Author needs to work on his grammar and sentence construction. Over all a good idea for a novel but, the way it is written makes it hard to read.

I cringe everytime something is described  like really dude do you have someone to proofread before you publish? 

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The story is going well, but the chapter layout just hurts. But I do like the direction the story is going aswell as the attitude of the MC.

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The story is pretty meaningless. If you want to read empty-headed repetitive chapters where the protagonist flexes, smacks trope over-the-top villains, and women swoon, look no further.

The protagonists hidden name must be Gary Stu. This Terror Infinity style story caters to overpowered self-insert readers.  Author deletes comments that he doesn't like to hear. I deleted a very long review in favor of this bit that will simply note that the plot armor and story is ridiculous. At no time in the story does the protagonist seem to be in any real danger, struggle, need of money or other resources, or wanting for females to bed.... the harem is equally ridiculous and the guy is meaninglessly adding 2-3 at a time constantly; he uses them like disposable tissues.

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The writing style can take awhile to get used to but once you do, the story is pretty good. Definitely worth a read if you are into fanfics. 

I really like the MC and at first its a bit cringe when he "flirts" with women, it gets alot better later. Honestly almost everything gets better writing wise as the story progresses.

I do think the first 50ish chapters could use a rewrite now that the author has more experience. 

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So far the only thing that disappoints me, besides the grammar which is bearable, is how easily relationships occur, they have no substance, they are empty and meaningless, they are just collecting trophies and they cooperate so easily that it is unreal, even in anime doesn't happen in 10 min. Sigh... author if you would just take a little effort, not much just small, that takes at least a few days to get a woman you just met, it would be amazing, take just a moment, you don't need to write down the interactions you have during that time Just say that after a few days they began to feel something for him and started dating, it is not necessary to extend it so much, just a little. That way at least it gives some substance and seems more real.

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