Viewpoint (???)
'Despite the start of the vacations I have no rest from household chores .'
I think while walking with a bag full of garbage to the garbage can in front of the house . Lifting the lid I look at the clear sky , sighing I throw the trash into the garbage can but instead of the sound of the trash hitting the bottom of the garbage can , I hear an unimaginable bang .
Feeling my ears bleeding, I raised my head to see how the clear blue sky was turned red with a huge ball of flames and ash in the distance . This sight reminded me of an apocalyptic movie.
Before I can do anything a heat wave hits me . Covering my face with both hands I feel myself losing sight and feeling on the left side of my face . Suddenly I feel immense pain as the clothes on me go up in flames as does my hair .
Feeling the heat wave pass I open my right eye only to see a wall of ash that tears everything in the distance. . Paying no attention to the gently melted garbage can and the fence in front of my house I gather my strength to run towards the house to which the door was still open , running inside I was about to turn around and close them.
But the wall of ash was faster and when it hit my house it got through the open door and hit me in the back making me fly down the whole hallway only to crash on the dresser standing at the end .That's when I felt the fire consuming everything . Surprisingly I could open my eye . I don't know what position I was in now but I saw the walls turned into bare bricks as the wooden floor beneath me burned under a layer of ash that covered my burning body as well .
I couldn't think as the flames consumed my skin and flesh . However, it was not even a second when I stopped feeling it . Watching the third shock wave take me along with the bricks of my house in my head there is only one happy thought .
'It doesn't hurt anymore '.
With this thought my eye closes no longer bothered by the image of the world on fire .
Pov 3rd person
"It doesn't hurt anymore "
Says the girl with her soft voice after which she open her pair of heterochromatic eyes. Both as beautiful as strange , one like a ruby, the other gold-colored eye Instead of a normal pupil has a clock with roman numbers on its. The girl stared blankly into nothingness for a moment . However, with one deep breath she corrected her fringe to cover her golden eye.
Pov (???)
'Again the same recurring nightmare . I have had it since I can remember . Although I don't remember what happens in it I feel strangely connected to it .'
I think while gently opening the lid of the dumpster to make sure Lotus is gone.
' They are gone '
I think while opening the lid after which I jump out of the trash . Looking around the now empty alley I begin to look at my body . People throw all kinds of things like blades, needles, sharp cans and many others and the infection will kill me, just like some sickness given by needles
'My power gives a me sort of shield that wraps around my body .It doesn't protect against everything but it is enough to cope with a fall or a hit from an adult . But I used too much of my energi, I don't know if it disappeared after I lost my consciousness.'
I think, knowing that I never had the guts to check it out .
'I'm okay, but my dress must be patched again'
I think walking over to the rain water container in wich I rinsing my face , hands and neck . Finishing cleaning myself I look at my own reflection which again makes me sigh .
'10:15 '
I think while looking at my watch after which, using my hands, I drink some water.
' I needs food and a new place to sleep'
I think remembering that I just lost my hiding place and in it all my belongings . There was not much there and rather there was only food for today's breakfast , a mattress and my pillow . As for the sheet , Lotus or someone else took it .
' Now I'm going to go east to the commercial district I heard that it is quiet there as there are more police. But still they can chase me away from there .'
'After all, this is this the better part of the city. But I prefer the police more then homeless gang '
I think closing my eyes trying to sense how much energy I have in me .
'I have enough to get there and maybe get breakfast .'
I think as I walk slowly towards the exit of the alley . Being in front of the entrance to the main street I look out from around the corner to see if any of the Lotus people are there . Seeing no one I move forward to the next alley in front of me all the while being cautious of my surroundings .
' My power was unlocked by the same person who found me and raised me, she was once a person called huntress she lost her legs fighting monsters called grimm's. When I turned six she unlocked that power in me only to die right after .'
'We never had a mother-daughter relationship however we were close to each other . In the beginning she was the one to get food for us in the end I was only the baby back then . She fooled people with her ability and then stole from them without any problem.'
