Incel for years. Peter is just an excuse for Gwen to hypnotize women into joining Gwen's harem of girlfriends. Peter don't even matter, Literally. They get the Jizz, they have an all girls orgie without Peter EVERYTIME. it is just his d*ck and addictive Jizz pheromones they care about. peter is just the Bar Tap for the next drinking Session.

I had REALLY wished this was Harem instead of polyamorous. This would have been so nice as a "Peter taking full control of venom and being a New Knull incarnate"  story. Would have been nice to read about peter and the Symbiotes doing smut as either separate or both forms. could have had scenes where peter can somewhat tame the symbiotes as a Knull incarnate and be treated as a godlike being or father creator type by the symbiote females. Instead we got a Simp Peter Venom forced into a polyamorous relation by his pushy Bis*xual Girlfriend who told him "they are dating now" after she started dating Felicia so she can run away from her control freak Cop dad. Peter was Gwen's excuse to running away from home, and being Gay in private while Peter was her Boyfriend OPENLY as a cover story.

The story is Okay at best. the typos can be ignored most times and the Pronouns changes get annoying but it readable. the author doesn't know USA very well and mess up a lot of the USA lore, but it can be ignored mostly. The author loves doing side stories and time skips, but forgets to label time skips and when chapters are side chapters to fill in forgotten plots the author didnt put before the big fight to reveal that peter is getting beaten to near death and gets to retire while Gwen and the girls beat the boss so they can act like tender loving waifu for the scene. next scene the girls forget Peter while he is recoverying or brooding to do orgies while Peter just broods and be all emo and I am not strong enough dialogue for the 10th time. there is a  LOT of retcon and forgotten plots from the first draft. this needs a full re-read and edit by the author.

I hate Gwen in this Verse. She is a Cuck Queen who forced Peter into a polyamorous relation. Gwen has a Harem of Girlfriends and Peter is the Dildo She shares with Straight or Bi Women. Peter feels so left out in this Relationship. It feels like Gwen is the Matriarch and Peter is just there to satisfy their lust only. they don't spend time with him or do things with him. Peter just gets dragged around and pretend its lovely to be dragged around. Gwen screws Peter until she passes out and then runs to Felica to get more s*x and fun times with her girlfriend. MJ in this one is redeemable but is joined into the story just fine. ** (edit: until Gwen started training MJ with making MJ have s*x after Gwen had Peter first like some medieval times Harem Queen. first Gwen had MJ clean up the royal consort's penis of the queen's pu**y juices. this trains Mj to be into Gay s*x. once MJ admits it is okay for gay s*x, Gwen takes Mj from peter and MJ is now part of Gwen's and Fel's gay s*x orgies from getting high off of Peter super Jizz. Next symb powers get stronger and MJ learns she is trans now and loves f**king with a life like Symbiote penis with Gwen or the other girls in Orgies further removing the need for Peter in the Lesbians only orgies Gwen and Fel throw often) ** Gwen doesn't feel like she loved Peter parker much. She keeps just man handling Peter and girl bossing Peter around. It is frustrating reading about how Peter f**ks his girlfriend until she is satisfied, and then Gwen runs off to do it with her "girlfriend" for the rest of the day. the polyamorous angle really killed the relations Vibe. At least if Gwen was a harem girl it would feel better to read this Plot line. But reading about Peter getting cucked and having his girl run off after being satisfied like a s*x toy isn't "fun" to read....

Did I mention the pheromones and drug like body fluids? So now they are using Peter like a coccaine bump  and aphrodisiac, before they go away happy and full of drugged up feelings....

.... MJ is Trans now. MJ is not Gay yet, but she has started making a real penis and having s*x with Gwen and Fel while Peter is busy being Venom and upgrading the Warehouse. Really starting to feel like Peter is being left out except only when they need a new Hit of Super Addictive Jizz to boost their drug addiction and get horny from the hormone boost. ALSO, Doc Oc Liv Definitely has tentacle Penis arms.... a lot of Pegging foreshadowing

This is a story about Gwen's super powered harem of girlfriends and her boytoy Venom.

