A newbie writer who is not a native English speaker, so please bear with me.
GOW fic: COMPLETED
TWD fic: COMPLETED
Green Arrow fic: Hiatus
Evil Dead fic: COMPLETED
Mass Effect fic: Ongoing
Okay so I just finished reading your ME fanfic and I have comments. I haven’t read any of your other work so it’s just going to be based on ME. First off your MC is well written however your writing style sucks ass. You keep doing flash forwards and flashbacks continuously and it messes with the flow of the story. You clearly show in the first few cycles that Sam went insane and then regained his sanity after being stuck in what was an endless loop and explained how he became overpowered.
Although this makes sense the plot line after leaving earth is jumping all over the place. Other than that it’s a good story might want to take a couple days and give a good looking over because there are spelling mistakes. For one you misspelled Thessia. All in all the story has potential but needs polishing.
First thing first, English is not my main language, so there's that. I do try my best using the tools I have at hand to improve but there's a limit on what I can do.
Regarding the writing style, I write as a hobby, and honestly, I have no time to improve my writing skills, as my studies take most of my time. I do my best trying to write a cohesive story and in doing so, I think the flashbacks and flashforwards are a good addition, as it helps me a lot, but I could be wrong.
As for the grammar errors, I can't do much about that. First: I write the chapter in my main language;
So, even though I do try my best, some small mistakes might still happen and unless I pay for a premium or for an editor, those small mistakes may pass and I rely on the reader to fix them.
My goal when writing is to put down the ideas I have on my mind and maybe inspire others to write something too, as if I could do it so could them. Also, if you go back to play ME, watch TWD, or play GOW, because of my fics, that would be amazing too.
After taking a break for a few months after ending my last fanfic, I'm back with another one!
I appreciate any feedback and hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoy writing it.
Ey got that pc fixed
I can finaly write again, thanks for checking on me.
BTW, nice new fic you posted, I liked it a lot.
For those unaware, my PC broke down. It already had a fucked up battery, but one day it suddenly (!) stopped turning it on and when we tried, it smelt like something was burning inside. I expected that it would stop working, but I still don't have the spare cash to buy a new one, so no new chapters for now. I'm still writing on my phone, but I'll only post new chapters when I buy a new PC.
Thanks for reading my Fic, and ( hopefully) see yall soon!
El'lo author, here's a valentine quote for you o this valentine day.
"A friend who is far away is sometimes much nearer than one who is at hand."
Currently, I write 3 stories. 2 of them I post here,and 1 is exclusive to Patreon, but I plan to release here later ( Go check it out and see if you like the premise!).
My plan is to release 2 chapters a week for The Green Arrow and Reincarnated as Poseidon in GOW.
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A newbie writer who is not a native English speaker, so please bear with me.
GOW fic: COMPLETED
TWD fic: COMPLETED
Green Arrow fic: Hiatus
Evil Dead fic: COMPLETED
Mass Effect fic: Ongoing
| Series: | 5 |
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| Total Words: | 697,098 |
| Total Pageviews: | 333,682 |
| Reviews Received: | 10 |
| Readers: | 1,993 |
| Followers: | 37 |
