Loving the Fanfic, its off to a great start, The name (as stated in author's notes) isn't quite there~ some big holes caused by your timeskips though... (This turned into a much larger/deeper review than I was intending 3hrs ago...)
Your MC is an interesting one so-far this can be good or horrible depending on his later actions, His actions have been simple, and minor-bluffing/acting (Please be careful it doesn't reach Aizen-level~). You've built up His previous life a bit high-performance/contradicting? but that's a pretty standard headache/danger to start with, it can go well, or horrible... Right now, The Resurrection/Ritual itself is accounting for His innovator-level brain amplifying/refreshing His former training/teaching.
As an author take your time making the story fit together (BEWARE TIMESKIPS! What did your high-performance MC do in that time!), adding a character/new MC to the Naruto timeline causes many domino changes to 'the time/story-line'~ especially sense he can/does use clones to run errands! (Author can use side-novels to detail those timeskips or force them into a flashback later on, just be careful not to overlap/overfill your timeline!)
Upping the Close-Quarter-Combat and weaponry technology levels can be fancy, entertaining and amazing technobabble, but they can also be very dangerous world-balance changing factors... and now as an author of that advancement Sango (for now his identity is being protected by 3rd hokage) is a valuable and mysterious target for other country's/hidden villages.
The biggest question/problem I have about Sango right now... is why isn't He (knowing/having-information-of the original storyline and character's) making steps for 'the others' and the future... If You were Sango and You knew Your actions were changing the timeline, would you throw it completely off the tracks and 'F-it' or make a leap-of-faith request/deal of The surprisingly supportive old man to manipulate certain events which are going to happen in the near-future? Having a half-care about Sasuke's running away and Asuma's reputation in the dumps is something that he (as a character) might not care about, but as His personality is displaying, he does want to gather a fancy harem... (and He's being offered the third hokage's 'support' for it!)
-Konan is the (Akatsuki) hidden rain angel/ruler right now soon to making many choices that she's questioning. (deaths of certain rain-kunoichi) Sango has already proven that he's got little problem changing timelines or taking advantage of mental weaknesses...
-Can he save/acquire Karin Uzumaki & Her mother? at this time they should be in the hidden grass being abused for their healing ability (mother dies after being over-sucked, when Karin is age 10?) soon to be at the chunin exams/ claimed by Orochimaru, or is Sango going to let that part of time timeline (with sasuke/orochimaru) play out without Him so that He can acquire Sadara Uchiha later?
-Several encounters already with Anbu/Root. High-level kunoichi... Force is an available option and lying/acting only partially required! Possible repercussions to Danzo?
-Soon to encounter Temari preparing to attack Kohona with the chunin exams~ Kazekage's currently dead/replaced by Orochimaru.
-is Rin Nohara dead in this storyline? or is she still a puppet out there waiting to be saved?
-send out a clone to get information on the current situations of Fu and Yugito Nii? while Fu was supposedly given Naruto-level of isolation, Yugito was supposedly hailed as a hero? Samui, Mabui,
-So many character's "just in the naruto story/Kohona" that are not mentioned~~~ Tenten? Hanabi Hyuga? Natsu Hyuga? Anko? Hana Inuzuka?
I will highly advise you to read/check out the fanfic written by TheLemonSage: Eroninja. it has "A LOT" of smut (as expected), but also has an outstanding story! Naruto is no longer 'the' standard ret*rd, "strengthened by s*x (smut) ", and the writer makes sure to note the domino/butterfly effect in the other characters/world (which actually is a high enough level it could be an amazing fanfic without the smut). Reading this set pretty high standards for Me to enjoy fanfics, Which I am enjoying Yours!
This is a very good story, well written and faithful to the original story. I often find myself remembering Naruto story while reading this one. I think the author made a really good job writing this fan-fic. The MC is interesting and generally the characters feel real to me.
The only issue is that there is no release since last October, but I enjoyed reading the story till now nonetheless.
Overall one of the, if not the best Naruto ff. MC is op, but not too much. Story and characters are interesting and not one dimensional. What more can you ask for?
This story follows Sakura Haruno. While Naruto was off training with Jiraiya, Sakura learned a few things about herself. Mainly that she doesn’t need Sasuke, she still would like to save her friend and comrade, but she no longer sees him as
Short version: A guy gets yeeted into the Bleach World. Oh, and he also has a system.
Long version: In a world where Kazuya felt trapped, he longed for a life of freedom. When he wakes up in the strange land of Hueco Mundo, he’s deter
Summary: In which the bastard son of Lex Luthor has lived his entire life sickly, frail, and weak. However, when that first life comes to an end, he discovers the truth.
