Morbid
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Synopsis
Arnold was a strange child. Not the normal strange, he was too odd even for that. There was something wrong with him. No one could really tell until it was too late. He had become Morbid.
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HaremHorrorMaturePsychologicalSchool LifeSlice of LifeSmut- Morbid Alternate Universe 105 – 120: Turning Tides Turn BackJul 18, 2021
- 200 The Road To GreatnessFeb 13, 2020
- 199 Electronic BuzzFeb 12, 2020
- 198 Heather’s DesignsFeb 11, 2020
- 197 Kelly’s TestFeb 10, 2020
- 196 Picking Up PamFeb 9, 2020
- 195 Picking Up KellyFeb 8, 2020
- 194 More Than What You BuyFeb 7, 2020
- 193 Airing Things OutFeb 6, 2020
- 192 Planning ThingsFeb 5, 2020
- 191 The UnexpectedFeb 4, 2020
- 190 More RevelationsFeb 3, 2020
- 189 Interesting SubjectsFeb 2, 2020
- 188 A Bit MoreFeb 1, 2020
- 187 Changed ExpectationsJan 31, 2020
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Hiatus - Updated Jul 18, 2021
Last updated 3 years ago
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This, to me, is by far your best story. I went and read your other ones, after finishing Morbid, but they just did not reach the same quality for me.
The characters felt real. The interactions were interesting. The plot was a little wobbly at times, but still kept you going and coming back. His personality was oddly intriguing. A story that hooked me from the start, and kept me on the line 'til the end.
The séx became a little grating at times, and I think you could have handled this by favoring a bit of quality over quantity, and having maybe 20-30% fewer séx scenes, but make certain ones 20-50% longer, with slightly better build up. Still, the scenes mostly fit your story and style very well, and it was still very much enjoyable.
Personally, my biggest gripe with your séx scenes if how you tended—at least very much in the earlier chapters—to show us séx scenes of other couples, and even of someone like Heather getting fúcked by 2 other guys, when you had set her up as a love interest in the beginning. While I'm aware it is not actually netorae/cheating/whatever, it still leans in that direction, and it just felt unnecessary. It is not séxy or hot to anyone without a sharing fetish, in my opinion, and dragged the story down a bit for me. Mentioning her having séx with them is one thing, showing explicit scenes of it is something else entirely. My suggestion is stick to séx scenes involving the main character, and leave the rest non-explicit, at least when dealing with potential or past love interests for the MC.
I'm not sure what you're doing with the mother, to be honest. You set her up as a clear incestual interest, and then just kind of full stopped that train, and kept her on that precipice for the rest of the story. It was finally addressed near the end here, where lines were finally drawn.. Yet it just felt a little like a lot of the buildup was wasted in this way.
Speaking of wasted buildup.. I have to mention the VR game. This felt like a part of the story that you kind of just wanted to do, without having any real justification for it in-story. It came about as a really bad plot (the whole invitation vengeance thing was just a mistake from the start, and it never worked), and then was kind of somewhat visited once in a new moon, without ever really mattering. It's the kind of thing that would be cut out of the story entirely in a second/third draft, as it did not work. Even if you have something planned for it in the future, it honestly just doesn't feel worth it, nor does it fit the story.
I had hoped his psychopathic tendencies would show themselves a bit more, but he manages to keep a surprisingly good handle on them. I mean.. He loves dissecting things, this is made clear in the very first few chapters. The promise you set up here, along with the tags on the story, was that he would become a serial killer who would cut up and dissect his victims for enjoyment. At least this is the impression I got.
He then began killing people—quite a few of them, too—but never actually dissected any of them. While I understand logically why he didn't, as it would have caused trouble with the police and got him caught way easier, he should have at least gone through some emotional turmoil of wanting to, barely being able to hold himself back. He just kind of became a coldblooded murderer, and his dissection quirk was strangely sidelined outside of the laboratory. We got no/very few emotions from him when actually performing the kills, and I really felt this was too bad.
While these are a few negatives, it's more like honest feedback for a story I thoroughly enjoyed reading. This is also why I 5 starred it despite the issues, as it is by far the best story I have read on this site so far, even if that may partially be because it hits some notes with me personally.
Very much recommended for others, as long as you're in the mood for a slice of life-y, character/relationship driven story with some twists. Thanks for posting.
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This is a Superb Story. Bokuboy is a fantastic writer, this story is absolutely amazing. Arnold is a social inept man that is a Honest and Protective Sociopath. This has it all s*x, violence, drama and the ability to pull your heart-strings. Truly Truly Awesomely Awesome!!!!!
:D CHEERS (c)
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This is an amazingly good story!! Be warned though, it is not a nice sweet children's story. This story is about the darker side of our everyday dramas. It is a little slow to get going, but by chapter 3 it is well on its way.
If you are not one that does well with realistic violence, this might not be the read for you. It also contains s*xual content revolving around a horny teenage male, enough said.
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Having read this on a different site, I would recommend anyone to start reading it.
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One of the best. EVER.
I regret it so much to not be able to read the finished story : (
It's been almost 5 months since the author stopped logging in and these are sad times....
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Raunchy goodness with a not so idiotic MC, very nice
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The quality of the writing and characters is great. But the story has went downhill in my opinion with its treatment of Kelly. I've skimmed ahead (ch 197) and the treatment of her hasn't improved.
To start with everything is constantly conspiring against Arnold and her. First her parent's personal delusions of Arnold, then the attack on Arnold's house. With both of those despite her own wishes she gets to spend very little time with Arnold. So with her being a virgin and Arnold leaving the s*x decision entirely up to her it takes her a while for her to work up the courage and for things to go anywhere. Which is understandable given Arnold is rather passive, she's inexperienced with the decision left to her and everything is conspiring against them spending time together.
