A guy wakes up in a new world with a gamer system to support him through his journey to find meaning and some kind of purpose in life.
The gamer system has limitless potential for growth but as it turns out things are not so simple...
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I decided to write my own take on this concept, cause why not? I'm bored.
I will try a balance between wish-fulfilling, actual character development, and some slice of life.
I've never actually written anything besides some college papers so some constructive criticism would be helpful.
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[First World]: [Bunny Girl Senpai]
[Second World]: [Arifureta: From Commonplace to World's Strongest]
[Third World]: ???
Tags:
[Action] [Romance] [Gamer] [Gray MC] [Mature] [Multiverse] [R-18] [Strong MC] [World Hopping] [Slice of Life] [Omniverse] [No-Harem] [Power Couple]
If you want to support me and read some early access chapters check out my Patreon. I also post some exclusive R-18 content there.
www.patreon.com/addyctive
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Also, the art is not mine. I got it from Reddit. If the creator sees this and wants credit or wants me to take it down, just let me know.
This is purely a work of fan fiction. Please support the official release and know I claim no ownership or credit regarding the original characters.
- Chapter 0081: Arctic AdventureDec 13, 2022
- Chapter 0080: Hitching a RideOct 28, 2022
- Chapter 0079: AftermathOct 27, 2022
- Chapter 0078: The Sack of Ur (2/2)Oct 26, 2022
- Chapter 0077: The Sack of Ur (1/2)Oct 25, 2022
- Chapter 0076: Preparations and TalkOct 24, 2022
- Chapter 0075: A True TeacherOct 23, 2022
- Chapter 0074: The Lake Town of UrOct 22, 2022
- Chapter 0073: Divine Desolation (2/2)Oct 21, 2022
- Chapter 0072: Divine Desolation (1/2)Oct 21, 2022
- Chapter 0071: Yue’s FeelingsOct 19, 2022
- Chapter 0070: Adventurer’s GuildOct 18, 2022
- Chapter 0069: FuhrenOct 17, 2022
- Chapter 0068: JourneyOct 16, 2022
- Chapter 0067: Miledi ReisenOct 15, 2022
- 779 reading
- 148 plan to read
- 27 completed
- 30 paused
- 55 dropped
Maybe this is a shabby review
But this is has the one of the most potential good gamer FanFiction. Maybe you can find some chapter boring between maybe chapter24-29 But this is a good read AND most importantly this is a noharem fanfiction
Ps:Sorry for the bad English
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English is not my native language, sorry for the mistakes. The writing quality is good, and the idea of the gamer traveling through the multiverse is also good, but ironically the romance kind of ruins things because the focus is on it and not on the story, at least until the chapter where I left off (44).
speaking of the positives, the system is well balanced, not stupidly op for now.
the characters are well defined, and the author is meticulous with their personality so they don't "go out of their role"
on the negative, the MC already reincarnates in love with the bunny girl, and it is very clear that the author is a simp for her, the romance between them being very fast, it practically ends in 10 or 20 first chapters and after that, it becomes extremely sticky with almost constant s*x, the development of the story is very slowed down, and the story is already a slice-of-life, which are famous for being slow, at this point I started to skip paragraphs, and some chapters completely, like from 32 to 35, where there are literally 4 chapters of a giant date along with s*x in two or three of them.
the author's notes in the middle of the chapter should also be removed, placed in the footer, or in the proper place for the author's comment, as this hinders the immersion.
Finally, a point that I didn't particularly like is the direction the story is taking.
apparently, the system will betray the MC, with a bonus of a universe being much stronger than a bonus of the system that should be stronger than one of the universe, implying (the characters also mention this) that the system it's deceiving them and it's not theirs, it's something external that can take everything back whenever it wants.
this is kind of stupid and meaningless to me because the system already gives infinite vitality, almost unlimited stamina, eternity, and a mountain of powers to the user, if the creator wants to screw the user, there is much more direct ways without giving such absurd bonuses, besides how the hell would the creator be so dumb as to create something that users will use to surpass him possibly?
it makes little sense for the creator of the system to give so much to screw the user as it makes little sense for the user to be able to overcome the system and its creator
this "destroy the system and kill the system creator" direction that the story is taking is as insane as it is cliche, my thoughts have always been the same in other stories I've seen do the same
would you give a child a gun with ammo and the security lock off? Congratulations, you did a excellent job in killing yourself!
in conclusion, the idea is good, the writing quality is good, the characters are decent, the romance is fast and sticky, and good at first but then it gets tiresome and repetitive, the possible end goal that the author seems to have for the MC, as mentioned in the spoiler tab above, it's messed up to me, it seems pointless and fruitless never coming to anything, finally, if you who are reading this giant review want to read a more than diabetic romance, this is the story, if not, think about it twice before starting to read because the plot is slow.
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Great fanfiction don't give up on it
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