Citrus Sun
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There in the silence of days gone by,
While from the sky the late sun dies,
In the cup of my hands, orange orbs lie
And through the blinds, sepia light shines.
When held up in the fading sun rays
It burns like the heat of days ablaze.
And yet if you want to peel the flames off
You'll find that inside is velvet soft.
White stringy veins run across its skin
As though to hold all the taste within.
Yet when tasted there is no trace
Of the sunset curves in sweet embrace.
Then take a piece to set on your tongue;
Pierce through its skin for the juice to run.
Anticipate tartness but there is none,
Just the euphoria of the Citrus Sun.
Written here is a memory of mine --
The first bite of a clementine.
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Love this poem but the third line is a little sketchy, otherwise nice work
hehe How can I rewrite the third line? Thank you for checking out my work! <3
@Michuyu Maybe,
Cupped in my hand an orange orb lies
OR
Cradled in my palm an orange or lies
It's mostly the 'In the cup of my palms' part that I think sounds off but maybe it's just me ;)
@Casualperv Omg! Yes, I can see it now :D Thank you so much! <3
@Michuyu Haha np, if you keep writing poems make sure to post them
@Casualperv I am starting a new poetry book with more recent poetry because these are old hehe. It's called "Poet & Late Nights". They're short, but I'm also including original drawings to the chapters. ^^ (I'll be posting the next poem in that book on Feb. 1st. and then following a steady schedule of three poems per week for the next two weeks, then one or two poems a week onward depending on how much time I have.) I hope you can check it out :)
@Michuyu ofc, you inspired me to post one that I wrote lol. I didn't know people posted poetry on here haha
@Casualperv Oh! I'd love to read it ^^ I didn't think people read poetry on here hehe
@Michuyu Oh hey you don't need to put me in the footnotes. My username doesn't really fit the vibe :D Thanks though
@Casualperv okey ^^