' But she was also able to do it without this ability . It was she who taught me strategy and theft , thus giving me the ability to get food on my own. Despite everything she has done for me, even though she didn't have to do it . I didn't even have time to thank her in the end the only reason I am alive is her .'
'That's why until now I have a feeling of guilt , because after she died there was no funeral or even a grave , I simply cloaked her body with what I had and left. Now the only thing I can do for her is to live my own life. Although it's been two years since her death, everything she taught me has kept me alive to this day . Therefore, to live I will continue to live according to what she taught me. '
'1 Moving:
Main streets in the daytime are difficult to use for the homeless . So it's better to use the alleys if you know them well or they are well lit.
Dark alleys are the best places for ambushes especially if you do not know their construction . If you don't know the alleys or they are dark so you can't see what's inside, it's better to use the main street. '
Mentally speaking I swiftly from lit alley to alley, while running between the main streets
'2 Avoiding People:
Don't trust anyone, anyone can be a liar. Don't tell anyone your real name, they can use it for a lot of bad things . However, you will not survive on your own, so find an ally, but as long as you are not sure if you can trust him, be careful '
' 3 Hiding:
Anything that can be used to hide, use this even if it's a hole full of shit. Pretend you don't exist then nothing will hurt you . It may hurt your pride but, ultimately not you. So run and hide until you are strong enough to fight back .'
Moving through the city I come across an alley full of suspicious people . I could avoid it however this is the fastest way , besides I can already see a safe passage for me .
After the help of the dumpster, I get to the ladder leading to the fire stairs. Walking up those stairs I go to the second floor of the building where I see an old air conditioner from which the pipe runs along the wall. I am light and small so I slowly walk along the pipe on all my fours limbs for the safty.
At the end of the pipe is a broken window . Walking slowly up to it I look inside . Seeing that it is an abandoned apartment I clean the glass fragments from the windowsill afterwards I go inside . I would say it is a good place to hide however it is still too close to Lotus . Passing through the broken door I go down the stairs to the ground floor.
Through the ground floor window I can see that the hole main street was full of suspicious people, even though it is morning. However, this is not surprising , there are many abandoned residential streets in this district and this is due to the fact that many buildings are slated for demolition and the land underneath is turned into a warehouse.
And that's why so much shady business is going on here . No one checks what is going on here because no one theoretically lives here . Without thinking so much anymore I notice a big problem the only entrance to the alley is next to one lynx faunus with earrings in his cat ears.
'He's got a gun everybody's got a gun here it must be their gang territory'
' But this is the only safe road going east, other roads go around I'll lose a few hours so I will not find shelter from the night. Without food and no shelter .....'
'4 be selfish:
Steal, makes others life difficult , and do whatever it takes to make your life easier. Better to be selfish than to be nice and suffer. Don't be overwhelmed by others'
Recalling these words I look around for a solution to this problem . Noticing a possible solution I carefully open the window. Again looking around carefully I jump out into the street, unnoticed by anyone . Already having a plan in my head I hide under one of the cars with high suspension .
' All it takes is one good move .'
I think with a mischievous smirk .
3rd person.
After a day of profiteering, one of the smaller gangs gathered back in front of its hideout. Ten people stood scattered all over the street drinking, smoking or talking to each other . Suddenly, two of them started fighting each other . It would be normal if this fight was not a one-sided brutal beating . Seeing this everyone on the street quickly went to check and stop what was happening , knowing that in moment they could have a member less .
" What the fuck is going on Danny?Stop you will kill him!! "
Danny sits on the belly of the smaller man who tries to cover himself with his hands when Danny beats him across the face with his fists. Lynx's faunus seeing that something is wrong walks away from his spot just outside the entrance to the alley to, along with the rest of his gang, separate the two from each other .
"What the fuck are you crazy?"
Most of the gang was silent seeing their friend barely alive when Danny, despite attempts to talk to them, growled under his breath trying to break out of their grasp . Eventually he lay on the ground held by as many as six people as the rest helped the other man breathe. Through all the commotion, no one noticed how the little shadow moved to the alley at the border of their line of sight only to enter the alley where it disappeared as if it had never been there.
viewpoint (???)
