Dude the story is good and all but its really to fast paced, you didn't even put a 'fast cultivation' tag. Also the way how you describe and explain the battle scenarios and scenes is lacking in the aspect of common sense. 

For example near the chapters at start when Tiamat fought with the black dragon, when she got hit she flew only by 10 meters in your description... aren't they very powerful beings in higher realms? It should be like 'the mountain and earth shook as Tiamat was pushed back 10 miles from the  force' like that!

Dude have you read "Mechanical God Emperor"? Then copy their style, isn't the MC learning a lot of spells and magic? Isn't the rank of his expertise in different type of magic high? Then why is it in battle scenarios, the descriptions are so bland and don't bring the feeling of they are really beings of their power level!

Very lacking, though in other aspects like world-building, character interaction, story plot, grammar construct are all great.

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This story is one of the rare breath of fresh air among the harem saturated DxD fanfics. Here we follow the story of Zeoticus Gremory (transmigrated MC), who is Rias' father but from the young age of him taking over his territory as its lord. His goal is established early and everything he does from then on is towards achieving them. The story primarily deals with with his journey on his rise in the underworld.

From the tags mentioned, I haven't reached the harem aspect of the story but from what I read so far, I don't think romance is going to be given heavy emphasis which I can get behind, as I have told before DxD fanfics are saturated in that aspect. (Subjective opinion)

For now, the only downside to the story I can find is that this story needs some more work with its paraphrasing and grammer. But assuming this is author's first project, it is fairly decent but I do recommend the author to hire editor for fine tuning the chapters.

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