I've been enjoying this book. The author does a good job writting conversations between characters and following logical progressions of thoughts so no actions really feels out of place, even if seems like it would be off logically, because the way they describe things and keep the characters emotional state in mind. I only really have 2 issues with the book, the first being completely personal problem I have with too many important characters and the second being the plot armor / overly amazing individual feel I get.

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The first issue is that there are too many characters (10+) with too similar names to keep track of anything. The focus on developing this characters is something I love, but its hard to keep any of the actual characters straight. I feel like I need to take notes if I want to understand who is talking or what is being conveyed to who and why, and I often found myself going back to older chapters to check if names lined up, which makes it harder to focus on the characters developing, which seems to be the butter of this book so far. Also because theres so many characters it takes so much time individualize all of them, simply because there is more. The other issue is combat. It feels as if I'm watching someone play a first person shooter. They rush in, defeat endless waves of enemies without any lasting effects or worries about simple things like ammo or stamina or enemy bullets or the blast effects of explosives, and then after murdering hundreds of soldiers at a time single handedly, they go home to play and train. And the main character is that first person shooter, and there is no one else on her superhuman impossible feat level in the world except her only friend who trained with her......... so its not something genetic specific, and anyone can train to that level, yet no one is fighting on that level despite every govt. wanting the main characters slice of home. That might change later, but it doesn't change the fact that the realism of fighting just isn't there.

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mainzmainzmainz

Status: chapter 24

Jul 10, 2023

I like the story, but there are too many perspectives and characters. In my opinion that makes the story slow and boring sometimes, but it is still solid.

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uxel

Status: c74

May 29, 2024

I like a lot about this story. The action is very cool, but even beyond the action the main story has a air of mystery around it. It involves politics with schemeing and all the things to like about that. Big shoutout to the author for writing some truely massive 8k+ chapters after ch. 30 ocasionally. They were real nice to read!There are a few negative things aswell:A minor nitpick is the grammar/spelling, its good enough, but there are some mistakes occasionally. Something more major that I do not really like is the amount of characters. Theres a lot of significant characters in this story some with very similar names. This makes it ocasionally hard to keep track of who is doing what for me. Its also a odd choice for a web novel since to really do the characters justice a lot of time needs to be spent on each of them. It feels like theres too much and not enough time spent on each character at the same time. Not enough in a sense that some major characters dont really appear for a decent amount of chapters and are somewhat underdeveloped and too much in a sense that the time that is spent on developing those is not spent on the main story. I honestly do not know what to do in this situation and I am certain that author is agonizing over this too. After around about 50 chapters the main story continously gets too many plot threads for me to still completely understand what is going on. This is certainly no simple main plot, but there is a line between a dead simple "kill the big bad evil guy" main plot and a complete "clusterf**k" of a main plot that is "10d chess". While I dont think the plot falls into either extremes, it does start out reasonably simple, gets to a certain complexity I would feel very comfortable with at around the time where they leave the first planet and in my opinion overshoots the sweetspot later. It is not gone too far to still be salvaged but if author adds further "stuff" to the main plot then I am afraid the main story will lose all coherence. At least in my opinion. At that point, cute girls doing cute things with some action here and there will be all thats left. I hope it doesnt go there. The world building is also not completely rock solid. Its certainly not completely immersion breaking, but If you analyize some situations logcially and consider all the actors and how it influences them you come to the conclusion that there are so many possible ways to exploit the situation for the MC and especially the enemies of the MC, yet none of that ever happens. This makes the politics/schemeing part feel a bit arbitrary at times. I would like to stress that it is never immersion breaking! Just not quite perfect. The last point is that the action includes weapons with significant lethality. I.e. modern military and future military weapons where an unlucky bullet will kill you. It is not explained in detail but giving the author the benefit of the doubt and granting him that all of the clones of MC in battle are just as well protected as a 40k space marine, even then, I dont think any clone has been either killed or maimed as a result of any of the action sequences. This doesnt really raise the stakes of the action scenes, significantly dulling their impact. What makes this even worse is the sitatuion involving one "named" clone that was promoted to such recently and given significant development. This clone survived falling off what was essentially a cliff. This caused trauma to the MC due to the percieved death of her clone and started important character development. But just a mere chapter later author decide to reveal to the readers that said clone survived this... Something MC is not aware of and author tries to continue said development. First of all, I believe telling the readers so soon was a mistake and even the fact that said clone survived in the first place just reinforces the plot armor vibes I get from the story. I would have prefered some stakes in the action sequences.I would personally rate the story a 3.5/5 in its current state. I have decided to stack up on chapters before continuing with this story to hopefully lessen the impact of the many plot threads on my reading experience. Since sh only allows full star ratings I will round it up to 4 stars. I will revisit this review when I continue with this story. Best of luck goes out to mr author.

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Bersleid

Status: chapter 76: the 75th floor

Apr 20, 2024

Good stuff.

This is one of those mysterious origins type of story in space, with character development. The title should say the rest.

What I am having a really hard time with is remembering each of the main characters. Having important characters in the double digits... I don't think it was a good choice, especially with similar names. That is probably the biggest flaw of this story.

Also, more space fight pls, and I mean roman style ship invasion or smth. Too bad that I don't think the story will stear in that direction any time soon.

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