-- Plot --

The plot of the story is the same as any other Isekai/Reincarnation: you've got a character (s) that are sent from our world into another. There's no foul play, no weirdness, just the typical Here -> There. At the current point, we know very little about the other world and have little knowledge of what's going to happen. It's a slow burn, however, for good cause.

The initial portion of the story establishes the bond between our two Main Characters. It gives us good insight to who they are, their relationship, and sets the stage of what to expect from them going forward. In addition, we learn quite a bit about how our Author (the character) thinks and how he truly cares about his written world. As we move from Earth to GMAG, this is reinforced during their first interactions with the world.

The only problem is that at this point, there's no actual plot. It's been filler and prologue up to now. We don't know anything about any villains. There's no goals for the characters. There's no details or fluff about the GMAG world. There's nothing. I expect the Author (of this novel) to establish the plot/goal of the story within the next few chapters. If not, then for those reading and interested in the story- be ready for a long ride.

-- Grammar --

The grammar within the story needs some work but it doesn't break the readability. There's an overuse of commas, some use of "Lol" and anime-typical gestures/verbiage, and there are a few times words are misused or the sentences read awkwardly. If you aren't bothered by all this, though, then by all means carry on. For those that sort of flinch when you read it, prepare yourself. It's not prevalent nor excessive but it feels like you hit a pothole when it comes up. It's sharp, random, and never quite where you want it.

The comma problem isn't so much a problem due to its consistency factor, but it certainly makes reading difficult sometimes. Due to the effect a comma has on our mental voice, its relatively frequent appearance makes it feel like you're hiccuping sometimes. The Author pairs this with the word "but" to make it worse and now you've got a speed bump effect. If I had a recommendation for this; split the sentences. It'll be a smoother read.

-- Characters --

The characters are two fold; a treat, and wholly unrealistic. Their interactions with one another and the world show that the rules of the Earth within this story are not the same rules in real life. It doesn't exactly detract from the experience but I was left asking some questions at times. After the first two chapters, it really came across as self-insertion of the Male and a sort of fantasty-insertion of the Female. But, this didn't make them impossible to connect with.

The relationship between them is one a lot of young individuals have. They've been together for several years, they certainly love one another, and they are simply trying to live their lives. They're struggling, it's evident in the way Zayne thinks. He's had a rough life and he's finally got a sense of stability going for him. There is more to Luna than we initially see based on certain scenes and events, and her love for Zayne is pretty thick. This relationship is the backbone of the story and establishes itself as such.

Everything else, though, is questionable. When reading, keep in mind that this is a story. Don't get hemmed up on the little details of realism and you'll find yourself enjoying it a lot more. Or don't and get confused or scratch at your head at times like I did.

-- Overall --

The story as a whole, as mentioned prior, has a lot going for it so far. The characters, the GMAG world, and the fresh take on Isekai are all recipes for success. It's a fun read thus far. The chapters are short and don't really cut off awkwardly, but there are some details lacking in places that you as the Reader need to fill in. Don't overthink it and just go with the flow, you'll be fine.

I do have one warning, though. This story is currently on a knife's edge. Tilt too far and it'll become a more battle of attrition, with the characters going through a slog of events that bog the story progression down and make it stale. On the other hand, with the MC knowing everything about GMAG, he might try to bulldoze it and might end up becoming to OP and fail to achieve as much as the original character from the story. Luna's influence also has me concerned, as her constant need for physical attention has planted fears of this turning into a smut title acting like a regular novel. If her character doesn't develop, it'll be a hindrance.