A boy wakes up in a mysterious black space, with a goddess who reincarnates him as a demonic dungeon. There’s just one catch in this world dungeons are girls, and then when he finally unlocks his avatar he discovers it is a cute loli demon and while he or rather she is dealing with her newfound gender issues the church comes calling.
This is my first attempt at a dungeon story, and my first story. Sorry about the early chapters, not meeting the same standards as my other fiction on this site, but I have not had time to revise them. Don’t worry it gets better later on. I write primarily to improve myself, so any feedback you have will be greatly appreciated.
Not enough character development. The mind corruption is a just completely boring aspect in any story. The premise of the story is just completely anti-climatic. Reads too monotonous/emotionless.
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Good story.
Some interesting ideas with world and universe in general.
Characters. Main cast are good. Well written and good development. Side characters, some are good and interesting, some are not so. The reason mostly time. There are a lot of characters and PoV often changes. That's why sides may not get enough time, some even be "forgotten" for some time. On other hand a LOT of things are going on, so it not a bad trade. Also one of the best dragons. The do think and act "not like mortals". You may hate some for their actions, but this are good written dragons. Not your typical "dragon waifu" that aside from dragon from lives and acts as typical human.
Story is not the best, but not bad. Overall I would say it's good. It's like there is central pillar in form of Misaki story, which is her live as dungeon and then there is a lot of stories of other characters that at one point or another connects with main story and between themselves. It may create feeling that author don't have plan for the story and simply writting, but with all those connections I would not be so sure. Oh there are also LOTS of Yuri. Really a lot.
World and universe in general (check other works of author) is interesting. Having to see it reveal something new is enjoyable.
While novel have it's problems, for me it was super enjoyable non the less. And we read novels first and foremost for enjoyment. So 5/5.
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10/10 in pretty much ever aspect.
You come to read this for a reason and it puts every tag it has to good use in very well written ways that makes it hard to stop reading
Would suggest to anyone and everyone to at least give it a try
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