(Originally Started in February of 2023 on other websites)
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I am not really that good at writing a synopsis but here goes nothing,
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Synopsis:
It’s about a guy who transmigrates into Bruce Wayne’s body after the original gets killed along with his parents. Now, the only w
In an innovative reimagining of the Harry Potter universe, this novel introduces a unique twist to the beloved story, focusing on Harry Potter’s journey enhanced by the Technology System (TS) and his interactions with Nigel, an AI assistant.
This is a pretty nice fanfic. I don't know about the future, but it seems to be heading in the right direction.
Grammar and Language 5/5, which is incredibly good considering the average level in the site.
Story 5/5, mostly since it coincides with many of my preferences in how a story should be written.
Keep up the good work!
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Loving the Fanfic, its off to a great start, The name (as stated in author's notes) isn't quite there~ some big holes caused by your timeskips though... (This turned into a much larger/deeper review than I was intending 3hrs ago...)
Your MC is an interesting one so-far this can be good or horrible depending on his later actions, His actions have been simple, and minor-bluffing/acting (Please be careful it doesn't reach Aizen-level~). You've built up His previous life a bit high-performance/contradicting? but that's a pretty standard headache/danger to start with, it can go well, or horrible... Right now, The Resurrection/Ritual itself is accounting for His innovator-level brain amplifying/refreshing His former training/teaching.
As an author take your time making the story fit together (BEWARE TIMESKIPS! What did your high-performance MC do in that time!), adding a character/new MC to the Naruto timeline causes many domino changes to 'the time/story-line'~ especially sense he can/does use clones to run errands! (Author can use side-novels to detail those timeskips or force them into a flashback later on, just be careful not to overlap/overfill your timeline!)
https://naruto. fandom. com/wiki/User:Seelentau/Naruto_Timeline
Upping the Close-Quarter-Combat and weaponry technology levels can be fancy, entertaining and amazing technobabble, but they can also be very dangerous world-balance changing factors... and now as an author of that advancement Sango (for now his identity is being protected by 3rd hokage) is a valuable and mysterious target for other country's/hidden villages.
The biggest question/problem I have about Sango right now... is why isn't He (knowing/having-information-of the original storyline and character's) making steps for 'the others' and the future... If You were Sango and You knew Your actions were changing the timeline, would you throw it completely off the tracks and 'F-it' or make a leap-of-faith request/deal of The surprisingly supportive old man to manipulate certain events which are going to happen in the near-future? Having a half-care about Sasuke's running away and Asuma's reputation in the dumps is something that he (as a character) might not care about, but as His personality is displaying, he does want to gather a fancy harem... (and He's being offered the third hokage's 'support' for it!)
-Konan is the (Akatsuki) hidden rain angel/ruler right now soon to making many choices that she's questioning. (deaths of certain rain-kunoichi) Sango has already proven that he's got little problem changing timelines or taking advantage of mental weaknesses...
-Can he save/acquire Karin Uzumaki & Her mother? at this time they should be in the hidden grass being abused for their healing ability (mother dies after being over-sucked, when Karin is age 10?) soon to be at the chunin exams/ claimed by Orochimaru, or is Sango going to let that part of time timeline (with sasuke/orochimaru) play out without Him so that He can acquire Sadara Uchiha later?
-Several encounters already with Anbu/Root. High-level kunoichi... Force is an available option and lying/acting only partially required! Possible repercussions to Danzo?
-Soon to encounter Temari preparing to attack Kohona with the chunin exams~ Kazekage's currently dead/replaced by Orochimaru.
-is Rin Nohara dead in this storyline? or is she still a puppet out there waiting to be saved?
-send out a clone to get information on the current situations of Fu and Yugito Nii? while Fu was supposedly given Naruto-level of isolation, Yugito was supposedly hailed as a hero? Samui, Mabui,
-So many character's "just in the naruto story/Kohona" that are not mentioned~~~ Tenten? Hanabi Hyuga? Natsu Hyuga? Anko? Hana Inuzuka?
I will highly advise you to read/check out the fanfic written by TheLemonSage: Eroninja. it has "A LOT" of smut (as expected), but also has an outstanding story! Naruto is no longer 'the' standard ret*rd, "strengthened by s*x (smut) ", and the writer makes sure to note the domino/butterfly effect in the other characters/world (which actually is a high enough level it could be an amazing fanfic without the smut). Reading this set pretty high standards for Me to enjoy fanfics, Which I am enjoying Yours!
https://ficwad. com/a/TheLemonSage
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This is a very good story, well written and faithful to the original story. I often find myself remembering Naruto story while reading this one. I think the author made a really good job writing this fan-fic. The MC is interesting and generally the characters feel real to me.
The only issue is that there is no release since last October, but I enjoyed reading the story till now nonetheless.
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Great Story, love the buildup in "Romance", Pretty good. Highly recommend
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Overall one of the, if not the best Naruto ff. MC is op, but not too much. Story and characters are interesting and not one dimensional. What more can you ask for?
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