First you portray Fred and George being an intolerable bully in front of Harry, while Ron being a victim that deserve pity. That kill some of my mood since Fred and George are one of few people that never hold prejudice against Harry. Even Ron the so called best friend alineated Harry on Fourth years because of envy.

Secondly, you overexaggerated Harry reaction to every trivial things in Hogwarts, such as ghosts to the point he almost exorcise them and got reprimand by Minerva (and made Harry explode in anger for injustice reprimanded). Unlike canon, Harry here already got knowledge and even perform some spells before he enter Hogwart, so he shouldn't be that reactive to every single magical happenings such as ghost. Even the teachers didn't deserve to be scolded that harshly by Harry just because he got scared of damn harmless ghost.

And lastly, I dislike the way you portrayed Dumbledore as evil manipulator. Don't get me wrong, I agree that Dumbledore is a manipulative bastard that more paranoid than mad eye Moody. But he isn't that evil like how you portrayed him to be, to the point he manipulated every trivial things around Harry such as intentionally order Molly Weasly to force his son to befriend Harry.

Overall I'll rate it as 3/5 despite my complains since I quite enjoy the ride in the few dozens early chapters.

Hope you'll improve more of your writing, since writing fanfiction sometimes is more difficult than original since you're bound by canon.

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NamesAreTheBaneOfMyExistence

Status: c3

Dec 8, 2019

Partially realistic in his reactions

But this is clearly not harry from the movies or the books

It seems to be treating this harry as the author's vehicle and reacting how he would which isn't bad

But the summary of this story should reflect that

Ie "a harry how the author thinks he should've been"

Keep the good work

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ElohimRobustelli

Status: --

Feb 28, 2020

Alright! So I was never a fan of fanfiction. But this? Gosh, it's so well written that I have to leave a review. A must read!

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Alvel

Status: c107

Mar 8, 2020

Cons: The author adds some of those forced anime lucky events. With kids.

Pros: The scenes are emotional and interesting, they really draw you in. Though you do have to get used to Harry having a different personality.

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Dogtownlord

Status: 69 the quick visit

Feb 25, 2020

In my opinion, this is one of the better Harry Potter fanfictions out there. It is well written, and does a decent job of changing Harry's perception of the wizarding world, than how it was protrayed in the books.

Some aspects are a little iffy, but where the story really shines is in the relationships that Harry makes, and how he approaches magic.

If you are reading this to find anither harem novel, where Harry dives into Hogwarts hips first, you won't find that here. If you are reading this to see a new and sometimes really emotional start to someones life that has thus far been filled with abuse, Then grab some tissues.

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Horizon42

Status: 30 the sorting part two

Jan 17, 2021

If it was an original work and not a fanfiction of Harry Potter, I would give it a 3-4 stars. The quality is good, but everything is so dreadful in the world, like everything is being seen in a very negative and pessimistic view. And since there's no insightfulness to be gained from the novel, I wouldn't read it at all. It's just depressing. Then I would subtract another 2 stars since it doesn't really follow the spirit or thematics of harry potter. So it's not really inspired by Harry Potter. That said, it's written well, so if that's all you're looking for, then go ahead.

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Zeroseraph

Status: 100 the first school year

Aug 16, 2020

I'll just say this is soo good. Don't listen to reviews that are not past c30 people just don't like how sometime situation like that can easily be viewed as bullying to others in certain situations. Read it for yourself and make your own informed opinion it very much worth the read!

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Necessity

Status: 72 the return to school

Apr 3, 2020

I tried to like this story allot. It started off in a way I liked, a bit awkward but altogether good. Honestly the fact harry has a selective short fuse and alot of hidden anger isnt really surprising. However, it doesnt make you think of a hero, he does some slightly heroic actions in trying to protect hermione though.

Perhaps hermione is my biggest gripe. She hasn't shown her Gryffindor characteristics at all, just a phobia of ghost that has popped up and being totally okay with destroying thinking beings.

Harry honestly seems to be cruelly lashing out at the things he thinks are different and scary, sometimes in deadly ways. This is a classic cycle of abuse that he has got from living with the Dursleys. I hope that he can overcome it.

The other main gripe is about how strong he becomes in such a short time. Second most unrealistic part, first being hermione.

I've actually talked myself into continuing to read in hopes of that.

