(Note: I am currently ahead of the chapters here in Scribble Hub) I am loving this story. We have a 'succubus' character who is dealing with her transformation combined with a life-altering experience, and the author has made it a compelling story.

Style:The LitRPG aspects are kept light and numbers are not thrown around in mid-battle, and the paragraphs are a nice size; neither word-walls nor tiny one-sentence things.

I also appreciate the snarky system messages. Though I get the feeling that there may be at least two personalities involved. At a minimum, there are the "automated" messages and the messages with personality.

Story:We have just started getting to the real meat of the story, and it has an interesting premise beyond the initial setup. Our protagonists have a definite and real goal with stakes, and are feeling very motivated to at least try to accomplish the monumental task ahead of them.

Grammar:Fluent grammar, very few typos, a reasonable breadth of vocabulary used, author is quick to apply corrections pointed out, etc. What's not to love? :)

Character:The heart of the story. While the plot gives a goal and a timeline, the path is open-ended. This makes the story very character driven, even if they are driven by an external threat. They are not simply responding, they are being proactive and not just hoping someone else is going to take care of things.

All the characters are interesting and have distinct personalities. We have a team of three who work well together and a temporary fourth (who may change her mind and join them long-term, we'll see.)

There's no marking for romance, but there is certainly romantic potential. Personally, I am hoping for a reasonably paced build-up while the MC deals with keeping the dark side of her transformation in check, and once that is dealt with, have the relationship just be established. No need to draw it out, and then you can have simple nice cozy moments between lovers. But we'll see what the author has in store for us. :)

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