It's an enjoyable read, with several well-integrated worlds and characters and interactions are quite good, but the grammar/ sentence structure isn't the best (english 2nd language sort of stuff but still readable). If you don't mind that it could be a 5 star read, but if you can't stand bad english then this could be a 3 for you.

Could be better tagged though.

--Long version--

This is quite a good non-supernatural (all the anime worlds are slice-of-life, romance, sport, cooking, etc.) combination (of multiple anime worlds) fanfic and quite enjoyable to read. I personally have not read or watched the original works except shokugeki no soma and a couple of episodes of QQ and Haikyuu! But from what I've read, the worlds have been merged well without any apparent discord.

The MC is pretty much good at everything. Cooking, Volleyball, Making Manga (with the benefit of transmigrator memories for famous works), I can't remember anything else off the top of my head. Anyway. What I'm trying to say is the MC is a very capable person. Might want to add a tag for that?

There is a bit of exposition at the beginning to explain everything, but it is not difficult to read. Don't let the initial info-dumping turn you away though, it is only used for the setup. I.e. The summary of the MC's past life in chapter 1 (?). It would be better if this information were introduced throughout the novel, so the reader can gradually get to know your character and develop a stronger emotional connection. It isn't a dealbreaker though and some of that does happen (mainly with the MC's 2nd childhood and such).

My biggest gripe is the sentence structure doesn't always make sense. Same with the grammar, spelling, etc. My guess would be that the author is a non-native english speaker. It is, however, not a big problem and is easy to figure out from context. Id does break the immersion a but though. I would suggest the author getting an editor or using something like grammarly.

Another thing I am curious about is that thus far, is the romance tag. Is it going to be incest (with Kiyoko) ? Or with a Quintuplet? Or someone else or all of the above (harem) ? It may be beneficial to add some more tags to clarify these things as some people dislike fictional incest and/or harem, etc.

You may not want to do this as it (at times) spoils the surprise of who they end up with but at the end of the day, it helps people who are more likely to like the fic to find it. I only found it because it was on the scribble home page (as a new fic). Otherwise I would have never found it. Just food for thought.

I enjoy this fic and would rate it:

5 for enjoyability (I enjoyed reading it [I'm a simple guy, if it's enjoyable, it gets 5, if it's terrible it gets a 1 or 2])

3 for grammar/ sentence structure (ie. Readable but not great [1 is unreadable, or extremely difficult to work out, 3 is bad but readable, 5 is great])

5 for the world (the way you interweaved the different anime worlds was quite good)

So 4 or 4.5 stars overall, but I'll rate the review as 5 stars because while the grammar is annoying at times, I'm so used to reading sh*tty grammar, I barely noticed it most of the time and I think with a bit of polishing, this could be a solid 5 stars.

Please keep in mind, this is only my opinion and I'm not an expert in any meaning of the word (though english is my native language), or a critic, so take everything with a grain of salt. Good luck with continuing this fic.

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