Fortunately they were selling drugs or one of them was taking them . I do not know but I took advantage of the fact that on the hood of the car on wich big guy with his friend were leaning on , is a backpack from which spilled several syringes with a familiar symbol to me .
I know about drugs as a person living on the street I need to know what I will encounter in life or what could be given to me . Everything I know was taught to me by an elderly homeless woman who surprisingly without charge taught me a few things how to recognize substances by packaging , smell or appearance .
Recognizing the syringe as a simple stimulant to enhance physical strength in exchange for intellectual streingth. I found that three syringes would be enough not to kill the big guy but to get the effect immediately .
Putting myself in the right position , I give the hand protruding from my shadow a syringe and then the same hand appears in the shadow of the guy who is connected to mine using the shadow of the car .
The big guy was so absorbed in the conversation that he did not notice how the hand appears under his feet . Stabbing three syringes into his calf after which hand immediately returns to the shadow , as the big guy grabs his leg quickly while hissing in pain .
His interlocutor wanted to check on him but the big guy because of the pain and the drug that reduces his mental skills deduced that a friend atack him . At the time when one guy threw himself at the other I took advantage of the chaos to move to the alley .
Seeing how my plan worked out I can't help but feel a strange wave of joy . Although I always do this kind of thing to increase my chance of survival I would be lying if I said I didn't like seeing people suffer because of my plan . I love it when everything works out the way it did in my head , I love playing with people, I feel so fulfilled .
'I loved that moment when lotus was panting with fatigue from chasing me that moment when the realization appeared on his face only to get hit with a wet sheet . I really wanted to see his face after I hid in the dumpster. '
'Likewise those shocked faces of those gangsters when they looked at two colleagues beating each other up because of me without even knowing about me . If I wasn't doing it for survival I would enjoy it . No , I already enjoy it I just don't have other opportunities to have fun like this .'
I think while smiling mischievously .
'Every time I pay Lotus a Tribute I appearing behind him . His scared face alweys gives me that little joy.This is the reason for my nickname . Everyone called me a little nightmare because of Lotus who always referred to me that way , I have a normal name but I never told it to anyone , the last person who knew it was the huntress.'
Thinking about it I stop smiling and move on quickly . Moving further through the alleys of the Vale I no longer encounter difficulties and without any problem I get to the commercial district . Looking at my watch I see that it is already sixteen o'clock feeling the strong hunger that has been growing in me for two hours I look at the street to which the alley overlooks .
There I see how this street is filled with people and fauns who move from place to place or stand in front of stalls . Looking at the bags in their hands probably filled with food , I have to restrain myself not to make a stupid mistake and just snatch that bag out of their hands .
'This is a commercial district, I have to be more careful here. More I steal, the sooner they would know there's a thief here. At most two pickpocketing here and I have to go two streets away '
Thinking about it, I carefully look around the street from the side of the alley, which reduces my range of vision, but provides me with better concealment . Fortunately for me, a woman with a child stopped in front of the alley . In her hands she held a paper bag with the logo of the bakery . Of course there may be something else in the bag but I can see that it will be easy and without much risk .
'Even if I end up without bread there will always be something else useful in that bag'
Thinking about it I remember my current situation I have nothing so I need everything. Thanks to the fact that the whole street is in the shadow of the building with which I have already established a connection the only thing left for me is to get closer to the woman , a matter of distance through which it will consume too much energy .
Walking quietly and naturally closer to the woman I hide behind a dumpster that is three meters from her and her child , from this distance it will be tiring but doable . Having everything thought out I make one hand emerge right under the leg of a small boy .
The boy didn't even notice it until this hand grabbed his ankle . Feeling it and then seeing it, the boy was suddenly terrified and started screaming and crying . Of course the hand disappeared as soon as it appeared but that was enough to create a commotion .
The mother seeing her child's panic stopped checking something on her shopping list and quickly looked at her son when another hand appeared under the paiper bag she was holding in one hand . Small clone hand ripped the paper bag from underneath and made the fresh bread contained inside fall to the ground .