So when they finally try to have s*x and run into problems with a burst blood vessel when her hymen breaks and she needs stitches and s*x is put on hold again. She sees it as her own body betraying her and as her failing Arnold and their relationship. Arnold sees it as him injuring her and dumps her to protect her because of a small physical injury that literally anyone else with a penis would have probably caused (he's a 7 incher not a monster), he abandons her and causes way more emotional damage than there was physical damage. He, this supposed biology prodigy sees them as physically incompatible and himself permanently harmful to her, when most other men would be the same or possibly worse. It's not actually a big deal at all beyond needing to take things slow and be careful for a bit after she heals. The doctor literally tells them this
So after losing her best friend by sticking with Arnold, largely alienating her parents by sticking with Arnold, and basically planning to sneak away to college with Arnold (practically running away from home with Arnold), looking after Arnolds mom when she was going through losing the house and sticking with her... Arnold one sidedly abandons her at the drop of a hat with no discussion. That is infinitely worse emotionally than the damage caused during their s*x attempt.
I skipped ahead to where Kelly was trying to give Arnold a b**wjob to be part of his group of girls and share him. That's a bit weird but their reactions to her trying too hard and choking on his cum is once again terrible. They are upset with her because she made Arnold hurt her again (her choking). Choking is literally nothing on a scale of things hurting, there's going to be some problems with learning anything and that's all that is. Once again the treatment of Kelly is far more emotionally damaging than physically. And nobody cares.
Kelly is this really sweet and soft gal who is getting emotionally raked over the coals again and again and again. And everyone, especially Arnold, just treats it like it's fine because of some convoluted nonsense about not physically causing her the slightest harm.
If Kelly and Arnold realized that being exclusive wasn't going to work that would be one thing. I largely like Pam and Janet. But totally f*cking over the nicest character in your story and mentally treating her like sh*t is not cool.
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This is a great story. The pacing, grammer, structure, etc. Is all pretty damn good.
There is even little things that happen in the early chapters that stays with the later chapters.
The best way to explain the story is a human robot learning to live.
This is a great read that keeps getting constant updates and also seems as if it has a editor to make sure everything is correct.
I haven't read the authors others works but the expectations are really high after reading this one.
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I have always loved this story and was so happy when the author moved it to this site to keep it going. It is so interesting to me the fact that someone so emotionally different can love his mother so much. The author does a great job showing this with all the little things that Arnold only does for her. Keep up the great work!
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Its just that good, The dudes skills are on point. You truly are able to feel for and empathize with these characters, they are fully fleshed out. Any novel that can bring out feelings like this is well worth reading.
I'm honestly crying right now. I finished the Novel, but I left this status marked at 105 for a reason. It really was the turning point.
I'm caught in this bizarre tug-of-war of emotions. Part of me wants to support the author through Paypal donations, while another part is growing increasingly resentful towards him. I'm reluctant to delve into any more of his stories. I dread stumbling upon another 'Kelly' incident, where he masterfully makes us emotionally invest in a character and her romantic journey, only to witness her endure emotional torture for over 100 chapters without any semblance of a happy ending. I genuinely appreciated chapters 1-104, but everything that came after was, in my perspective, absolute rubbish. All she does is suffer for 100 chapters with no conclusion to it. Which means all I did was suffer, I felt her despair with every word for hours and days.
If the AU chapter did not exist I would have rated this 1 star, simply because the events of 105-200.
I honestly just want a stripped down version of this novel that removes anything unrelated to Arnold X Kelly. Just keep anything related to their relationship, how it happened and all that. It was honestly ruined with all the harem crap and that is not a phrase I would usually ever say, EVER. This woulda been a perfect romance novel. I'm talking on the level of "The Dangers In My Heart", "The Angel Next Door Spoils Me Rotten", "Horimiya", "Dont Toy With Me Miss Nagatoro", "Call Of The Night", "My Dress Up Darling", "More Than A Married Couple But Not Lovers", "Komi Cant Communicate", etc. The main issue with the Harem is how it does Kelly.
Kelly sacrificed her friendships and parental relationships for Arnold, only for him to abandon her without discussion, inflicting severe emotional harm. This, combined with the constant scrutiny and belittlement from the other girls, makes her situation even more heartbreaking. In the end, Kelly loses everything and gains nothing.
This novel deserves to be contracted, its way to good for it to just remain in the shadows. It is one crazy roller coaster that gives you highs and lows. The story is amazing, its like the shows Dexter, Hannibal or You. There's not as much of his dark actions as I thought there would be but that doesn't detract from it. This is highly recommended by me. Originally I rated this 5 stars but that was when I was on like chapter 90ish, I thought about dropping it 1 star after 105 but decided against it. This novel will rip your heart out and dance on it, The AU should be the real story, and what we got should be the AU. At one point the lows got to a point that there could be no high to repair the damage. It cant drop below 5 stars though simply because the characters, quality, writing and story are that good.
This should have ended with Kelly and Arnold getting married and the girls Kelly lets into his harem be the bridesmaid and best wemon. If people wanted the harem route, I immediately did not once I seen the kinda girl Kelly really was... I pinned her wrong at the start due to her thoughts people like Arnold being "weird" simply because I used to get called it for being quiet and stuff, a lot of the same behavior he exhibited in school. I put on the same social mask he does.
As a WARNING To others, Please try not to get to attached to ANY character in this story or you will get hurt. I'm gonna go look for one of those novels with hollow shells of characters that I cant emotionally bond with.... Or even a Iyashikei marathon to scrub my brain and heal my soul.
There was no NTR yet I feel like it was all NTR.
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