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"Huh where am I", a lone voice drifted in the void.
Everywhere was dark without a speck of light, but if there was light you will notice there was a man drifting in the void.
My name is Damian I am a Nigerian, I'm 24 years old and I was walking home from work.
Today was boring as always, my boss bossing me around as usual.
I am a self-proclaimed Otaku even though I haven't really read many manga's or such, but I have read enough to know that when a truck hits you, you reincarnate automatically with some awesome cheats, and that is exactly what happened.
I was walking back home with the rain pouring heavily on me as I didn't have the foresight to bring an umbrella.
I walked briskly as the pedestrian light turned green and then it happened, I slipped, I thought, wow, it's over, I will die now, however nothing happened.
Then I got up and crossed over to the other side of the street.
I was glad that no truck had hit me as I still liked my world even though I lived my life like a robot without me having any time to rest at all and always being told what to do.
As I was leaving someone running away pushed me straight onto road and I saw a truck coming.
'Bam' I felt a sharp pain but then the pain was gone. That was when I opened my eyes and saw that I was in a dark place I could a void.
I noticed that I was not in control of my body.
And so, I drifted for a long time.
World building is nesseccary to understand the story
Okay I will work on it thanks for the feedback
@Richard ur welcome
Allow me to give some feeedback as well: I would suggest to not start almost every sentence with "I". This makes your story feel more like a laundry list than an actual story.
Okay I will work on using the third person view
Also Need spaces,... Of your story, S kind of heavy if you read just with a paragraph so spaces to tell the weather is also important for code with the experiences, But this is just a recommendation
Okay thanks for the feedback I will improve