Of course there was no hesitation or thought when the same hand and the other that appeared next to the first , grabbed what they could and dragged it with them into the shadows . Then the same hands emerged from my shadows beside me, holding the stolen items, which I quickly took from them .
'a whole Loaf of bread and bun'
I think happy with these acquisitions . As for the woman , she was unlucky , in the end so much I also have to eat something and she still has a lot of things left to eat because most things have packages at most she lost two buns that I did not take and they fell on the ground .
'Now just find a safe place to eat and sleep'
I think walk away slowly sinking into the shadows of the side street.
Chapter 2: Rules to Survive
This fan fiction was originally written on another site. Starting from chapter eleven, all chapters have been rewritten for this site.
Viewpoint (???)
The morning sky was blue and vibrant, but I still had to take out the trash. As I approached the garbage can with the trash in my hands, I felt the lid under my touch. Suddenly, there was a loud bang. The sound was overwhelming, and I found myself unable to hear anything. My ears were bleeding, and I experienced an excruciating pain like never before. As I turned, I saw a colossal mountain of fire and dust, reminiscent of post-apocalyptic movies.
"Oh, my God!" I exclaimed, unable to comprehend the devastation before me.
I couldn't see anything on the left side of my face. Panic surged through me, and I rushed towards the side door leading to the basement of my house. With every step, I felt the ground slipping away, and I stumbled forward. Finally, I fell down the stairs, closing my eyes and hoping for a miracle. A warm sensation enveloped my body, and then... nothing.
"The pain is gone," I murmured with blood in my mouth, my voice sounding rough and growling.
POV: 3rd person
"It doesn't hurt anymore," came the words, spoken by a delicate, feminine voice.
Following those words, a pair of mesmerizing heterochromatic eyes emerged into view. One eye shone like a beautiful ruby, while the other had a golden color with a clock-like design, complete with Roman numerals and working hands. The girl gazed into the distance for a moment, adjusting her fringe to partially conceal her golden eye.
POV (???)
"Useless eye," I muttered to myself. "It hurts every time I use my power."
"I can handle small tasks with my hands, but creating a full clone drains a lot of energy," I continued, reflecting on the challenges I faced.
"And these recurring dreams... I've had them for as long as I can remember. But I try not to worry about them," I added.
"I don't even remember who the person in those dreams is," I confessed. "It's just another nightmare that repeats itself from time to time."
Before leaving, I quickly assessed my surroundings and checked my body for any injuries.
"I'm searching for scratches, cuts, or puncture wounds," I thought to myself.
"My power grants me a sort of protective shield that wraps around my body," I explained. "It can withstand an adult's kick, but it's sufficient for my needs."
"However, I may have used too much of my energy. I don't know if it dissipated when I lost consciousness."
People often discard dangerous objects like blades, needles, and sharp cans, and such things could infect me, just like the sickness spread through contaminated needles.
"As a homeless girl, I've learned many survival skills," I reflected. "I'm alright, but my patched white dress needs more mending."
Gently lifting the lid of the garbage can, I checked if the bread rolls I had stashed were still there.
"They're gone," I uttered, jumping out of the trash can and landing on my bandaged feet. "Walking with shoes, even makeshift ones, is better than going barefoot."
I made my way to a water container in the alley and rinsed my face, fixing my fringe. Looking at my reflection, I noticed my golden eye's clock indicating it was 10:15.
"Although this eye possesses useful skills," I muttered to myself, I cupped my hands and took a sip of water. "I need food and a new place to sleep."
hapter Edit:
"I have known Lotus for many years; however, this is the street where I wouldn't be surprised if he sold me to these people. That's why it's better to run away."
"Now I'm heading west. It's quieter there because there are more police, but they can chase me."
"After all, this is the better part of the city."
"But I prefer the police more than the homeless gang."
"My energy has returned so much that it should be enough to get breakfast."
"This power was unlocked by the same person who found me and raised me. She was once a huntress, but she lost her legs fighting monsters. When I turned 7, she died. But I remember everything she taught me."
