You should slightly modify your narration style. The MC Pathlet saying terms like Heroine, Final Boss, chapter 7, etc., is one thing, but other characters who are not transmigrated or reincarnated saying those terms are too odd. It feels like they also have the knowledge of the otome game.
Dear Athan1854 please give some suggestions for ch-10 if I like your suggestions I can include in ch-10 and tell me any Chapters mistakes I can fix next time
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Hey Athan, thank you so much for reading 'A Loving Family', If you're enjoying it, a 5-star rating would mean the world to me and help the story reach more readers.