So, there I was, hurtling ... somewhere ... in the trunk of a football player's red Ford Mustang. I had long given up trying to count turns and figure out where I was. My cell phone was in my bookbag, in the front of the car. At this point, I was just along for the ride.
So, this is what it feels like to be Shrodinger's cat. I just hoped I got to live when the big bad wolf opened the box
I don't know how long I was in there, but eventually, Caleb stopped, backed up around a corner, then stopped again. I heard the rumble of a garage door opener, then the car backed up some more. It stopped, the car was shut off, and the garage door struck the concrete garage floor with an ominous thud.
The trunk lid opened. Caleb grabbed my upper arm and dragged me out of the car and through a door.
A woman was standing at a kitchen counter, making something that would have smelled mouth-wateringly good in a normal situation. At the table, a man was sorting through some bills. He looked up as Caleb shoved me to the floor. "Who's that?" he demanded.
"Some guy from college," Caleb replied. "I forget his name. He was in one of my classes last year."
"Well, why is he in our kitchen?"
"He knew I'm a wolf."
"How did he know?"
"I don't know! He just walked up to me and said I was a wolf!"
"I knew it! You screwed up! I knew if you went to college, you'd slip and someone would find out!"
"I didn't screw up!"
"Then, how did he find out?"
"I. Don't. Know!"
I was contemplating half-shifting. That would stop the argument, but I didn't know how they would react. Before I could, my thoughts were interrupted by the sound of another vehicle turning into the driveway.
"There's Avery," Caleb's mother spoke up for the first time.
His father answered, "Good! She can take care of him."
"Honey, you know she doesn't..."
"She will do her duty to the pack!"
A door opened, and a tall, athletic brunette walked in. I knew I should say something, but one look, and my lizard brain said , 'Um, okay!' She was gorgeous.
"What's all the shouting ab..., Oh." She asked, stopping when she noticed me sitting on the floor.
"He somehow figured out your brother is a werewolf," said the father. "Take him to your room and change him!"
"But, Daaad!"
"No buts! Do it!"
As I started to get up, she grabbed me and threw me over her shoulder in a fireman's carry. As she carried me out of the kitchen and up the stairs, she mumbled curses under her breath. She reeked of anger and frustration. And then, as she turned the knob on her door, she said, "He fucking knows I'm gay!"
okay...that was pretty weirdoo....the MC is mute??
all the weirdness of this scene would be resolved if he had been knocked out....
I liked the story so far, but his relationship with the matriarch became very cloudy (pumas form flocks?).
she disappears very abruptly from the story, why the hell is he living in the dorms? what is his relationship with Ashley??
I need to know
he become a cat and puff!!! she is lost!
Thanks for the feedback!
Cougars are not very social animals. Until a few years ago, it was thought they only come together to mate. Recently, it was discovered that they will share prey with a neighbor if they take down something too big to eat by themselves. So, an introverted person whose were-animal also tends to be solitary isn't going to be very comfortable when suddenly thrust into social situations.
He's an engineering student. There's a joke that goes, "How can you tell when you're taking to an extroverted engineer? He's looking at YOUR shoes." Basically, things are happening too fast for him to get a word in.
A lot of universities require students to live on campus for two or even three years. That would have been a good point to make.
He's still working part-time for Ashley. I'll have to work that back in. Would inserting a new chapter or two between two existing ones be confusing?
@MissingLynx Good to know this part of the Cougars' social life.
well it would be totally acceptable for him to keep quiet if it was something unexpected.... he went to talk to a were-wolf, was thrown in the trunk, taken and introduced to at least 2 people. at the very least he would have tried to run away or scream.... no matter how introverted a person is, if they are walk to go talk to someone they will try talk.
as for the addition of chapters, the authors keep reviewing their stories, it's perfectly normal, just let notice later pointing out that hear changes and recommended that readers will check
@MissingLynx about the fact of living in the university fields I did not know that this is required in some universities, I am from Brazil and here we do not have this rule.
and since you didn't specify that i was pretty lost, "why the hell is a were-Cougar going to live in a camp?"
@wann
At your suggestion, I added a chapter called Summer's End, and I'm working on another. I hope it fills in some gaps for you!