
“Wake up!”
Something shook me hard.
“Wake up!”
I groaned and forced my eyes open.
“I’m up… I’m up,” I muttered.
The first thing I saw was a girl standing over me.
Pink hair. Bright eyes. Way too lively.
She smiled the moment I looked at her.
“Finally. I thought you were dead.”
I pushed myself up slowly, holding my head.
…I should be dead.
That thought hit harder than anything else.
The last thing I remembered was a nuke going off.
And yet here I was.
Alive.
I looked around.
Small room. Wooden walls. Simple setup.
Not my world.
Definitely not my world.
“Who are you?” I asked.
“The name’s Erin,” she said with a grin. “What about you?”
“Ren,” I said. “Nice to meet you… I guess.”
I stood up and checked my body.
No burns.
No damage.
Like nothing ever happened.
Yeah… something was wrong.
“Where did you find me?” I asked.
“In the street,” she said. “You were completely out cold. I thought you were one of the bandits.”
I let out a small laugh.
“Bandit, huh? No. I’d rather fight them.”
She studied me for a moment.
“You don’t feel like a bad person,” she said.
I looked at her.
“That’s a risky judgment.”
She shrugged.
“I’m usually right.”
I walked over to my gear and started putting everything back on.
“So what gave it away?” I asked.
“The bandits all look the same,” she said. “Leather jackets. Devil face on the back. And they all have a tattoo.”
“What kind of tattoo?”
“An albatross.”
I paused.
“A bird?”
She nodded.
I laughed.
“They really went from freedom… to devils.”
She blinked.
“…Yeah, that’s weird now that you say it.”
I adjusted my jacket and looked at her.
“How do I look?”
She smiled.
“Like a ninja from an old story.”
“I’ll take it.”
As I moved around the room, I noticed a table filled with pictures.
I walked over.
“Who are these?”
Erin’s expression changed instantly.
“…People from the village,” she said quietly. “The bandits killed them.”
I didn’t say anything.
I picked up another photo.
A woman.
“Your mom?”
She smiled, but her eyes watered.
“Yeah. She was strong.”
Her hands tightened.
“She fought back when they came.”
She looked down.
“I couldn’t.”
I grabbed another photo.
A small boy.
“Younger brother?”
Her face lit up… then dropped.
“They took him.”
I felt something twist in my chest.
“They say he’s alive,” she said. “But I don’t believe it.”
I knew that look.
The kind people make when they’re trying to believe a lie.
She grabbed my sleeve.
“I can’t do anything on my own,” she said.
Her grip tightened.
“But you can.”
Her voice shook.
“So please… don’t walk away.”
I stayed quiet.
I just got out of a war.
I died.
I should have stayed dead.
And yet…
Here I was.
Again.
I tightened my grip on my sword.
“Fine,” I said.
I looked her in the eyes.
“If this world wants a fight…”
My voice steadied.
“Then I’ll give it one.”
Erin slowly reached for my hand.
“HELP! THEY’RE TRYING TO KILL ME!”
We both froze.
Then I smiled.
“Guess I don’t have to wait.”
“Let’s go.”



Thank you for the help first time im trying to write a story that goes into a little depth ha-ha. I shall try to impliment the stuff for future chapters!
No worries, I am just sofa analyst who is too lazy to write things himself but eager to give constructive critique when not too lazy
@Vinnaka well again I appreciate it!
Ok, first chapter was okay, a little bit world building and some uncommon start. I mean, not each story start with nuke going blow up.
But this chapter kinda weird. Dude woke up, possibly thinking that he survived somehow? But what's with his 'sword'? Was he sword users in original world? Did he got transported with his full equipment?
A little bit details to explain such small things would be helpful to understand situation and MC's train of thoughts. Because without it it just looks like he isn't human but just scripted NPC who woke up and started to act according to his programming.