Well, I should start moving towards The Dark Lord and defeat him. I moved well towards The Dark Lord, tried to. Sigh, how am I going to save the realm when I can't even move? I mean, I'm a rock with soul powers.
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Uh, I guess I can make spiritual defenses, wait I can use Spiritual Physicality to make defenses, against The Dark Lord. I almost forgot about the technique.
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Fucking finally! After who knows how long, I have made a flawless ward around the realm so that almost no one can enter. Is it even strong enough against The Dark Lord? I guess I have to improve the ward.
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Well, that took shorter than I thought. I guess I also have to prepare some defensive weapons, after all, The Dark Lord might break the ward if we don't have a way to repel The Dark Lord.
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Fucking finally. Now that millions of spirit turrets that can heavily injure a soul have been implemented. I can finally take a rest and not worry about the ward.
"Haha! The portal truly worked! Now I can terrorize the realm and defeat its defenders for The Dark Lord!"
So after who knows how long of preparation. A mere fucking PORTAL got through all of it. Oh, come on!
It would be better to write ks chapters even if it takes a little longer, because it didn't make sense to me
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@AGriamore You commented that the chapter was short and without enough description because you did it in a hurry, it is better to take it easy even if it takes longer because of the time to think about the details
@Shinji Well, I was planning to edit it a bit.
And when I meant a bit a meant probably more than a bit.
@AGriamore Understandable
@Shinji yeah after all it's just one hundred words with only two characters.
@AGriamore Want me to be honest in criticizing you about the story now? It will be a criticism that may sound harsh but if you accept it you can improve your performance…
@Shinji Yeah Constructive Criticism is REALLY NEEDED.
@Shinji You should've seen my last work...
@Shinji It was a nightmare. I'm surprised at how much better I am than before that... monstrosity I created.
@Shinji hello?
@AGriamore Sorry I had to do better, I'll start the criticism: You don't give enough details in the story to create an environment, in the case of this, the feelings of the protagonist his confusion in reincarnation, his shock in turning a stone and finally his ideas to use his abilities . So, your story is missing with descriptions and thoughts that give flavor to a story, experience a new prologue or a second chapter in the first old, veja. differently. AND NEVER FORGET NOT TO DO IN HURRY EVER, advice from a colleague who has written stories and knows senpais in the area
@Shinji thanks. Might have to do a rewritten version of this story when I get better at writing.
@Shinji Honestly I just do this for fun.
@AGriamore Most do for similar reasons, but one thing that would be interesting would be to add these details because you as the author have the mental image of a lot, if not everything, I would love to know more