Yello! guys it's me JDC, right now, I will ask you some stuff about my novel: A Galactic Admiral In A Medieval planet. What you like and what you don't, what I can change, if you have some spare time please answer my questions, if you can't, it's okay. You guys can also ask me about the story in return or if you want.
1. What do you think about the pacing? Too fast? Normal? Slow?
2. What do you think about the MC? (Arthur Kliest)
3. What do you think about the characters? are they annoying or just right?
4. I still haven't thought about a heroine. (lol, I won't focus on romance just yet though.)
5. What do you think of the story so far? do you like it? does it have any problems? or nah?
That's about it, if you want to ask any questions about the story, please comment.
And that about wraps this up. Thanks for reading A Galactic Admiral in a Medieval planet and thanks for your support.
-JDC
i would like to answer some of question
1.- about this its about normal, because you are introducing your mc and its place in the world he is now
2.- i do believe that your mc its too much black and white, also to much dense about its enviroment. perhaps he is genius, also a military admiral, but he needs to loose more his mind set. anyone else would be thinking first in survival, then how to return. so far he is doing that but also he is keeping his alien ( because he is from another planet) way of thinking, and not allowing anyone else get close to him. those chapter were he and his pet kill the guards of the princess were not necesary, because he could have took them without killed them. he was in a very grave need of information, that could have been granted from them.
3.- about those people are a little bit vague, because you have just introduce 3 "people" in the novel the mc, the princess and a wolf. the rest are just killed or have some minor role until now. also the 3 AI of those ships could be more friendly?? the droids also could have some human behavior.
4.- i agree that its still early for that but the firts princess could be one candidate to that, but also her sister would be a target to develop because of hers magic; that you mc its so much focused now.
5.- so far its a good novel, you have a good development and some nice ideas, hovewer also you mc its too much rigid and focused in that white/black mindset. he has 3 all powerfull ships, with its database and resources. one ship its down for repairs. but he could use one to search and explore that star system, and the other to build a base ( in a moon or space station) just to give him some place to go, and expand his forces; also to help repair and build new ships and droids. ( well perhaps you already have that in your plans)
hope to have help you with some of your ideas
I like the idea behind the story and I love op characters, so this has me really going ;)
1. The piecing is totally okay
2. The MC is really kind of crazy, but for me more in decisions like letting the some open fire in a surveillance mission, I mean he should reflect that they not really attack him and it's more like defense on their part
or the flashback last chap when he killed the officer for asking if the order was really okay - kind of like someone mad. But also good room for character development
3. I like all characters so far, best character is the doggo ^^
Für the rest, it's too early to give some feedback.
But reading the story is fun so far, thanks author
Thought I should add in some thoughts as well.
1. Pacing is a bit adequate. We get infos about the different POVs, but flasbacks especially about the civil war might have been a bit too long.
2. About the MC, it's a toughie. He does show strength and ability, but he's a bit on the extreme side sometimes. Promoting a wolf to a military position, thinking of killing the princess because she was annoying etc. Now I approve an MC that kills his enemies and threats, but for someone like the princess, might a bit too on the psychopathic side.
MC is right about taking over the planet, but it would be nice to see a more compassionate side (towards allies and slaves). Him saving the demi-humans would be a big plus.
3. For the moment it's a bit early to say about the characters. But for the princesses, might need to develop their personalities more, the elder one seems a bit too trusting of the MC.
4. I don't see him developing a romance with the princesses, but maybe a future character, like a battle hardened demi human or someone fighting the humans maybe (As they would more easily side with the MC)
5. The story concept is interesting, mixing sci-fi with fantasy isn't too common. Especially with an arsenal behind him ready to wreck havoc on the human kingdoms would be fun to watch.
But I believe more development towards the MC's train of thought, or emotions would be useful. Watching him at his current state sometimes feels a bit too off, as he can be quite brutal for one's taste.