"Moving Strategy:
If there are no lit alleys, stick to main streets. Main streets are dangerous as a defenseless girl can be harmed in a mass of people. However, dark alleys are even more dangerous. There's no visibility, and you can't tell if they're dead ends. They're generally narrow and hard to defend yourself in."
Mentally speaking, I swiftly move from one lit alley to another while running between the main streets.
"Avoiding People:
Don't trust anyone; anyone can be a liar. Don't reveal your real name to anyone; they can use it for malicious purposes. However, you can't survive on your own, so find an ally. But be careful until you can trust them."
Whoever tries to stop me on my way, I skip them and continue on faster.
"Hiding:
Use anything that can be used to hide, even if it means hiding in a hole full of filth. Pretend you don't exist, and nothing will hurt you."
In the alley, there is a group of suspicious people.
"Are they drug addicts? Gangsters?"
I see them, but they don't see me. With the help of garbage cans, I reach the ladder leading to the fire escape. I climb to the second floor and see an old working air conditioner covered in dust. I move cautiously on all fours along the pipe.
"A group of people down there doesn't even notice me."
At the end of the pipe, there's a broken window without any glass shards on it.
I slowly stand up and look inside. It's empty, and there are no glass shards within the building.
I climb through the window and make my way to the ground floor with quick and quiet steps.
On the ground floor, I can see the main street is full of suspicious people, even though it's morning. It's the part of the city where the "light does not reach," meaning it has been forgotten by the authorities and normal people. The only entrance to the alley is next to a lynx faunus with cat ear earrings.
"He's got a gun. Everybody's got a gun here; it must be their gang territory."
"This is the only road going west; other roads go around, but I'll lose a few hours. I won't find shelter for the night without food and shelter."
"Be Selfish:
Steal, make others' lives difficult, and do whatever it takes to make your life easier. It's better to be selfish than to be nice and suffer. Don't let others overwhelm you."
The building has the right angle of light, and my shadow blends with the shadows outside.
"One good move is enough."
Third person:
The street is full of gangsters from one of the thousands of similar gangs all over Vale. Drugs, weapons, and sometimes illegal dust flow through their hands. They steal, sell, or produce them.
Since the conflict began between the Spider Syndicate and the Xiong family, smaller gangs have started thriving again, taking advantage of the opportunity to make money when the giants fight.
The smaller gang returns to their streets after a profitable day. It's the middle of the day, and about ten members are scattered around, waiting for nightfall to continue. Unlike larger gangs, they can't afford to bribe the police. So they wait quietly, smoking and drinking.
Suddenly, two of them start fighting each other with their fists. Everyone, confused by their friends' fight, rushes to check what's going on.
"Stop! What the f*ck is going on, Newil?"
"Stop! You'll kill Kristof!"
Newil, standing at 1.90 meters, powerfully built, sits on top of the smaller Kristof, whose face is swollen.
It seems that the leader, a lynx faunus with cat ear earrings, is currently helping to hold Newil. Other gang members either try to stop Newil or pull Kristof out from underneath.
"What the f*ck? Are you crazy?"
"Nevil!"
"....."
Most of the gang falls silent. Despite the situation, Newil continues to struggle. In the chaos, no one notices a few needle wounds on Nevil's thigh.
And the one who caused the whole situation disappears without being noticed.
Viewpoint (???):
"According to the plan, a clone hand emerges from the shadows and takes three syringes filled with a substance from the table where the gangsters were leaning on."
"Their backs are turned towards the clone hand, so they don't see it."
"In order to survive, I need to recognize drugs and their effects, to know what someone was taking and how to deal with them."
"I've encountered many homeless drug users. That's why I know this stimulant is a 'take brain, give muscle' type of stimulant. It's not harmful in small doses, so the clone's hand injects three syringes into the thigh of the larger gangster. The immediate effect of the three syringes causes him to lose touch with reality due to the sudden pain. He reacts aggressively and attacks the smaller gangster, sparking chaos. Meanwhile, I go unnoticed to the opposite side of the road in the alley."
"I stick to what I was taught from the beginning to survive. But since the old huntress died, I've started playing games where people suffer, and I can't help but smile."
