The story lacks scene descriptions, character descriptions and a calm start.

The first chapter has too many characters who you're apparrntly already supposed to know. I don't know them. The resulting story is confusing as f**k.

Characters are introduced by having someone suddenly start talking to them. Then, during a dialogue, characters are given alternative titles, which feels like the author trying to gently introduce details, but instead it just confuses you on who is in a particular scene.

Scenes themselves are very short and there are a lot of time skips.

After two chapters, I understood that someone (Kristoffer?) runs a bakery, his door got wrecked (somehow?), some small or young guy was supposed to watch an oven but didn't. The small guy apparently read a book, for which another character had a solution.

Then someone else came as a replacement (why?). They're a woman and are called Penelope. We somehow shorten this to Nel, and then there's some hubbub about a melon pan, but the actual object isn't properly described... Or I forgot.

The whole "monster" angle is not there. Characters might be monsters, but we're never told or shown.

TL;DR: story delivers something, it's not what it promises, and it's super confusing.

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