Story:
This is a story about a what if scenario of Jin-Woo choosing to depart earth at the end of Solo-Leveling and spending eternity on a wasteland planet in the DxD dimension, well not really, because the MC appears to be Grayfia Lucifuge, who is chosen by a "System" to woo Jin (sorry for the bad pun).

Until Chapter 30, where I dropped it, it was all about Grayfia, and we only get some glimpses in Jin's thought processes, which feel off, not like I would have him think he would act.

The Good:
It made me check out Solo-Leveling again and find that there was an after story that I hadn't read before.

The Bad:
The English it is written in is barely a step up from machine translations. Wrong words, wrong times, no proper punctuation, run-on sentences with lots of... that make it hard to read and feel like everyone and everything is stuttering non-stop. Reading this is making me dizzy.
The System helping Grayfia too feels stupid, since it starts helping her level up, like The Gamer, with instant dungeons. I just don't get why it is going down that route.

Spare yourself the headache and pass on this one.

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mdanislavis

Status: c0

Nov 24, 2023

I am not going to rate, since I couldn’t read the whole thing. I can still share my two cents tho. The story itself may be alright, you may like it - feel free to give it a try. However, I can’t tell you what’s going on, since I couldn’t bear reading it. My brain just wasn’t braining, since author doesn’t use neither commas or actual sentences. You will rarely see a full stop anywhere. Instead, you will see a lot of “... ”, by that I mean, even between words, not only sentences (for example “How... are... you doing? I am doing fine... thank you). So, I am stopping at chapter 15, feel free to read through, maybe this will change.

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