"My plan worked. Two people fighting with fists because of my successful game gives me a strange joy. Just like when my plan was successful and I tricked Lotus. I felt a strange happiness seeing his tired face, and I smiled."
"Now, seeing the incredulity on the faces of the gangsters..."
"Every time I pay Lotus a tribute, I appear behind him and his men. Their scared faces give me that little joy."
"Lotus and his people started calling me 'Little Nightmare' because of this, and I never gave them my real name."
I stop smiling while hiding behind a garbage can.
"I create a hand out of shadow. I can easily create four more before my energy runs out."
Using the rules I learned from the old huntress, I navigate the city, strengthening my body with my power as much as I can. I reach a promising area for wallet fishing; it's now 4:00 PM. I'm in the alley that opens onto a nice street where people and faunus are walking. This is the time when people are getting ready to go home after work.
"This is a shopping district. I have to be more careful here. The more I steal here, the sooner they'll know there's a thief here."
"At most, I can pickpocket two people here, then I have to move two streets away."
As I think, I look around for breakfast and see my target—a woman in her 30s with a 4-year-old child, carrying a shopping bag.
"I have the light behind me, so it's sunrise. I walk towards the sunset perfectly."
I climb the scaffolding to the second floor and find a good angle where my shadow blends with the shadow of the mother and baby standing near the alley.
The clone's hand emerges from the shadows, grabbing the child by the leg, scaring them. It quickly retreats back into the shadows. The mother, panicked by her child's scream, turns away and looks down at the shopping bag in her hands. At that moment, the clone's hand emerges from under the bag, tearing the paper and causing the bread to fall out onto the ground. The shadow's hand catches as much bread as it can. The mother turns, but before she can see anything, the clone's hand retreats into the shadows, leaving behind a torn bag and a few rolls of bread on the ground.
"Nobody even noticed."
"This woman is having a bad day."
"It's either her or me."
I think to myself as a hand with bread emerges from the shadow below me. I take everything that the hand holds—a whole loaf of bread.
"Now I just need to find a safe place to eat and sleep."
With my plan in mind, I walk away slowly, sinking into the shadows of the side street.
Thank you , I know you must have put a lot of time into rewriting and correcting the whole chapter . I honestly can't say more , I didn't expect that someone would find the time to rewrite the whole chapter . I have received corrections to some sentences before but this is the first time someone has corrected the entire chapter . I honestly never expected anyone to be interested enough in my fan fiction to do this .
Thank you , the only question I have is if I can use your revised version ?
She not need to slurp up other people for energy?
tftc
Is she perhaps a meglomaniac, it would make sense.
Then I can't hear anything my ears are bleeding for the first time in my life I feel so much
Then I can't hear anything, my ears are bleeding and for the first time In my life I feel so much
I do not see anything
I can't see anything
hope for a miracle then I feel warm all over my body and then I feel nothing.
Miracle, then I feel warm, and then nothing.
I brings out some blood and a growling voice
I cough out some blood and in a growling voice and say
hands is not a problem
hands are not a problem
dreams I have them since I can remember,
I have had them for as long as I can remember
My energy returned so much that it should be enough to get breakfast
my energy has returned enough for me to get breakfast.
huntress she lost her legs
Huntress who lost her legs
there is no lit alleys, go main streets
If there are no lit alleys, take the main streets
mass of people can hurt a defenseless girl. But dark alleys
Even though masses of people can hurt a defenseless girl, dark alleys
"Stop you kill Kristof!
Stop you'll kill Kristof
Their backs was directed
Were directed
'I have light behind my back, so there is sunrise, I was walking to the sunset perfectly
so it is morning/sunrise. I was walking from the sunrise perfectly
the bread falls out of the ground, a
Onto the ground
the clone's hand hovers into the shadows
Hand disappears/vanishes into the shadows
Thank you for taking the time to find these mistakes . It means a lot to me to know that someone finds time for my work. When I find the time I will correct it.
@Elizjumgarden You should get Grammarly, it's free.
I see a lot of Grammar errors in both chapters 1 and 2 and every one after that.
Survival!