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Falling in Love with The First King – Draft
Falling in Love with The First King – Draft
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He saw the title and read it outloud “The First King”? Then he turned it around to read the summary. The text made his heart beat faster. This sounded so interesting!

The summary told of a world where the strong survive and powerful thrive, filled with pillage, murder, drama, castles and dinosaurs. How fricking cool is that!? This makes one's blood boil with ambition and excitement! And it’s all in a medieval setting.

But the books ending was rotten... William took his anger out on the book but was paid back tenfold.
When he realized it, it was too late: "What!? I'm reborn as a girl in this crazy world!? Book! You really want to see me suffer don't you!?".

Warning: Contains mentions of rape, family abuse and cruel scenes...

The version currently available is a first draft of the story. It has been left kinda incomplete. But if you do read it, please tell me what you thought about it in the comments. As it may help me improve the final version. 。(*^▽^*)ゞ

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Gender BenderHistoricalIsekaiMatureRomanceTragedy
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Age Progression Alternate World Appearance Changes Beautiful Female Lead Brotherhood Child Abuse Childish Protagonist Cruel Characters Determined Protagonist Knights Medieval Pets Reincarnated into Another World
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      Yeremia
      Status: c140
      Sep 26, 2020

      This novel is good, arc 1 is amazing

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      although I hate to the fact her mother is raped by those bandits and she died by giving birth to those bandits children

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      Don't get me wrong I love this novel, but arc 2 is a total disaster 

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      her brother keep chasing after the bandit even after the MC warns him about it  which this makes him acting out of his character which is a logical and cool-headed person, it's like the author just throw his whole character building out of the windows in arc 1

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      I read some comment saying that at some point the MC finally will accept herself as Mirabelle rather than William in arc 2, but nope so far until ch 140 she keeps pronounce herself as he and using William rather than Mirabelle

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      from the comment section in ch 97

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      Then they introduce new power called spirit whatever which is come out of nowhere despite the MC read the novel before he got reincarnated he doesn't know about it, it's getting more and more like those generic Chinese novels, and the author like forcefully makes the MC keep acting out of character in arc 2 for the sake for more chapters

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      despite knowing it's a trap she's saving the boy from dinosaurs, and involve herself in a war between 2 clans, despite her actual "real" goal in arc 1 is to helping Harvick

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      All in all this novel is amazing but if you ignore those character's development in arc 1 it makes this novel is a total disaster.

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      she manages to make a bond with a cute dinosaur and that's the only good thing in arc 2

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      Polarize4777
      Status: chapter 74
      Apr 25, 2020

      I have spend a lot of time reading this story, and I haven't done much for it beside commenting and encouraging the author. With that said, I think it is time for me to leave a review for the story, and maybe share my thoughts about how it is developing.

      I am not very adept with Grammar myself, but I can say that the read is not fraught with many grammar errors. The story is a fun and enjoyable slow burn of a read for me. The one thing I really like about this story is how realistic the characters are sometime. The characters developments are very noticeable from the first chapter to whatever is the current chapter. I like that the main character is struggling with their role in society, and is trying to change themselves so that they may rise above the rules. The story started out with not much to offer beside what you have read in the synopsis. However, over time it has proven to be an amazing read with a lot of good, sad, and humorous moments. Would I recommend this to someone?  The answer is, YES, and the reasons for this is that I see that it has great potentials and could be turn into a web-comic if it is supported enough. The story may be slow at the moment, but when the main character start getting some of those kick ass sword training and hone themselves it will start moving quicker. I am just waiting for the day when William/Mirabelle got some muscles and start wielding that sword with skill enough to be more than just whatever women are expected in the story. I like that the story isn't just all sun shine and rainbow, it has it's dark moments and happy one too. The characters are well develop in my opinion, they have their own style which make them stand apart. The story feel whole and can definitely let you feel like it is a world that can stand on its own and with its own system. I can say proudly that if this story continue with the way it is developing, I can see a pretty awesome adventure up ahead. If you have read this far, then I can say that the story is worth a read. It is fun and certainly a good way to pass your time when you just need a slowburn of a read that is well written.  

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      Dodikdov
      Status: chapter 72: this is why we...
      Apr 21, 2020

      This story is good. Full of tropes, but used well. Adding something like dinosaurs gives it a much needed spin on the genre. One thing that needs improvement is the grammar. It doesn't stop me from understanding the premise, but it definitely doesn't make it pretty. Would I recommend it? To a learning reader, no. But I'm reading it, and I am happy with it. Alas, even if the story is interesting, the pacing is INCREDIBLY SLOW. The story progressed 6 years, even though it feels like it has been 20. Mostly its that the main characters age stays around the same for very long (Between 0-1 for a 10 or so chapters, and she's like 8 now,) while everyone else ages much more rapidly. Thank you author! 

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