Literally the best thing I’ve ever read in my life, perfectly intergrated a system into the harry potter world and clearly expressed different power levels. The progression is at a perfect speed to keep you engaged. All in all, a wonderfull pieceof fiction deserving of its ranking.
The premise is very interesting, so points to the writer for creativity
However, the story fails to keep you interested, with too short chapters (800 words), the MC protagonist syndrome and the amount of stuff that is thrown at him for nothing. More importantly, the protagonist doesn't make any sense, by that I mean his personality, which is a huge series of contradictions
I like, it the MC seems smart but not overly so, hes not arrogant like most MCs and he doesn't flaunt the intelligence he does have over everyone, it's a bonus as he wasn't placed in
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as most do, he is also muscular which is a delightful surprise for a Harry Potter flick or any flick, so plus 1*.
A muscular MC will always get a plus 1* bonus, too many string beans able to lift cars.
Another plus 1* will be from actually caring about the cast of the original as well also not caring if the story changes.
The world certainly seems full of life and other characters interactions are taken into account so plus 1*
This last star is for making things interesting with a system that you actually have to work with rather than getting everything just from points 1*
- the crafting aspect is very interesting and the author expands on the magic of the world a lot to make it interesting. Not to mention they are breaking away from canon so it's not just another 'harry potter + random guy' it's an actual story in the universe that the changes have started to slowly build up.
Bad ish things
- while the grammar isn't horrible it has a lot of small grammar mistakes that are noticeable. Such as there, their, they're and where/were. Just a minor annoyance rather than anything substantial.
- It's a fairly generic ff, the MC is a bit of a mary sue and the story constantly needs to remind you about how unique and special the MC is following just about every trope for HP ff it's to the point of the MC has a noticeable scar on their face and bright defining eyes and has an extreme talent with brooms... he's just Harry but better. But it's written well enough that it's still interesting to read.
Really good story with some mystery. The characters are fleshed out and don't feel two dimensional. Storyline somewhat follows the canon, with the difference that that the existence of MC alone makes minor and major differences here and there. Im very exited what comes next. Also while the breakneck speed of 2 chapters a day feels like Readers wettest dream, I hope the author doesn't burn out...
Fun story but the ignorant Dumbledore hate puts a damper on the story as a whole. Seems like the favorite plot point of every generic Harry Potter fanfic out there. Ill keep reading and change my review if the story is deserving but as of now its just average.
I enjoy Loskro's writing style as it is quite easy to read and his scripts never lack interesting details and coherence behind the world the wordsmith is presenting us.
This particular manuscript presents the Harry potter universe in clear light and the characterization of the personalities we love is well done, a great job.
I do not own anything from Marvel or Naruto. I just enjoy both universes.
So content warning first, this is a fanfic of hot steaming garbage. I hope you enjoy it. I will most likely put in bad words, fights, gore and maybe some smut. Or may
[Posted on Royal Road, Scribble Hub, and previously on Webnovel]
My name is Zeref, a transmigrator who found himself in a Universe filled with many dangers and world-ending crises and beings of unbelievable power.
Oh, yeah. Did I ment
Dave died and surprisingly reincarnated with all his memories.
Unfortunately, it seems to be earth. Japan to be specific. Naruki City. Hmm sounds vaguely familiar. Maybe it was on the news or something. Oh well. Worse yet he has to learn Ja
First, I post this on Webnovel, but due to a recent update, I have migrated to this site as my readers suggested it.
Even though they went back on the update, I’ll still post here for the sake of it.
One chapter per week, but don
Waking up as Sirius Black before his prison escape,
let’s see how the MC tackles his obstacles toward a good life while also trying to stay alive.
And why is Harry Potter now Rose Potter?!
Warning:
Hogwarts is goin
Literally the best thing I’ve ever read in my life, perfectly intergrated a system into the harry potter world and clearly expressed different power levels. The progression is at a perfect speed to keep you engaged. All in all, a wonderfull pieceof fiction deserving of its ranking.
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I enjoyed the smithing and LotR parts.
I beared with the Harry Potter self insert.
I can't bear the "and everyone clapped" bit.
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The premise is very interesting, so points to the writer for creativity
However, the story fails to keep you interested, with too short chapters (800 words), the MC protagonist syndrome and the amount of stuff that is thrown at him for nothing. More importantly, the protagonist doesn't make any sense, by that I mean his personality, which is a huge series of contradictions
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I like, it the MC seems smart but not overly so, hes not arrogant like most MCs and he doesn't flaunt the intelligence he does have over everyone, it's a bonus as he wasn't placed in
Ravenclaw
A muscular MC will always get a plus 1* bonus, too many string beans able to lift cars.
Another plus 1* will be from actually caring about the cast of the original as well also not caring if the story changes.
The world certainly seems full of life and other characters interactions are taken into account so plus 1*
This last star is for making things interesting with a system that you actually have to work with rather than getting everything just from points 1*
Thank you Loskro1 for making this.
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Interesting story so far and well worth a read.
Good things
- the crafting aspect is very interesting and the author expands on the magic of the world a lot to make it interesting. Not to mention they are breaking away from canon so it's not just another 'harry potter + random guy' it's an actual story in the universe that the changes have started to slowly build up.
Bad ish things
- while the grammar isn't horrible it has a lot of small grammar mistakes that are noticeable. Such as there, their, they're and where/were. Just a minor annoyance rather than anything substantial.
- It's a fairly generic ff, the MC is a bit of a mary sue and the story constantly needs to remind you about how unique and special the MC is following just about every trope for HP ff it's to the point of the MC has a noticeable scar on their face and bright defining eyes and has an extreme talent with brooms... he's just Harry but better. But it's written well enough that it's still interesting to read.
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Really good story with some mystery. The characters are fleshed out and don't feel two dimensional. Storyline somewhat follows the canon, with the difference that that the existence of MC alone makes minor and major differences here and there. Im very exited what comes next. Also while the breakneck speed of 2 chapters a day feels like Readers wettest dream, I hope the author doesn't burn out...
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I'm too lazy to write a full review, but this story is pretty neat. Even grammar isn't atrociously bad, so it's easily readable. Just give it a try.
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Fun story but the ignorant Dumbledore hate puts a damper on the story as a whole. Seems like the favorite plot point of every generic Harry Potter fanfic out there. Ill keep reading and change my review if the story is deserving but as of now its just average.
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I think it's very well written, I'm bad at reviews but this had my seal of approval
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I enjoy Loskro's writing style as it is quite easy to read and his scripts never lack interesting details and coherence behind the world the wordsmith is presenting us.
This particular manuscript presents the Harry potter universe in clear light and the characterization of the personalities we love is well done, a great job.
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