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past ARC 6, Peter is no longer the main character. they move beyond peter parker and everyone else is more bad ass then peter parker and at the same time dumber than a rock. ARC 6 is Carol Danvers and THOR arc. no peter or venom. everyone one is corrupt and only the heroes are good and should be aloud to murder for fun.

Arc 7 they are back on Earth but now they are all back to relationship drama now that battle arcs are over. in this starting arc, they go into the relationship dynamics again. This AGAIN triggers me into a rage inducing fit. WHY, that in every s*x scene, is it Peter's only contribution is the addictive Jizz and then is ignored or kicked out so the girls can do a Lesbian Orgy with Symbiote Penis appendages????

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after chapter 250 now. there is a consistent trope of peter getting beaten down by grunts, training montage. grunt dies and peter make accolade and big speeches. new grunt that slightly stronger comes and peter is struggling again. girl boss comes save useless peter and shows him how a real hero should be badass like the girl bosses. be ready for A LOT of ret con and forgot plot points for plot conflict that dont matter to plot and can be forgot so it is forgotten to continue plot. A LOT of context is ignore or forgot. 250/600 chapters and Peter is still struggling to learn to utilize Venom's Klyntar magic and using Peter's enhanced spider powers. he is still just doing mundane Mortal peter parker activities, Like using civilian Hammers and screws to rebuild their Home base with super computer fabricators........ only time venom powers are in play is in combat and Peter never remembers he has Klyntar powers and webbing.

------ chapter 260 we just finished the Hydra arc and Peter conveniently had another useless peter moment. got  injured and had to sit out the hydra carrier battle scene. everyone had screen time but peter just had time to be beaten to a pulp and nearly die for plot reasons and so peter can't save the day. Author LOVES beating peter up so the girls can "save" peter and pander to the "sick" klyntar Godling. Peter never gets the chance to ever decide for him self, all s*x are decided by the council. the girls get the okay from, Gwen and peter just nods and is the "white knight" trope of perfect gentle man and slave worker. always slaving away and providing to the women..... every girl Peter has is due to venom pheromones and only Gwen was the one to really sound like Girlfriend material. but symbiote turned Gwen into a s*x deviant and a groomer, turning hot women into s*x slaves for the gay orgies without peter anywhere near...

Gonna Drop this for a while and maybe come back once I decide if I want to waste more of my time reading this Slop of a Fateful mount tai face slapping young master Marvel story. Peter is a typical Xianxia/Isekai young Boy (even though peter grad from highschool and is 19....) with Harem tags. Peter is also the battered women safe haven Trope; He cleans, he cooks, he eats you out, he lets you bang anyone with no questions asked, he is a provider, and he can Bring in more Hot women into the Gay orgies that wait in line for a turn for that Divine Penis.

YUP, GIMP SIMP BOYTOY Peter Puker. could never do anything right and always needing plot armor to save his ass... too many transvestite and forcing straight women into Being Bis*xual so gwen can screw them with out peter in the picture....

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The beginning is mediocre at best, and after a few chapters, plot holes are all over the place. 

This "rewrite" is super messy with (i) parts of the story at the wrong places, (ii) missings links between chapters and (iii) a pacing super chaotic. As if someone else than the original author tried to edit the original - and already passable novel - in the worst possible way.

Tbh, I don't understand why the ratting is that high...

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It doesn't look like a fic, the plot is better than today's comics...

It's like reading a book/comic that went through an editorial, it's not like reading a self-insertion work or a fanfiction.

The icing on the cake is that MC is not a Gary sue, he is just a fair, smart and full of fury Peter Parker.

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It’s a slow starter, unless building renovations give you a thrill. Then it was fun. Seeing the many love interests of Peter Parker given more credit than the comics was refreshing. The smut isn’t half-bad. Characters away from Peter are downgraded to keep him the Main Character. So the X-men are lame otherwise they would steal the show. Tony Stark & Nick Fury being lame doesn’t bother me. However, genocide of an entire continent does bother me. So I am done. I will get my escapism from some other webnovels. Wish me luck.

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Best spiderman fanfic, u will not disappoint and also it kinda have harems so for harems story fan u have to read this 

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Loved the original version--and totally enjoying the re-write! Excellent ride thus far!

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This is a great story I think you are doing a amazing job and it is even better now that u are redoing and editing this story

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