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Morbid
Morbid
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Arnold was a strange child. Not the normal strange, he was too odd even for that. There was something wrong with him. No one could really tell until it was too late. He had become Morbid.
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HaremHorrorMaturePsychologicalSchool LifeSlice of LifeSmut
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College/University Cunning Protagonist Evil Protagonist Gamers Handsome Male Lead Kidnappings Murders
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      New MAtt1245679
      Status: c201

      what Wallabalooza said except

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      "Personally, my biggest gripe with your séx scenes if how you tended—at least very much in the earlier chapters—to show us séx scenes of other couples, and even of someone like Heather getting fúcked by 2 other guys, when you had set her up as a love interest in the beginning. While I'm aware it is not actually netorae/cheating/whatever, it still leans in that direction, and it just felt unnecessary. It is not séxy or hot to anyone without a sharing fetish, in my opinion, and dragged the story down a bit for me. Mentioning her having séx with them is one thing, showing explicit scenes of it is something else entirely. My suggestion is stick to séx scenes involving the main character, and leave the rest non-explicit, at least when dealing with potential or past love interests for the MC."

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      New WisHard
      Status: c200

      GREAT STORY, but the next button is not working, please fix ASAP😁

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      tarakis
      Status: 111 an important truth

      This is a Superb Story. Bokuboy is a fantastic writer, this story is absolutely amazing. Arnold is a social inept man that is a Honest and Protective Sociopath. This has it all s*x, violence, drama and the ability to pull your heart-strings. Truly Truly Awesomely Awesome!!!!!

      :D CHEERS (c)

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      Wallabalooza
      Status: c200

      There are a few minor spoilers below.


      This, to me, is by far your best story. I went and read your other ones, after finishing Morbid, but they just did not reach the same quality for me.

      The characters felt real. The interactions were interesting. The plot was a little wobbly at times, but still kept you going and coming back. His personality was oddly intriguing. A story that hooked me from the start, and kept me on the line 'til the end.

      The séx became a little grating at times, and I think you could have handled this by favoring a bit of quality over quantity, and having maybe 20-30% fewer séx scenes, but make certain ones 20-50% longer, with slightly better build up. Still, the scenes mostly fit your story and style very well, and it was still very much enjoyable.

      Personally, my biggest gripe with your séx scenes if how you tended—at least very much in the earlier chapters—to show us séx scenes of other couples, and even of someone like Heather getting fúcked by 2 other guys, when you had set her up as a love interest in the beginning. While I'm aware it is not actually netorae/cheating/whatever, it still leans in that direction, and it just felt unnecessary. It is not séxy or hot to anyone without a sharing fetish, in my opinion, and dragged the story down a bit for me. Mentioning her having séx with them is one thing, showing explicit scenes of it is something else entirely. My suggestion is stick to séx scenes involving the main character, and leave the rest non-explicit, at least when dealing with potential or past love interests for the MC.

      I'm not sure what you're doing with the mother, to be honest. You set her up as a clear incestual interest, and then just kind of full stopped that train, and kept her on that precipice for the rest of the story. It was finally addressed near the end here, where lines were finally drawn.. Yet it just felt a little like a lot of the buildup was wasted in this way.

      Speaking of wasted buildup.. I have to mention the VR game. This felt like a part of the story that you kind of just wanted to do, without having any real justification for it in-story. It came about as a really bad plot (the whole invitation vengeance thing was just a mistake from the start, and it never worked), and then was kind of somewhat visited once in a new moon, without ever really mattering. It's the kind of thing that would be cut out of the story entirely in a second/third draft, as it did not work. Even if you have something planned for it in the future, it honestly just doesn't feel worth it, nor does it fit the story.

      I had hoped his psychopathic tendencies would show themselves a bit more, but he manages to keep a surprisingly good handle on them. I mean.. He loves dissecting things, this is made clear in the very first few chapters. The promise you set up here, along with the tags on the story, was that he would become a serial killer who would cut up and dissect his victims for enjoyment. At least this is the impression I got.

      He then began killing people—quite a few of them, too—but never actually dissected any of them. While I understand logically why he didn't, as it would have caused trouble with the police and got him caught way easier, he should have at least gone through some emotional turmoil of wanting to, barely being able to hold himself back. He just kind of became a coldblooded murderer, and his dissection quirk was strangely sidelined outside of the laboratory. We got no/very few emotions from him when actually performing the kills, and I really felt this was too bad.

      While these are a few negatives, it's more like honest feedback for a story I thoroughly enjoyed reading. This is also why I 5 starred it despite the issues, as it is by far the best story I have read on this site so far, even if that may partially be because it hits some notes with me personally.

      Very much recommended for others, as long as you're in the mood for a slice of life-y, character/relationship driven story with some twists. Thanks for posting.

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      RunedKnight
      Status: from the beginning to current..

      This is an amazingly good story!! Be warned though, it is not a nice sweet children's story. This story is about the darker side of our everyday dramas. It is a little slow to get going, but by chapter 3 it is well on its way.

         If you are not one that does well with realistic violence, this might not be the read for you. It also contains s*xual content revolving around a horny teenage male, enough said.

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      Newyevon2
      Status: Great author, good story

      Having read this on a different site, I would recommend anyone to start reading it.

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      ARodz
      Status: c200

      One of the best. EVER.

      I regret it so much to not be able to read the finished story : (

      It's been almost 5 months since the author stopped logging in and these are sad times....

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      NohVoha
      Status: c182

      Raunchy goodness with a not so idiotic MC, very nice

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      Hellequin90
      Status: 147 a little more shopping

      I have always loved this story and was so happy when the author moved it to this site to keep it going. It is so interesting to me the fact that someone so emotionally different can love his mother so much. The author does a great job showing this with all the little things that Arnold only does for her. Keep up the great work!

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      Deffjeff87
      Status: c67

      This is a great story. The pacing, grammer, structure, etc. Is all pretty damn good. 

      There is even little things that happen in the early chapters that stays with the later chapters. 

      The best way to explain the story is a human robot learning to live. 

      This is a great read that keeps getting constant updates and also seems as if it has a editor to make sure everything is correct. 

      I haven't read the authors others works but the expectations are really high after reading this one. 

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