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And nope. I tried reading one more chapter but its so dumb. Might technically be more "realistic" but none of the characters feel like their originals. If it gets better, someone message me.

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Razus

Status: 74 the knowledge

Mar 2, 2020

(Non native english speaker sorry)

It's been ages since I laughed and shed tears while reading something.

This brings so much memories while feeling like a new story. This is really much more realistic than what the original story told us. Don't get me wrong, the books will always have a special place in my heart. But for those who have read them, this is a must read. The writing is on point and I can't find a flaw at the moment in the kind of story telling the autor has chosen.

What are you doing here, go read it !

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TDM

Status: 109

Sep 24, 2020

I'm going to out myself as a Bokuboy fanboy right at the start.

If you're familiar with the Harry Potter series, and you're an adult, or intelligent younger person, there are probably a lot of things that seem a bit off with the story until you reach the final books and are given a glimpse into a world that Harry never figures out exists. The author gives Harry Potter more credit than the original books, by allowing him to see, much earlier, the incongruity in what he is being told vs. experiencing at Hogwarts;

This story diverges from the cannon story, above, by providing circumstances for Harry to break away from his original role as a clueless naïve pawn. You will enjoy this extremely well done fanfiction that sheds light on the following:

Spoiler

If one day a year is all that he needed to spend with family, like he does during the entirety of the book series once he attends Hogwarts, to preserve Lily's protection over Harry, why create an abusive family situation for the child of destiny and deny him access to his wizard heritage and wealth by forcing him to live with muggles who despise him?
How did Dumbledore end up with access to Harry's family vault? What was done with the vast family fortune for the entirety of Harry's life?
Why keep the Philosopher's stone poorly protected in a castle, rather than well protected inside a centuries old, magical, goblin protected, vault? (How did he know someone would break-in to get it, and if they could break into a bank vault, why move the "bait" into an area frequented by children?!)
Why did Dumbledore protect a confirmed Deatheater and Jame's Potter's enemy, while arresting the individual named to be Harry's guardian, Sirius Snape; failing to offer Veritas serum, or use Legilimency to test his innocence and signing off on his 13 year incarceration and torture without a trial.
Why would a Headmaster of a school full of 11-year old kids put monsters dogs on the 3rd floor, have security so lax that giants can somehow fit into the castle and wander the halls (even though sentient pictures everywhere can notify him of what is happening), WTF are kids are given time machines to use without supervision?!?!, and why are kids are placed under the supervision of a semi-ret*rded (though well intentioned) giant zookeeper with a fondness for carnivorous beasts so dangerous that EVEN AMONGST WIZARDS they cannot be kept in captivity.
Why can't a prestigious school manage to hire competent wizards and instead hires possessed weirdos, doppelgangers, wizard-supremacists (who teach poorly), and multiple dangerously incompetent instructors. (Keep in mind that several instructors can literally read minds.)
What will it take to make the adults stop students from assaulting other students? (Who would tolerate the poisonous aristocratic snobbery of house Slytherin and let them go unpunished?!)
What is up with the Tri-Wizard Tournament death challenge? Why did Harry go along with it?
Why does Dumbledore tell NOBODY about the prophecy that Voldemort might still be alive (which is documented even within the Ministry of Magic with an active), after the first attempted resurrection... or the second... and why was Harry never told by Dumbledore? (Dumbledore was the only living person with knowledge of the prophecy aside from Severus Snape, who told the Prophecy to Voldemort resulting in the death of Harry's parents... before he was hired to teach children. Harry stumbled the Prophecy Record sphere while trespassing at the Ministry of Magic.)
Why did Dumbledore never give Harry any special training, aside from mental tricks to prevent mind-reading?

"You've kept him alive so that he can die at the proper moment."
"Everything was supposed to keep Lily Potter's son safe. Now you tell me you have been raising him like a pig for slaughter..." - Snape

"Don't tell me now that you've grown to care for the boy." - Dumbledore
- The Deathly Hallows

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The author took a brief hiatus in March of 2020, but recent published another couple chapters. The story, currently, is at a place where the author could call it "finished" or continue and add additional arcs. Personally, I'm hoping he continues the story, as THIS Harry would likely live an interesting life, rather than settle in and do nothing but produce a single magical Weasley-spawn who does dumb magical stuff.

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